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Re: Shadows Of Bullworth Discussion & Comments
« Reply #75 on: January 07, 2014, 04:19:49 PM »
Hohohoho, don't forget me, my friend. I'm one of the trio. Anyways, I'm finishing my exams on 23rd January, then I'll have a vacation. I can talk then.

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Re: Shadows Of Bullworth Discussion & Comments
« Reply #76 on: January 13, 2014, 01:45:15 AM »
Well since SOB is being dead I'll try to make up time to finish up my upcoming post then send it to Alexo for fixes.

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Re: Shadows Of Bullworth Discussion & Comments
« Reply #77 on: January 13, 2014, 02:35:39 AM »
Though I feel like writing, I also DON'T feel like writing....... It's, more or less, laziness to write on my half.

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Re: Shadows Of Bullworth Discussion & Comments
« Reply #78 on: January 13, 2014, 10:06:19 AM »
I wish somebody would do something here.   :(

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Re: Shadows Of Bullworth Discussion & Comments
« Reply #79 on: January 14, 2014, 01:25:16 AM »
^ There we are, I did something..... Not really happy with the post, but something really needed to be done.

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Re: SOB Discussion & Comments
« Reply #80 on: January 14, 2014, 11:51:41 AM »
Take it that first segment was a dream sequence ?

The post wasn't bad....Maybe a few minor alterations could be made. 
But you can do that anytime, just modify what you don't like, or re-wrire in spots.
I do that myself after I post sometimes, mostly right then as I do a final read-through, but sometimes days or weeks later. 

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Re: SOB Discussion & Comments
« Reply #81 on: January 14, 2014, 08:36:04 PM »
^ It is indeed a dream sequence, it's metaphorical for particular....... Issues that Phillip faced / IS facing..... Those will be more explained in future posts.

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Re: SOB Discussion & Comments
« Reply #82 on: January 14, 2014, 09:33:04 PM »
Yeah, figured so.  Just keep posting.
 
I'm planning to cut down on my post's lengths on my story.....maybe down to 500 words or so.  It takes so damn long to write these long segments, gets a bit frustrating at times.  I think, after the revealing stages I'm currently in, and moving on to the negotiations with the Cliques, I'll shorten it out.  Plan to intersperse with those personal character stories (Constantinos, Pinky, Tad, etc...) and those I won't cut down on, but otherwise I'd like to keep the last chapter down to around 60K words.

Problem was, when I really took a look at all I had to wrap up, it far exceeded my plan to end it after the Rescue, so I'm really forced to do a last chapter.  Not that I really mind, but...Ehhh.  Anyway, what I'm saying is, if it gets too much putting up the longer posts, just cut it back and break it into 2 or 3 smaller posts.  Just a thought.

 

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Re: SOB Discussion & Comments
« Reply #83 on: January 24, 2014, 11:26:50 PM »
Why ya guys write em so long anywho? I wanna get more views before I post all of the story well 1st chapter. But more importantly whats up with SoB?

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Re: SOB Discussion & Comments
« Reply #84 on: January 24, 2014, 11:35:04 PM »
Why ya guys write em so long anywho?

Ummm.......... Why are all books / novels "so long" ??..........  :blank:

I wanna get more views before I post all of the story

Maybe you should try writing in proper & full sentences rather than just a few lazy ones. That's off-putting to readers.


But more importantly whats up with SoB?

Not much?........
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Re: SOB Discussion & Comments
« Reply #85 on: January 24, 2014, 11:48:22 PM »
Why ya guys write em so long anywho?

Ummm.......... Why are all books / novels "so long" ??..........  :blank:

I wanna get more views before I post all of the story

Maybe you should try writing in proper & full sentences rather than just a few lazy ones. That's off-putting to readers.


But more importantly whats up with SoB?

Not much?........

Ahem- wasnt referring to books and novels, i was refrencing your posts. Excuse me, Y'ALLS' posts.

Ahem- My style of writing is my style of writing, don't like it don't read.

Not much- i can tell ya jumped head first i bet.

And how is my scentences small  and non proper? Im open to constructive criticism.
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Re: SOB Discussion & Comments
« Reply #86 on: January 25, 2014, 12:01:07 AM »
1. Yeah, but I was referencing books. I was using that as an example. But anyways, we're cutting down on the length of posts now.

2. Which is why I haven't continued reading your posts. Lol

3. Eh?

Though I'm not going to post a whole essay on constructive criticism yet, one of the main problems in your Fiction is your habit to kind of skim over things without adding much detail or emotion...... Anyhow, don't want to get this topic derailed........

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Re: SOB Discussion & Comments
« Reply #87 on: January 25, 2014, 12:13:58 AM »
 :cheersad:
Why ya guys write em so long anywho ? I wanna get more views before I post all of the story well 1st chapter.

My Story just passed 40K views.  How many views do you want ?

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Re: SOB Discussion & Comments
« Reply #88 on: February 07, 2014, 05:27:18 AM »
"Bullworth FM" ?

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Re: SOB Discussion & Comments
« Reply #89 on: February 07, 2014, 08:38:39 PM »
My Bad, Alex....I posted in the wrong section.  So, I removed it.

Since I;m here, any more new posts coming soon to SOB ?