NES Comments

[Mercury]

Whoa, didn't realize that... I'm gonna try to write as well for my next parts.

[Repo Man]

The school is now full of drug addicts, I guess? And someone made Russell just too retarded.

[BloodChuckZ]

It's not possible to make Russell any more retarded than he already is....

K, guys....Here's the deal....I wanna ask you to hold your storylines till Chapter 4.

I'm close to the finish of Chapter 3....Sorry such a long set-up, but this Chapter ending has been a little complex.  The set-up is finally done, I just need to do the closing scenes, which I hope will be just 2 more posts (or so), and I'll try to finish them up by midnight.

I am sure you will like them.  There is a certain sequence of events that are going to go down to reach the climax.  No one is getting killed, but some are going to get hurt.

I put up 5 posts that I have been working on all week (Start back on the previous page). Stay patient, and we can start a whole new chapter soon.   Wordwise, this has turned into our longest Chapter to date...at about 70,000 words.

[Mike_W]

I can be patient, its worth the wait.

[Mercury]

I just love those last parts... Just awesome. Jake looks like an expert, I strangely kinda want his plan to get success. Love the descriptions too. Karens Dress. Nick's attitude. Tony's cold blood (No pun). Love it all.

[Mike_W]

All the mayhem, its so fantastic!

[Repo Man]

Great! And now it is the Chapter 4? Cool.

As always, I again happen to see something: You made Miss Peters a lot shorter than Burton. I played PC, I don't know if you did, and I can inform she's taller than Burton.

[BloodChuckZ]

^ OK, fixed that.  I just assumed she was shorter.

More to come, Repo.....When you see 'End Of Chapter Three" at the bottom, it will be done.

[BloodChuckZ]

I'm fixing to add the final part.....Some notes...

Nobody is dead, but some are injured....

Derby should be in the Clinic a week.
Tony should be in the Clinic two weeks.
Ray should be in the Clinic a whole month.

Keep these in mind as you write your next parts.....

[Repo Man]

Hey what about some kind of connection between Nick and Jake? Like, they were childhood friends or something, and Nick didn't recognize him in Bullworth.

[Mercury]

If he doesn't recognize him first, OK. But keep in mind Nick used to be in L.A....

[Repo Man]

And Jake?

[Repo Man]

And someone start up the next chapter...Nick's fight with Peanut will happen here and that should be it with his boss fights. Let me do the fight. I can just tell you it won't be just ordinary fist-fighting. Anyway, what's with the queers? Are they back in their respective cliques or what? And now the season is spring, right? When does the American football season start?

[BloodChuckZ]

Norton took over the Greaser Clique, so the boss fight should be with him.  At any rate, there will have to be set up a reason for the fight in the first place.

As to the queers, I'm going to work on a soulition to get them accepted again by their respctive Cliques.  All I can predict is that some will be more forgiving than others. 

The Prep split will stay in place, for now....There is real bad blood between Derby and Tad over Pinky.  I'm foreseeing that once Derby gets out of the clinic, he will want to go to war with the Rockers, but he is severely outnumbered at this point.  That, and the secret protection that is being provided to the Rockers from Harrington & Crabblesnitch will make it difficult.  The truth of that will gradually be revealed as the story goes on.

Not quite spring yet....Still mid-February....Spring is late March, early April.

American Football starts up usually in late August.......

[Repo Man]

I think Norton's even better for a boss fight. Nick would kick Peanut's ass, I think.