NES Comments

[Mercury]

Okay, I understand it's the call of a mod to fix it up, it's done ! You people want to officially edit the Watermelon part too ?

[Mike_W]

Aww man, not the watermellon part

[Repo Man]

An idea: how about that Nick wins the first fight with Damon, therefore Humiliating him (I've written that when you lose in The Hole, you are Humiliated and to bring back your reputation you have to defeat the one who Humiliated you, in The Hole), but they have a rematch later and Damon beats Nick. However, in the third fight, Nick can either beat Damon, or it can be a draw, so no-one is Humiliated. Also, Damon and Nick can develop a friendship after these fights, sorta like Jimmy and Russell.

[BloodChuckZ]

Leave the watermelon thing in, it's just a Stereotype and not an outright racist slur, as I mentioned in another post. Besides, it's damned funny....

Nick should fight Damon only this once, defeating him....Then, as Repo says, make friends with him after the fight, just like Jimmy and Russell.   Do remember that this was how Jimmy gained respect.  Nick has more 'Boss Fights'  to go with others (like Derby), and we need to move the story along, as there are many other plot threads to continue.

[Repo Man]

Alright. Just we gotta figure the way Nick beats Damon, because Mercury sprained his ankle.

[Mercury]

They have to be friends. That can lead to great stories, believe me...

[Mike_W]

Yeah, I agree.  It would be much better to see Nick and Damon become friends.

[Repo Man]

Yeah. Maybe Damon will get to help Nick in later fights, who knows...

[BloodChuckZ]

But not in Boss fights, Nick has to win those on his own.

I envision Nick fighting Derby in the Prep's boxing ring next.....

[BloodChuckZ]

Your orignal ending will still work fine, Repo....Nick has one good ankle to throw that kick on.

If you ever saw "Karate Kid 1" the movie, the character Daniel LaRusso had a hurt leg and still finished off his opponet with a kick......

(If you deleted your ending and didn't save it, I have it).....

[BloodChuckZ]

I have the next part ready to go, after youse guys finish the fight. (I don't want to interupt).

[Repo Man]

Your orignal ending will still work fine, Repo....Nick has one good ankle to throw that kick on.

If you ever saw "Karate Kid 1" the movie, the character Daniel LaRusso had a hurt leg and still finished off his opponet with a kick......

(If you deleted your ending and didn't save it, I have it).....

I remember how my story finished and I watched Karate Kid, but I think that a crane kick would be too much...weak against Damon. I don't know, never tried it. But the first kick I used can be done.

[Mercury]

Nice fight, Vasilije, I liked it... Now I think Chuck had a part to add next right ? Oh, and Chuck, there has to be a mistake in one of your parts. When Tony first meets Nick, he says he's Tony Prince. But he's not. He was named after Tony Prince, that's the point. Useless to say that his name isn't known at all, and doesn't really need to be known.

[BloodChuckZ]

OK....Fixed....But one of the other writers (now gone) also identified Tony this way, back in, maybe Chapter 1 or 2.  I know I saw it somewhere, I'll have to read through the whole thing.

You mabye should give Tony a name....All the other characters have one (even though they aren't used much).....Except, I think, Laurent and those 2 characters Dudeman put in, Geoff and Eddie, and the Rocker Clique, Kurt and his gang.  Since don't like Dudeman is ever gonna be back, I will probably assign them names at some point in the story.

[Mike_W]

Nice work Merc, I like how you sent Nick to get Damon.  I was originally going to have Damon be released in a few days, but I like you're idea better.  This could help build a friendship between Nick and Damon.