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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 03, 2010, 03:52:57 PM
Hey Guys....Here we can post story comments for the Never Ending Story as not to interupt the story line...
 
Karen got accidentally decked by Tony back at post #53, after the fight with Kurt.

Yes, somebody please finish off the Dodgeball Game......Make it good....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 03, 2010, 03:55:47 PM
Sorry Chuck, I already made one of these.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 03, 2010, 03:57:09 PM
Ill try to finish the dodgeball game.
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Post by: Mercury on January 03, 2010, 04:03:07 PM
Edit Post > Delete

To keep the thread clear.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 03, 2010, 04:07:56 PM
I think we may have had the same Idea at the same time there, T-bone.....
 
Makes more sense though, to have it here, next to where the story is at....
 
I didn't post on that other thread, If you want to cancel it....
 
Makes no difference to me, just think a thread here is easier to access from the story & back.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 03, 2010, 04:09:50 PM
Sure, sounds good to me.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 03, 2010, 04:11:01 PM
OK, Cool Deal....Thanks T-Bone.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 03, 2010, 04:12:31 PM
1 question... How do I delete it?
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 03, 2010, 04:16:21 PM
Don't know....Never tried to delete a thread with just one post....
 
I would guess....Just delete your post and maybe the thread will go as well ?
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Post by: Mercury on January 03, 2010, 04:20:15 PM
I think that's the way to do it... If you can't, simply ask DGAF.
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Post by: Mercury on January 03, 2010, 04:32:57 PM
I let you guys continue, time for me to go sleeping... It was my last day of holiday today...
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 03, 2010, 04:47:49 PM
OK Mercury.....Have a good one...Try not to study too hard tomorrow...
 
I wanna do some side stories on the Greasers & Preps, soon as Tony gets his dodgeball game done.........Later.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 03, 2010, 04:58:02 PM
I have classes tomorrow too. The other college gets almost an entire month. We only got 9 days.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 03, 2010, 06:05:16 PM
You got screwed! I don't go back until the end of the month.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 03, 2010, 07:09:35 PM
I know, I got screwed.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 03, 2010, 07:36:08 PM
Do they give you an extra-long spring break or something?
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Post by: T-Bone on January 03, 2010, 07:39:22 PM
Ours is 1 week. I don't know if that's long compared to any other college.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 03, 2010, 07:56:22 PM
I don't even know if my college has a spring break.  I assume they do, but I haven't heard yet.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 03, 2010, 08:47:22 PM
Last year we didn't have a spring break because we had to make it up for snow days.
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 03, 2010, 09:25:41 PM
That sucks,

Last year they shortened our summer break to make up for the days we were out for the hurricane. It was pretty bad we didnt have power for about 2 weeks. NO BULLY BOARD!!!!!!!!AHHHHHH!!!!!!NOOOO!!!!!!!
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Post by: Mike_W on January 03, 2010, 09:40:06 PM
Hurricane?  Are you from Florida, or Texas?
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Post by: T-Bone on January 03, 2010, 10:42:17 PM
They did that to me one year too. 6th grade I think. We added 4 more days to the year, so the finals were on what was supposed to be on the last day of school.
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 03, 2010, 11:42:02 PM
Louisiana, We didnt get the worst of it but we got Flashflooding, Heavy Winds, and Power- knock out!
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 04, 2010, 12:59:30 AM
Heys guys I continued the dodgeball game...!!!!

Srry...T-Bone......I HAD TO!!!!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 05, 2010, 07:15:59 AM
Well...Tony has made up with Karen....Now What ??
Here's some story ideas to keep our story moving along...
 
Story Goals For Tony...........
 
*Get and deliver more Aquaberry stuff to the Preps for more money.
*Find a way to intercept, and take, clothing for the other cliques.
*Get to classes sometime...after all, it’s a school…….
Chem, so he can learn how to make firecrackers -
Shop, to get in better with the Greasers, through Steve-
Photography, to get his Camera (might come in handy)-
Math, to figure out Nerd codes to be used later in the story-
Gym, to solidify, through Karen, his position with the Jocks-
English, to keep up his interaction with Galloway-
Art, to further his relationship with Ms. Phillips-
 
Story Missions For Tony……
 
*Learn where to obtain gunpowder for Firecrackers (swipe from chem class ?)
*Find out how to obtain food to sell to the other students (definitely from town)
*Hiring of Tony by the Nerds for protection from the other cliques.
*Meet with the Greasers, via Steve, and see what he can supply them with.
 
Story Development For Others……
 
*Kurt getting out of Infirmary and gathering the Rockers into a clique.
*Jake staying hidden by day and carrying out his revenge at night.
*Prefects discovering that the ‘care packages’ and clothing has been robbed.
*Karen and Tony’s relationship and other girl’s boyfriend /girlfriend relationships.
 
That will do for a start…We need to keep moving time forward, we’re still in September !
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Post by: dudemann5798 on January 05, 2010, 07:42:37 PM
Lawl, Chuck, you make Kurt seem weak. Anyway, just posted another Kurt happening...might as well check it out so Tony can kick his ass again. Lawl.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 05, 2010, 08:40:36 PM
I think it would be cool if Jimmy or some of the other "thought to be gone" characters made an appearance somewhere in the future.  That would be really cool.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 05, 2010, 08:44:48 PM
I wish one of the R* creators had an account and they used our characters in Bully 2.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 05, 2010, 08:46:28 PM
I know, I keep reading this story, and I then expect to see Jake or Kurt in Bully when I go to play it!
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Post by: T-Bone on January 05, 2010, 08:50:20 PM
So am I. That would be the best.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 05, 2010, 08:53:16 PM
I can't wait to see Bully 2 come out, that is unless Rockstar decides not to after that jackass spilled the beans.


 Post #800
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Post by: T-Bone on January 05, 2010, 08:54:07 PM
Who was that guy? Does he work for R*?
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Post by: Mike_W on January 05, 2010, 09:00:05 PM
He does the music soundtrack or something.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 05, 2010, 09:03:49 PM
What an A-Hole!

Anyways.... Post # 500!!!!

I'M HALFWAY THERE!!!!
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Post by: dudemann5798 on January 05, 2010, 09:19:06 PM
I hope Bully 2 does come out. If not, I'll...I'll...I'll do something. Anyway, it would be cool to see Kurt in Bully 2. Even better, off-line co-op like GTA: SA's. That would be epic.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 05, 2010, 09:21:27 PM
You'll do something eh?
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Post by: dudemann5798 on January 05, 2010, 09:25:39 PM
Depends if I can get to that gun store in time...
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 05, 2010, 10:08:51 PM
Quote from: dudemann5798;75001
Lawl, Chuck, you make Kurt seem weak. Anyway, just posted another Kurt happening...might as well check it out so Tony can kick his ass again. Lawl.

 
On the contrary, dudeman….Kurt is a dangerous character, and is in no way weak.
He has just been surprised by Tony a couple of times…And now, it seems that the mostly solitary rockers are beginning to loosely band together into a new clique because of the rough treatment that has landed one of their own in the Infirmary.
I foresee that he will become a very real threat to Tony, and Karen as well…..
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Post by: Mercury on January 06, 2010, 12:17:20 PM
If you had taken a little time to write a bit about him, we probably won't be in the infirmary... But wait, he'll be back, still dangerous !
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Post by: Mercury on January 06, 2010, 03:52:32 PM
Laurent began to drink at this night... But I decided to save him. I don't want him to get caught, no.. Just to take a secondary direction : alcohol in Bullworth ? But Tony has others things to do.

BTW, I modified a bit the greaser territory, by adding this shelter. Can you see where I placed it ?
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Post by: dudemann5798 on January 06, 2010, 04:05:48 PM
Quote from: CHUCKX53;75058
On the contrary, dudeman….Kurt is a dangerous character, and is in no way weak.
He has just been surprised by Tony a couple of times…And now, it seems that the mostly solitary rockers are beginning to loosely band together into a new clique because of the rough treatment that has landed one of their own in the Infirmary.
I foresee that he will become a very real threat to Tony, and Karen as well…..


Oh, too late for the new clique thing...

Alright, Kurt will show y'all!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 06, 2010, 04:45:22 PM
Quote from: Mercury;75084
Laurent began to drink at this night... But I decided to save him. I don't want him to get caught, no.. Just to take a secondary direction : alcohol in Bullworth ? But Tony has others things to do.

BTW, I modified a bit the greaser territory, by adding this shelter. Can you see where I placed it ?


I can see where Laurant could get a bit of a drinking problem....And the Greasers are already drinking, right ?

I got a fair idea where you put the small Greaser shelter, yes...
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 06, 2010, 07:33:14 PM
All Right...Mercury, Dudeman, T-bone, everybody......

The stage is set for a huge Battle Royale....

Who is a friend...Who is the enemy....

Gonna be a frigging free for all.....

How many casualities before the Prefects show up...

And maybe, they too will be outnumbered and overwhelmed...
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Post by: Mike_W on January 06, 2010, 07:35:38 PM
I liked the part where Jake broke into Trent's room.  He really gave Trent a piece of his mind!
 Oh, and that part where Tony met Karen behind the dorm, Tony said he brought the spud gun for protection, when he said there was something else in his pocket I thought it would be well, figure it out!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 06, 2010, 08:10:27 PM
That was the best laugh I've had all frigging DAY......

Thanks, Mike.

Say, you should write some of the story.....

Try it.....It kinda grows on you......
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Post by: Mike_W on January 06, 2010, 08:25:09 PM
I would if I was any good at story writing, I enjoy reading it though.  I still think that there should be some references to old characters though.  Like all the prefects from Bully were most likely Seniors.  This means that they would have graduated. Who became prefects?  It would be kinda cool to see old characters as they are after Jimmy is gone, and a possible appearance of Jimmy later in the story ;)
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Post by: T-Bone on January 06, 2010, 08:39:12 PM
I'll make sure that happens...
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Post by: Mike_W on January 06, 2010, 08:44:24 PM
Fuckin' A!
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Post by: Mercury on January 07, 2010, 03:04:17 AM
"What's the deal, Pinwheel ?"

This fuckin' sentence make me laugh everytime I hear it !
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 07, 2010, 04:46:42 AM
It's Classic Greaser...Classic.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 07, 2010, 09:49:41 AM
"What's you're tale, nightengale?" so gay, yet so funny!
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Post by: Mercury on January 07, 2010, 10:43:58 AM
Get ready for the train of pain ! Tchu tchu !
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Post by: Mike_W on January 07, 2010, 07:11:09 PM
Besides the Tylenol, does Trent have cough serup in there? lol
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 07, 2010, 07:30:34 PM
I'm sure that someone has some somewhere....

After all...There's a Pharmacy in town...!!!
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Post by: Mike_W on January 07, 2010, 09:44:48 PM
Yeah, but did you get my reference there? ;)
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 07, 2010, 10:49:11 PM
Question Time???

How come...if yhis is supposed to be Bullworth in the future then why do half of the characters still have the same names as the ones that were in the game?
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 08, 2010, 04:50:58 AM
The story appears to be set just a year after Jimmy left Bullworth, who is now in prison for attempted murder on Gary.  So, while some of the older kids have left, many are still there, for any high school has different grade levels, different ages, Etc…Plus, there are some new students, as you can tell…The new Rocker clique is all new kids, and they are a rather small clique.

Plus, we have multiple authors, all giving different slants to the story…So there’s bound to be a few glitches, here and there….Just like in the game.
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Post by: Mercury on January 08, 2010, 12:01:59 PM
Chuck said it all ! And, well said for the glitches thing ;)
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Post by: T-Bone on January 08, 2010, 06:12:18 PM
This story is going better than I would ever have guessed.
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Post by: Mercury on January 08, 2010, 06:16:53 PM
Really ? That's a good thing !
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Post by: T-Bone on January 08, 2010, 06:33:50 PM
Where do the Rockers hang out?
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Post by: dudemann5798 on January 08, 2010, 06:48:51 PM
At the Autoshop with the Greasers...
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Post by: Mercury on January 08, 2010, 07:21:52 PM
But they've JUST been kicked out ! Thanks to... Tony, like always !
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Post by: Mercury on January 09, 2010, 12:21:45 PM
Oh, and sorry Dudemann, I was finishing the part of T-Bone... You can put your post after mine if you want.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 09, 2010, 08:50:11 PM
Quote from: dudemann5798;75185
At the Autoshop with the Greasers...


Thanks, I'll edit that in the story.
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Post by: Mercury on January 10, 2010, 02:27:12 PM
Please, people, this is important !

Tony has to deliver a new skirt to Pinky in the Girls Dorm, the next night.
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Post by: Mercury on January 10, 2010, 02:28:44 PM
Oh, and for the boys who didn't get it, the term parkour is the sport himself, that includes the wallrun, the roll and other climbing skills.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 10, 2010, 03:57:04 PM
That's good to know, Mercury....I had never heard of that term before.

Posted my last before I read yours here, and forgot about Pinky....So I fixed the ending, and Tony is now headed over to the Girl's Dorm with Pinky's skirt....

He will have to sneak in or wake somebody up......
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Post by: Mercury on January 10, 2010, 04:38:56 PM
In fact, the parkour is a french invention. I remember Tony Hawk's American Wasteland : in this game, a guy teaches you how to do wallruns, rolls... And has a very strong french accent. That's how I came up with Laurent !
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 10, 2010, 05:07:22 PM
Yeah i remember that french guy in beverly hills???!!!???!!!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 10, 2010, 11:26:03 PM
I came up his name by going to look at at list of French names. That one sounded cool, so I picked it for your character...

BTW, speaking of names, where did you come up with 'Mercury' ?  You like the planet, the God, or the metal ?
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Post by: Mercury on January 11, 2010, 11:39:16 AM
I can't remember, dude... It was a long time ago ; I should have been referring to the chemical element.

BTW, people, I need a little help to be better in story writing... I need some synonyms of the word see. Thanks !
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 11, 2010, 12:21:55 PM
Here you go, Mercury.....This will give you a lot of choices for Synonyms.....

http://thesaurus.reference.com/


As to the word SEE, they have these entries.............

Main Entry:  see   Part of Speech: verb

Definition:  perceive with eyes
Synonyms:  be apprised of, beam, behold, catch a glimpse of, catch sight of, clock, contemplate, descry, detect, discern, distinguish, espy, examine, eye, flash, gape, gawk, gaze, get a load of, glare, glimpse, heed, identify, inspect, lay eyes on, look, look at, make out, mark, mind, note, notice, observe, pay attention to, peek, peep, peer, peg, penetrate, pierce, recognize, regard, remark, scan, scope, scrutinize, sight, spot, spy, stare, survey, take notice, view, watch, witness

Definition:  appreciate, comprehend
Synonyms:  appraise, ascertain, behold, catch, catch on, conceive, descry, determine, discern, discover, distinguish, envisage, envision, espy, experience, fancy, fathom, feature, feel, find out, follow, get, get the drift, get the hang of, grasp, have, hear, imagine, investigate, know, learn, make out, mark, mind, note, notice, observe, perceive, ponder, realize, recognize, remark, study, suffer, sustain, take in, think, tumble, undergo, understand, unearth, view, visualize, weigh

Definition:  accompany, guide
Synonyms:  associate with, attend, bear company, call, come by, come over, conduct, consort with, date, direct, drop by, drop in, encounter, escort, go out with, go with, keep company with, lead, look up, meet, pilot, pop in, receive, route, run into, shepherd, show, speak to, steer, stop by, stop in, take out, usher, visit, walk

Definition:  visualize
Synonyms:  anticipate, conceive, divine, envisage, envision, fancy, feature, foresee, foretell, imagine, picture, realize, think, vision
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Post by: Mercury on January 11, 2010, 12:44:25 PM
Much more as I needed, thanks alot ! Now my writing will be more pleasant ! :)
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 11, 2010, 01:02:33 PM
Put that Thesaurus site on your Favorites list, and you can look up any word when you get stuck....

Real nice addition to the Girl's fight.......You got a real knack for this........:cool:
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Post by: Mercury on January 11, 2010, 01:06:03 PM
Yeah, haha ! I think this war between Pinky and Karen will be interesting, and will give me much to write... ;)

What has Tony to do next ? No other deals for now, it would be too soon.
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Post by: Mercury on January 11, 2010, 01:12:01 PM
BTW, I really begin to find all this story writing sooo cool ! As I wrote the deal with the preppies, talking about the skirt delivery, I would never have thought that I would lead to a girls war... All comes with an impressive fluidity ! So... Human.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 11, 2010, 01:36:18 PM
Exactly....Each story element is a set-up for what is to come....This is why I like writing stories....When the Ideas flow and you add new elements, it opens up infinite possibilites where the story can lead....

I have to go back and check often, so I don't overlook missed stuff....Like Pinky's skirt...I saw your post here right after I put in the part about Tony moving the stash, and saw your Pinky part, thought...Oh, Shit, yeah...Went back and checked, then made some changes to mine to set up that part of Tony taking her the skirt for you...

Then, you threw in a few surprises there, and it had me going...Whoaaaa...Far Out !!!
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 11, 2010, 04:22:40 PM
when the story was first starting I wrote large part of it but...I forgot the to refresh the page and it turns out that the part I wrote was already written...
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Post by: Mercury on January 11, 2010, 04:27:27 PM
Any detail is important, because each one can lead to another direction... I just love it ! This story is just... Never gonna end ! ;)
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Post by: Mercury on January 11, 2010, 05:51:08 PM
To Dudemann5798 :

Be careful to read previous posts so that it sticks with the story. We had written that students could only go in town 2 hours per day - it's impossible for the Rockers to hang out there, sorry for you.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 11, 2010, 06:37:22 PM
Well, I fixed that, Mercury.....I just had them expelled.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 11, 2010, 07:13:27 PM
I like how this story is turning out.  Too bad Jimmy couldn't get into the Nerd's hide-out in the real game.  Then he could commit map abuse!
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Post by: T-Bone on January 11, 2010, 08:50:16 PM
Hey Mike, are you gonna post to the story? We could use a little help.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 11, 2010, 10:46:38 PM
Dude, if I tried to add to the story I would undoubtedly fuck it up.  I'm really not that great at story telling.
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Post by: Mercury on January 12, 2010, 11:54:43 AM
I'll transfer Hopkins to a local prison ; too much advices would be too easy.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 12, 2010, 12:03:14 PM
Jimmy should make an appearance later in the story at the school or something.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 12, 2010, 01:07:24 PM
I think Mercury is on the right track...Jimmy should already be at the Prison...Maybe just in Bullworth Town for a court hearing or something, and has to be returned.....

Johnny Vincent is in Prison, too...Haven't found out why yet.....

Maybe way later in the story, they could be released on Parole....I would think towards the end of the school year, perhaps....Long ways off, we're not even to Halloween yet.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 12, 2010, 01:10:30 PM
Jimmy seems like the type that would try to break out though....;)
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 12, 2010, 01:28:23 PM
Yeah.....That's an idea....He already broke out Johnny once....

Mayby they could break out together, and be on the lam....

Don't know why they would choose to hang around Bullworth world though...
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 12, 2010, 02:27:20 PM
Mercury, we need to define Pete’s role at the school....Something like “Student Dean”....

His job would be to meet regular with the leaders from each faction and mediate peace.

He is still a student, but non-clique, as before.

Clique leaders so far are -----

Bullies.......Trent.
Preps.........Derby.
Greasers....Peanut.
Nerds........Melvin.
Jocks........Ted.
Rockers.....Kurt.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 12, 2010, 03:23:42 PM
Jimmy would hang around Bullworth because he has nowhere lese to go.  His mother went away, and Jimmy hates her and his new dad.
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Post by: Mercury on January 12, 2010, 03:31:34 PM
I saw Pete as a "clique heat" regulator too, and a sort of vice-director : I mentioned him in the decision of the shelter near the school gates.
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 12, 2010, 04:08:21 PM
The whole..."Johhny Vincent in prison thing"

I wrote in one of my posts that he had gone to hot rod school in michigan...But i can edit it...
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Post by: Mercury on January 12, 2010, 04:27:41 PM
Don't do it. We're just discussing it now, not applying yet ! ;)
I guess it's my turn to write...
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 13, 2010, 12:32:37 AM
My Bad, Bully-Freak....I spaced it....I'll take care of it....
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Post by: Mercury on January 13, 2010, 11:53:36 AM
Please, people, don't write anything for now, I'll be writing the Carnival Date !
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 13, 2010, 01:41:58 PM
Go For It, Mercury............
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 13, 2010, 02:56:09 PM
So far, we have had 8 different authors to the story....In Order...

Mercury
Miss Ordered
T-Bone
Peter
Bully Freak
Dudeman
Chuckx
Trent

We are missing Miss Ordered, apparently to internet connection problems, and Peter, who only had a couple of posts, for what the hell ever reason.
So, it is just us 6, as I don't see any new authors anytime soon....
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 13, 2010, 07:24:26 PM
Just read the carnival post.....Looks Great...!!

2 things......

Over here, we call the 'Big Wheel' a "Ferris Wheel"....

And does "Salute" = "Greeted" or "Greeting" in your country ?
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Post by: dudemann5798 on January 13, 2010, 08:30:41 PM
I'll stick with the Kurt stuff...
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 13, 2010, 08:47:04 PM
That's Cool....He's got a girlfriend now....Can't be all bad...
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Post by: Mike_W on January 13, 2010, 08:53:15 PM
Other than the fact that she's a walking talking case of HIV.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 13, 2010, 09:00:56 PM
Why do you think Kurt has his condoms handy ??

ROFL....!!!!!!!!
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Post by: Mike_W on January 13, 2010, 11:05:36 PM
That doesn't mean he used e'm.  Who knows, maybe they ripped.  There's something for the story, Kurt and Lola having a bastard baby! hehehe
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 14, 2010, 01:19:22 AM
Don't be giving dudemann any Ideas......She's liable to become an Octa-mom...
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 09:17:16 AM
They'll have a baby with a daddy in each clique?! :o
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Post by: Mike_W on January 14, 2010, 10:52:03 AM
Quote from: tbone360;75412
They'll have a baby with a daddy in each clique?! :o


 That's some crazy-ass shit!
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Post by: Mercury on January 14, 2010, 11:44:35 AM
Thank you, Chuck ! I didn't know about the Ferris Wheel, and i meant "greetings", yeah.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 14, 2010, 12:51:06 PM
Some History on the Ferris Wheel......

“The original Ferris Wheel was designed and constructed by George Washington Gale Ferris, Jr. as a landmark for the 1893 World Columbian Exposition in Chicago, Illinois, USA. The term Ferris wheel later came to be used generically for all such structures.”

The article also states that it is also known as the "Big Wheel" or the "Observation Wheel" in other parts of the world, so it is understandable that you had never heard the American term for it before.

I would like for you to finish out 'Pinky's Date' if you would....I'm going to be busy offline most of today, and will check in tonight (in about 10 hours)....I'm going to focus on Jake and his gathering of the various materials he needs to carry out his evil plan....Plus, I'm looking forward to see if Tony resists Pinky's advances, or gives in to them for the sake of gaining any information he can use and also keeping his deals with the Preps intact, since they represent the most money going to Tony's enterprises right now.....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 01:13:13 PM
Chuck's been studying up on world history.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 14, 2010, 01:16:00 PM
Smartass! :p
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 14, 2010, 01:18:34 PM
Better than being a Dumbass.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 01:19:03 PM
How true that is!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 14, 2010, 01:23:51 PM
Remember that kid back in HS that kept spouting off information about all kinds of weird shit ?

Well...I was one of those kids....

Still am, sometimes....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 01:25:25 PM
I have useless shit still in my head somewhere.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 14, 2010, 01:28:53 PM
I have so many useless facts I could start my own "Brain Wiki"....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 01:29:48 PM
Haha. We could create a business.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 14, 2010, 01:31:12 PM
Yeah...."Worthless Trivia, Inc."
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 01:34:59 PM
Charge $2 per question.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 01:35:34 PM
Who wants to take the quiz first?
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Post by: Mercury on January 14, 2010, 02:10:04 PM
Nice idea... Yeah, but all you keep into your brain could be divided in... 184 sections ?
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 02:16:45 PM
See. Everybody has useless information in there somewhere. :smile:
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Post by: Mercury on January 14, 2010, 02:18:49 PM
Seems to be a good tricks to earn money !
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 02:19:55 PM
That's the plan.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 14, 2010, 04:20:26 PM
Quote from: CHUCKX53;75463
I have so many useless facts I could start my own "Brain Wiki"....


 I have moments like that.  There was this one time my mom was looking at pictures of a city taken from a blimp.  She wanted to show me and she was saying that she couldn't figure out where it was.  Then I said "That's San Francisco"  
  I blew her mind.  She siad "How the hell do you know that?"  to that I said "Because...there's the Transamerica Pyramid, the Oakland-Bay bridge...."
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 06:16:47 PM
I love it when I do that because I don't even see it coming.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 14, 2010, 06:56:25 PM
You don't know when you know something?
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Post by: T-Bone on January 14, 2010, 07:21:34 PM
No it's weird.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 14, 2010, 09:25:07 PM
I just read the part about the used rubber.  That's nasty, who the hell keeps a used condom in their backpack?
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 15, 2010, 12:48:13 AM
Someone who's thrifty......
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Post by: Mercury on January 15, 2010, 12:10:09 PM
Or adept of recyclables...
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 15, 2010, 03:00:41 PM
Tony is having some bad dreams lately....Could have something to do with Halloween....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 15, 2010, 10:53:10 PM
About the condom thing... I don't know why I said he still had it. Maybe he's too poor tho buy another one.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 15, 2010, 11:20:35 PM
That's just fucked up though.  Carrying around a used rubber full of "baby yogurt".  If the next person he banged found out it was used  she would probably kill him.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 15, 2010, 11:35:03 PM
That's why she can't find out.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 16, 2010, 09:12:38 AM
I just read Chuck's part about Algie loosing one of his nuts.... OUCH!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 16, 2010, 04:06:39 PM
DISCLAIMER -- "No actual characters were harmed during the writing of this segment"
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Post by: Mike_W on January 16, 2010, 04:57:20 PM
-no characters, but maybe some pride....and sex drive.  I guess that Algie will only have half as much mayonaise in his pants!
  I like the part about Pete and the panties.  The liitle clepto. ;)
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 16, 2010, 06:00:25 PM
The stage is set.....Let the explosions, destruction, panic, fighting and mayhem begin....
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Post by: Mike_W on January 16, 2010, 06:15:46 PM
I think you should tell that part of the story, it would be your specialty.  Especially after the way you told that one about Jake and Algie.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 16, 2010, 06:45:51 PM
I've already written a bunch of segments leading up to Halloween Night....I would like to see if the others can pick up the story threads for the setting of the bombs in the seven areas already mentioned, The explosions, The battles that are sure to follow between the cliques.
There are multipe side stories that can happen, like Karen catching Pinky and beating the shit outta her, Kurt trying to identify Tony to maybe go after him, How the different cliques will react to the bombing, what kind of panic will occur, If Tony will be able to prevent Karen, or anybody else, from getting injured......

Remember, Everybody is masked, so it will be hard for them to right off identify each other.....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 16, 2010, 07:30:33 PM
Wow. That was very specific.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 16, 2010, 08:02:37 PM
see, I think Chuck already has this one.  I don't think anyone could tell this part of the story like Chuck could.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 16, 2010, 10:09:23 PM
I know for sure I can't.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 16, 2010, 10:10:27 PM
Chuck would make it the best.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 16, 2010, 11:12:52 PM
Well...I'll wait for a bit and see what Mercury wants to do...

There's so many multipe stories here, And it will take some time to write each segment.

The ones I would like to do would be Karen cathcing Pinky out and just flat-out kicking that little bitch's ass.....And maybe Jake planting the bombs in sequence, seting the timers for them to all go off after he is done....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 16, 2010, 11:16:03 PM
I don't think Mercury was on today. We'll have to postpone the story til tomorrow.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 16, 2010, 11:21:04 PM
Well, he's in a way different time zone...Like 7 hours over there in France....He might be on about 3 in the morning, our time....
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Post by: Mike_W on January 16, 2010, 11:22:19 PM
Mercury is usually on at about 11:00 AM or noon in my timezone....which would be about 5 or 6 in the afternoon for him.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 16, 2010, 11:23:31 PM
Ya. I usually only see him at around 11:30 at night when I'm on.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 16, 2010, 11:29:26 PM
Comming up on that now here....Should be like 6:30 or 7:30 in the morning where he's at...
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Post by: Mike_W on January 16, 2010, 11:32:06 PM
It's about 11:30 where I am.  For Chuck it's probably 10:30 and for tbone most likely 9:30 in Montana.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 16, 2010, 11:53:08 PM
Oh....Didn't know that's where T-bone was at...I know somebody out there....
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Post by: Mike_W on January 16, 2010, 11:54:04 PM
He mentioned it once.  That's right tbone, your cover is blown!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 16, 2010, 11:55:04 PM
Everywhere, my royal ass....
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Post by: Mike_W on January 16, 2010, 11:57:30 PM
yup, likely location.  He may hide behind other's pictures, but we know where he lives!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 17, 2010, 12:09:30 AM
At least it's narrowed down to the fourth-largest state.....
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Post by: Mike_W on January 17, 2010, 12:16:45 AM
Or like when people give their location as "a place", it's like no shit sherlock I'd be surprised if you weren't from a place.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 17, 2010, 12:41:08 AM
Unless they're a Alien....And unless you count Outer Space as a 'Place'.......

Shit, now we messed this up...Mercury won't go back a page to see where this started in relation to the story....
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Post by: Mike_W on January 17, 2010, 12:42:45 AM
Sure he will, unless he feels lazy tomorrow.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 17, 2010, 01:01:35 AM
Well....got to make sure...I hijacked my own thread....

HEY, MERCURY, GO BACK AND READ THE LAST PAGE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

(Oh, and looks like 1100)
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Post by: Mercury on January 17, 2010, 04:39:58 AM
All right, you people have been busy for a little while... Don't worry I'm BACK ! I was just on a karate competition yesterday... Felt too tired to even start my computer.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 17, 2010, 05:04:44 AM
Karate ??  Whoa, better not mess with you......

I'm just popping back in briefly before I crash out....

Gonna be busy today myself....Be back to post in about 18 hours or so.....

Read through the comment posts here and story posts....There's a lot of characters coming together at once....Check you after today........Trust you will be able to understand the timeline I've set up for Halloween night.....
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Post by: Mike_W on January 17, 2010, 10:49:31 AM
Quote from: Mercury;75815
All right, you people have been busy for a little while... Don't worry I'm BACK ! I was just on a karate competition yesterday... Felt too tired to even start my computer.


 Yeah, Chuck and I were busy last night.  That was one long conversation.
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Post by: T-Bone on January 17, 2010, 10:58:03 AM
I was on and then my computer crashed so lucky me, anytime I am trying to get to a certain # of posts my computer screws up.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 17, 2010, 11:17:04 AM
It's probably trying to tell you not to rush things. ;)
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Post by: T-Bone on January 17, 2010, 11:40:12 AM
If it weren't for that I would probably be at about 720 by now.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 17, 2010, 11:42:53 AM
Damn, tell you computer to stop the bullshit, that's a lot post time gone to waste.
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Post by: Mercury on January 17, 2010, 12:22:21 PM
I tried not to forget the NES elements, just let me the description of Pinky's Cat Suit. I have to train in description writing !
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Post by: Mike_W on January 17, 2010, 12:38:49 PM
Pinky's cat suit?  Oh yeah, that's right, Halloween.
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Post by: Mercury on January 17, 2010, 12:46:43 PM
Keep in line !
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 17, 2010, 03:01:57 PM
Just popped in here for a short time....Long enough to post Jake's setting of the Bombs.

They won't go off for at least an hour and a half, enough time for some intruge, and for Karen to find Pinky and beat her ass.

Other sub-stories could go on in that amount of time...Use your Imaginations.

Gotta Go....Back late,late tonight to do the bombing sequences and aftermath....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 17, 2010, 09:41:11 PM
Hopefully nobody loses any nuts in this scene.;)
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Post by: Mike_W on January 17, 2010, 10:45:20 PM
I cringed when I read that.  Life would be meaningless without yo balls..
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Post by: T-Bone on January 17, 2010, 11:41:45 PM
At least he still has one left.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 18, 2010, 12:15:35 AM
His life will only be half as good.  Oh well.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 18, 2010, 06:39:40 AM
Well.....I came back home last night to find nobody posted anything since I left....So, I had some ready and just wrote the rest of Halloween night. Took about 4 or 5 hours, since I'm a slow typist.

Since I have this saved in works, I checked the word count....It's over 50,000

I'm freaking exhausted....Mercury, if you want to still write a 'Cat Costume' description, Pinky's still wearing it....In the Infirmary.

Also, I left Kurt and Lola hanging....I snuck them in, but didn't do anything with them...

Since the gates are bashed open now, and with all the damage, kids will have to stay in town for awhile until the place can be fixed.....School's alright though, can still have classes....Bus the kids in and out ?

Figured we should go to chapter 2.....Wasn't the game gone to chapter 2 after Halloween ?

Anyway, Happy Reading......
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Post by: T-Bone on January 18, 2010, 11:04:08 AM
Shit man, you were busy today...or yesterday...or whenever...
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 18, 2010, 01:40:27 PM
Brilliant, Mercury....Just Awesome....

Didn’t know where to take Tony and Karen when they left the school....

That totally rocks.......

With the cliques now off-campus, it will be easier now for Jake to re-establish contact with them to arrange a truce....And to re-gain the good graces of the administration, and get back his power base at the school.

Whoa.....Moving Forward.....
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 18, 2010, 02:46:51 PM
Ok, I fixed Kurt and Lola's role in the story....Just something I overlooked...

Back to Tony now, moving forward. What's up next for the Hero ?

A romantic make-up with Karen, prehaps.....
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Post by: Mike_W on January 18, 2010, 05:12:42 PM
Hopefully Tony won't re-use any rubbers, nasty!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 18, 2010, 08:51:57 PM
Uhhhhh.....Don't think he used them the first time...Or two......
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Post by: T-Bone on January 18, 2010, 09:41:47 PM
So Tony went for pleasure instead of safety.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 18, 2010, 11:07:28 PM
Yup, now that he's laid his seed he better hope he doesn't have another little squirt on the way.  Damn, I'm just full of inuendos tonight!
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Post by: Mercury on January 19, 2010, 11:59:28 AM
Quote from: CHUCKX53;75891
Brilliant, Mercury....Just Awesome....

Didn’t know where to take Tony and Karen when they left the school....

That totally rocks.......
I've just made a little lien... It had to be a place that Laurent knew weel in the town, and I remembered that he had been talking about this french restaurant... Piece of cake ! With a little description, of course ! ;)
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 19, 2010, 03:18:11 PM
Stroke of genius.....Maybe the place has a basement where they can hole up for awhile ?

You know, with a bed and all ?

Anyway, Tony should be a hero now, for having saved Karen....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 19, 2010, 07:29:22 PM
And Boned her.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 19, 2010, 11:48:23 PM
Yeah.....That's heroic too........Sort of......
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 20, 2010, 05:52:28 AM
OK, Troops.....The fix is in for the Bullies to start a war with the Townies....Have at it...
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Post by: Mike_W on January 20, 2010, 11:57:18 AM
Quote from: CHUCKX53;75979
Yeah.....That's heroic too........Sort of......


 I'll save you Karen, with my COCK! :cool:
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Post by: Mercury on January 20, 2010, 03:17:15 PM
A race against the clock for the bullies !
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 20, 2010, 05:16:42 PM
I have a question going out to Mercury!
...or anyone who can answer it...

When u said the line "This guy can be used for money, but also strategy, did u mean Tony or The townie kid?
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Post by: T-Bone on January 20, 2010, 09:18:08 PM
Quote from: Mike_W;76012
I'll save you Karen, with my COCK! :cool:


Should have named him Mike Hawk. If you say it out loud you will understand.:)
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Post by: Mike_W on January 20, 2010, 10:59:26 PM
Oh trust me, I know so many of those types of names it may surprise you.  At least his name wasn't Mike Hunt.  Yeah I know, what can I say, I'm not proud.
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 20, 2010, 11:06:38 PM
yeah and mike howe "My cow"
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 21, 2010, 12:14:34 AM
Hey, Mercury.....You didn't get Jimmy transfered back to prison fast enough....
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 21, 2010, 12:19:09 AM
See Pinky's out of the Infirmary and screwing around on Derby already....
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Post by: Mike_W on January 21, 2010, 10:10:02 AM
I cringed when I read that, I just knew in the back of my mind that it was Derby on the bed.
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Post by: Mike_W on January 21, 2010, 10:24:55 AM
What happened to all the stuff bully-freak posted in the NES?  It was really good.
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Post by: Mercury on January 21, 2010, 11:54:13 AM
Mike Hawk ! Yeah, haha ! Pretty good :D
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Post by: Mike_W on January 21, 2010, 11:57:35 AM
Around here we get a lot of jokes about "Dick Hurts from Holden" because there is a large town called Holden a few miles away.  It's a funny joke, but around here it gets a little old after a while.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 21, 2010, 02:51:43 PM
I don't know what happened to them, unless Mercury and Bully-Freak PM'ed each other and agreed to take the part about the jailbreak out as to not bring Jimmy back in to the story at this point.....

But, I feel Bully-Freaks second post, the one where Trent goes to the beach house looking for Tony, should have been left in, for the continuity of the story.....How did Trent know where to find Tony ?.....Besides, it was damn funny....The end of that could have been altered to read...

“He ran up to the restaurant and saw Tony and Karen through the window, both sitting at a table sharing a croissant. So...that’s where they were !”

That way, the funny part about Pinky being caught screwing a Prep would still be in....After all, she had to get out of the Infirmary sometime.

Bully-Freak could re-insert that part of the story by editing his post to include it.....If he doesn’t have it, I could send it back to him, since I copied it...
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Post by: Mike_W on January 21, 2010, 03:13:59 PM
The scene with Trent in the police station was good too.  "Get back here you lil' shit!"
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 21, 2010, 04:02:52 PM
Yeah...I did like that....Except Trent is too much of a dumbass to cook up a scheme like that by himself....But, the cop station scene was good, so maybe it could be used later, in another context, with some editing, to fit a future situation....

'Underage Officer's Program'.....Now, that's really damn funny....
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 21, 2010, 04:37:39 PM
heys gutys yes it did delete that post because i kida messed up wit the whole "Pinky in the infimarry". I didnt think about just re-editing it. If u want to repost it chuck we could just put it back in. We would have to delete mercurys last post though...Thanks for liking it...Just repost it...thanks...
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Post by: Mike_W on January 21, 2010, 04:50:36 PM
lol @ Chuck's description of Lola coaxing Kurt over.  You have a way with words Chuck, even if it is a little disturbing.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 21, 2010, 09:17:25 PM
Bully Freak.....You or I can't delete Mercury's post...Only Mercury could do that....

And, we don't want his post deleted, it's part of the story.  

Pinky should be out of the Infirmary by the next day ....Karen didn't beat her that bad.  Being over in the beach house just gives her a chance for a little "Sex Therapy".

Also liked the Nerds part....Should leave that in too.
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 21, 2010, 10:39:13 PM
okay i posted it back.everyone can go back and read it now....
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 22, 2010, 12:22:35 AM
Hey, Far Out.......

Looks great Bully Freak.....

Let's continue..........
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 22, 2010, 07:53:41 AM
wait what did t-bone do....im bully-freak.
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 22, 2010, 07:54:30 AM
oh! okay i see tbone wrote the last section
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 22, 2010, 11:35:41 AM
My bad, Bully Freak....Got you guys mixed up.....Brain fart....

That section looks good now......Mercury's up next, he's got some kind of plan...
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Post by: Mercury on January 22, 2010, 04:04:42 PM
Do I have to delete one of mines ?
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 22, 2010, 04:05:06 PM
Wish me Luck guys...I'm goin on a 3 day camping trip..Its freezing cold....Wont be able to write again till monday...BYE!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 22, 2010, 05:35:01 PM
No, Mercury....It's been fixed....Do Not Delete Anything.....

See you later, Bully Freak....Bundle Up Good.....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 22, 2010, 05:50:27 PM
Have fun. Okay he's gone... Time to party!
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Post by: Mike_W on January 22, 2010, 06:47:50 PM
Quote from: Bully-Freak;76133
Wish me Luck guys...I'm goin on a 3 day camping trip..Its freezing cold....Wont be able to write again till monday...BYE!


 Just make sure it's not your dad bringing you out at midnight in the middle of Utah.:p


 oh, and lol at Mercury's latest addition to the story.  Zoe getting raped and Trent staying in a sex shop, awesome!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 23, 2010, 06:57:16 PM
Mercury, like your latest tactic with Tony....

Make friends with a Cop....Might come in handy later on....
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 26, 2010, 04:39:50 AM
Mercury....Liked your last post about the meeting...Suggest the clique leaders....Melvin, Derby, Ted, Peanut, Trent.....Need to add a time also.

Hope you can finish up the Cop portion of the story with Tony getting the cop a date....
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Post by: Mercury on January 26, 2010, 07:50:24 AM
All right, I'm currently writing it !
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Post by: Mercury on January 26, 2010, 08:57:17 AM
Done ! Tell me, Chuck, how many pages have we now, on the Works document ?
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 26, 2010, 11:04:41 AM
Nice, Mercury....Nice.

Future reference....PAID is the past-tense word you want, not Payed.

WORD COUNTS ---

Chapter One.....50,307
Chapter Two......8,031

TOTAL WORD COUNT (so far)

----------------58,338
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Post by: Mercury on January 26, 2010, 11:47:51 AM
Thank you, and don't forget to correct my error in your document... I'll try to write this verb good now. Paid.
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Post by: Mercury on January 26, 2010, 12:19:10 PM
Can you know how much A4 pages we got with all this text ?
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 26, 2010, 08:39:56 PM
On my WORD doucument I'm showing 145 pages.....
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Post by: T-Bone on January 26, 2010, 10:50:03 PM
Damn! It's gonna be a novel.
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Post by: Bully-Freak on January 27, 2010, 07:02:16 AM
thank you mercury, for starting one of the best topics on bullyboard!
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Post by: T-Bone on January 27, 2010, 08:09:50 AM
Yes, thank you.
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Post by: Mercury on January 27, 2010, 11:42:36 AM
Oh, thanks to you boys too, for joining me in this story !
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Post by: T-Bone on January 27, 2010, 09:01:02 PM
So do you think this story will have an ending? Or will it keep going until we die.
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Post by: dudemann5798 on January 27, 2010, 10:00:21 PM
I highly doubt we'll be writing about Tony when we're in our 80s...
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 28, 2010, 05:04:12 AM
Well...Figgure this....Six chapters at 50,000 words a chapter.....

That works out to Novel lengh at 300,000 words.
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Post by: Mercury on January 28, 2010, 11:45:06 AM
They'll be much more... Jimmy had to smash each clique under submission, what means five chapters, it's another schema in our NES.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 28, 2010, 01:59:53 PM
But we’re not running a carbon-copy of Jimmy’s Bullworth story….Tony isn’t here to smash the cliques into submission, but to eventually control them and gain power over them by controlling them through commerce with goods and services.  Let’s all face it, Jimmy was a not-too-bright troublemaker who was too stupid to get anything done that involved brainpower, and let others use and control him.  Tony, however, is a smart kid who can see opportunities when they present themselves.  Tony can make plans and carry them out. Tony’s main strengths lays in his power to negotiate, where Jimmy’s only power was brute force.

Tony’s character, and the characters of many of the others have been developed far beyond what they were in the original story. The story paths that have been taken in chapter one alone gives more insight into the various recurring characters than we ever knew in the past. We have here the means to delve into each character’s personalities in a way that the original game could not. Both old and new, we can now see the motivation of each character and clique, find out their story and what it means to live the Bullworth life.

With each author introducing new elements into the story, it becomes a real challenge to keep up with the changes. But this is what makes it fun, to adapt to the changing story elements. One thing we should all agree on is to keep moving the timeline forward in a realistic manner, just like in real life. Right now, we are between Halloween and Thanksgiving. By Christmas time, another 40,000 words away, we could start chapter three.  In this way, we could have, by the story’s summertime, a full novel that could stand on it’s own.

Even the “Never Ending Story” movie had an ending….BUT, it had sequels, that carried on the story. Same thing could be done here, if there are any left to carry it on when we are gone.  I think, it will take 6 months to a year to reach our own ‘Endless Summer”…..If we can stick with it that long, that is.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: T-Bone on January 28, 2010, 11:02:55 PM
We should make sequals to the story.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 28, 2010, 11:28:55 PM
That's what I'm saying.....This is a massive undertaking, really....When I first checked the word count, and saw that it was at 50,000, I went, WHOA...So, I put in my next post to make that the end of Chapter 1....Because, this is no short story anymore....This has become something bigger....So, we should treat it as such...Give the story some structure, and make a reasonable plan for it....

Reason I checked the word count was, I had like 107 pages saved over to word, and I was getting tired of scrolling down to add the next segment.  Now, I have Chapter 1 on that saved file, and Chapter 2 on the next saved file....

Don't know if we can ever do anything with this, but who knows ? I know there has to be others besides us reading it, and we are the Authors, so we should have some rights...Just in case if there is anything we could make out of it....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: T-Bone on January 30, 2010, 08:06:34 PM
Damn there's been almost 2000 views and I know that wasn't all us. Do you think we need some more help?
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on January 30, 2010, 08:19:33 PM
I may sound egoistic, but... I think we're good like that. I've seen new members though, like JocksKnockOutNerds and I_bully_the_Bullies.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 30, 2010, 09:49:56 PM
If those of us who have written so far, if we all contribute, then we should do OK....

The story has gotten complex, and any newbies would have to read the entire thing, which they won't do, to be able to join the story....

As long as we who know the characters just keep at it, and follow the flow, we should do alright....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: T-Bone on January 31, 2010, 12:00:25 AM
I just have to catch up on one or two pages and I should be fine. But right now I'm in a hurry.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on January 31, 2010, 07:34:50 AM
Take your time... To convert the money.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 31, 2010, 08:11:22 AM
I'll take my Smackaroos in fish sandwiches......
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: T-Bone on January 31, 2010, 10:03:30 AM
I got 115 more to go and I'm gonna do it within this hour and then I will space it out and do 25 more in a couple more hours.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 02, 2010, 03:48:41 AM
Sadly..........not in time.

Mercury, am posting events leading up tothe big meeting....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 02, 2010, 08:36:06 AM
There....I have finished the meeting. Now I'm burnt out. Mercury, pick up the story with Tony, or the rest of you....I'm sitting out for awhile.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 02, 2010, 11:37:47 AM
No problem, I'll write for a while !
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 02, 2010, 05:19:13 PM
All right, there it is. I've written two long descriptions, as I love it - if you're tired, I can write the Jocks clubhouse renovation too !
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 02, 2010, 07:41:58 PM
Yes...go for it....Don't forget about the Library and the dorms also....

My next bit will be about Zoe's revenge.....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 03, 2010, 11:06:57 AM
It will be right finished... I just don't want to write everything in a sort of block, so the dorms will be a bit later, I think.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 04, 2010, 01:42:12 PM
OK, I wrote about half of 'Zoe's Revenge' but haven't posted it yet....Will wait on you for the Library & Gym locker room descriptions...Will write the other half in about 12 hours....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 04, 2010, 04:41:22 PM
All right, you can post, it'll make a pause between the descriptions and avoid the block effect !
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 04, 2010, 06:36:28 PM
OK.....First parts posted.....More later....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Bully-Freak on February 04, 2010, 06:50:21 PM
srry i havent written in a while..I been busy. Im gonna start posting and writing some more of the NES
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 05, 2010, 12:31:09 AM
Make sure you read up on the characters so you know what they're up to, then you can keep up the story line OK.....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 05, 2010, 08:49:50 AM
Mercury....I just finished Zoe's revenge, so I decided to post the whole thing.

Came out a little longer than I thought it would.....

Let me know what you guys think....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 05, 2010, 09:31:51 AM
Nice... The hardcore way to stop that rapist. Only many, many exclamation points !
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 05, 2010, 09:47:11 AM
Exclaim for effect....

Notice I didn't murder him....

But he is going away permanently....

Wouldn't had to go through this at all if the dumbass Bullies would have just beat the Townies in the first place.....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 05, 2010, 10:42:15 AM
All is all right ! And we can't always win the first time, you know.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 11, 2010, 02:01:35 PM
Wrote a little section to restart it... Someone up to write another super-dodgeball game ? The last amusement of Tony before he can seriously ask himself who did the bombing.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 12, 2010, 10:28:48 AM
Awesome, Chuck, just awesome new part !
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 12, 2010, 10:50:23 AM
Thanks....Though of a way to bring Kurt back,,,,,Maybe to be a pain for Tony, or maybe....

Maybe to join forces against Jake ?

I'm not gonna do the dodgeball games....You and Tbone are better at that....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 12, 2010, 11:06:58 AM
I just cut it, to avoid repetition... Description of the Dorm done !
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 13, 2010, 06:12:03 AM
Mysterious person on the bed......??

I small a plot cooking here......

Word Count......66,591
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 13, 2010, 10:35:57 AM
Your turn ? Whoever the person could be, I've even not thought about it as I wrote this.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 14, 2010, 05:53:28 AM
Well...Think about it.....Anybody but Jake, he has to stay hidden for awhile....

Finished up Zoe's part, gonna bring her back to Bullworth.....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 16, 2010, 03:28:02 PM
Who's waiting on the bed for Tony ?

Com'on Mercury....Give it up......
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 16, 2010, 03:54:38 PM
Oh, yeah, I got an idea ! It will come soon !
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 17, 2010, 04:21:25 AM
If you give me a clue as to what you're leaning towards....Girl or Boy....I can go with it....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 17, 2010, 11:20:46 AM
You know what ? My 1.000th post will be in the NES, the best thing I can do. You'll see who that is...
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 17, 2010, 01:17:05 PM
Mercury, that's your best ever....You're greatly improved since the start...!!!

Just how will Tony uncover Jake's nasty scheme to bring down Pete ?

Stay Tuned, NES Fans.....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 17, 2010, 04:52:12 PM
Let... The... Investigation... Begin ! As Chuck says, stay tuned !
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 18, 2010, 12:41:37 PM
Hey Chuck, we are currently in the winter, aren't we ? Do I let the snow fall ?
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 18, 2010, 01:25:49 PM
No....We're right around Thanksgiving...In fact, we should do something for the holiday, even though they skiped it in the real game....

By the time we get to Christmas, We will end Chapter 2.....Still a ways....

Word count is now 68,304.....When we get to 100,000 will be time for Chapter 3...
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 18, 2010, 01:29:34 PM
Remember the bombing took place at Halloween, and then the campus was closed for two weeks, except for classes....Now, as of my last post, it is the Tuesday after, or About Nov. 17.....One week to go before Thanksgiving.....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 18, 2010, 01:31:16 PM
Okay, thanks ! What do I write about now ? About time to sleep for Tony, so, the next day...
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 18, 2010, 01:41:25 PM
Well.....You could have Tony go to Pete's former office in the school and look around and see if he can find any evidence of who set him up.....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 18, 2010, 01:51:23 PM
All right !That's a good idea.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 20, 2010, 12:28:20 PM
Like, maybe have Tony find something there that would point to Jake having set Pete up....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on March 05, 2010, 05:07:47 PM
Your turn, Chuck ! Can't wait to see what's waiting for Tony in the station...

STAY TUNED.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on March 18, 2010, 03:06:19 AM
It seems we have a mystery on our hands......Heh ?
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on March 21, 2010, 05:42:31 PM
We definetely have !
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on March 23, 2010, 04:08:03 PM
Okay, now I'm back for good, I've posted two new parts. Enjoy !
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on March 24, 2010, 07:27:48 AM
Yay !!   OK, mystery solved....But this is going to open up a whole new can of worms about how things are run at Bullworth Academy.....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on March 30, 2010, 11:52:26 AM
Since this awesome site is going to close... Well... We still have the copy in your WORKS document, Chuck, don't we ? Maybe we can exchange things per email...
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on March 31, 2010, 10:41:29 AM
Guess we will have to, Mercury.....Hate to see all the creative content go to waste...

Is your E-mail in your profile ?  I could send you mine on PM....
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 05, 2010, 06:44:18 AM
Ok....Got it.....Sent you the whole story.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 09, 2010, 12:01:00 AM
Since we have won a temporary reprieve, I will wait until we are firmly on R*World to post more parts to the story.  

Rest assured, there is plenty of mystery and action coming up before the end of Chapter two......Stay Tuned.
Title: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 09, 2010, 09:00:51 AM
I'm going to wait too then, even if thousands of ideas keep turning in my head... Something's sure, we'll haave a lot of action coming soon ! Stay tuned, NES fans !
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 12, 2010, 11:38:40 AM
Hey people... Since the NES has become a great part of our forum, maybe we could have a whole section in the forum index just for it... ? Including the story itself, plus the questions and the comments. Cool ?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 13, 2010, 12:11:56 PM
I'm all for that, or put it up in the 'News & Updates' section up at the top......


Either way.

Mercury, I am going to resend you the whole file again, and to everyone else, I have updated it with authors for each section and recovered the missing parts.

I like your new storyline.......Lola will be just perfect for that........
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 13, 2010, 12:39:26 PM
I thought so, and we've seen Pinky too much these last times... Heh, got why I've chosen Piff the Skull ?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mike_W on April 13, 2010, 12:40:43 PM
Because it's written on the comic books in Jimmy's room?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 13, 2010, 12:58:12 PM
And more importantly, in the Dragon's Wing Comic Store !
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mike_W on April 13, 2010, 01:01:17 PM
 That too!  Did you see the title of the books in the basement?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 13, 2010, 01:02:20 PM
I must say that I really didn't. What are these ?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mike_W on April 13, 2010, 01:03:16 PM
 It says: "How to impress the ladies, nerds need love too" lol
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 13, 2010, 01:04:07 PM
(Quickly back to topic : are we going to send a PM to the admins for them to create a NES section ? Do you vote yes ?)
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 13, 2010, 01:05:21 PM
Oh, you mean THIS book ! Ha-Ha-Ha, laughed much when I saw it lying near  the computers in the small room. Over the dirty mattress you can see the plan for the operation Trojan Cow.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mike_W on April 13, 2010, 01:06:04 PM
 I vote yes!
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 13, 2010, 01:08:40 PM
And I think Chuck will be OK with it.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 13, 2010, 01:33:41 PM
It's OK with me.......Like I said before.

For a trip, Google "The Never Ending Story Bully Board"  and there we are......Third down.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 13, 2010, 01:35:29 PM
Heheh, nice ! OK, should I write the PM ?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 13, 2010, 01:39:25 PM
Sure thing.....Worst that could happen is they say no.


Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 13, 2010, 02:42:05 PM
Done ! I suggested the name of the new section :

Bullworth NES : Tony's Story
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 14, 2010, 03:15:03 PM
I still think it might be easier to stick it in the top section......Or make it a 'Sticky'.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 15, 2010, 12:00:50 PM
Make what a 'Sticky' ? Anyway, the NES is so important that it becomes number one each time we post in it. But we can make it a sticky in the new section... ?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 16, 2010, 02:49:47 PM
Or make it a sticky in the top section, yes......
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 16, 2010, 05:42:47 PM
As I said in another post, the deal is done, won't it be cool to see all threads about the NES each one next to another, in one section ?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 18, 2010, 09:57:23 AM
Well, here it is and it is indeed COOL......
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 18, 2010, 02:00:16 PM
Yeah, everything here when we need it...
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 19, 2010, 01:21:33 AM
You even get to be a Moderator, Dude......Fancy.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 19, 2010, 05:14:45 AM
I saw that, yeah... Let's abuse of my authority, like Max does ! No, seriously, I doon't get some of the functions. What could it be to "split" a post ?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 23, 2010, 12:44:15 AM
split it into 2 posts ?

Hey, sent you an E-Mail about the story.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 23, 2010, 05:19:50 AM
Oh yeah, like, cutting it into two parts ?

Got the E-Mail... As I asked, can you resend it to me, into a document ? And then I'll post it.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 24, 2010, 02:23:28 AM
Done.......and Done.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on April 24, 2010, 04:45:32 AM
It's good like this ?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 24, 2010, 04:55:38 AM
Excellent..........
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: dudemann5798 on May 01, 2010, 11:42:16 AM
Can somebody continue the part with the new guys Eddie and Geoff?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on May 01, 2010, 12:29:57 PM
Yeah... It's a bit undefined... Why couldn't you do it yourself ?
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on May 01, 2010, 10:03:26 PM
Yeah Dudeman...Give us some background on the guys.

Like, why are they at Bullworth mid-year ? Where were they before ?  They get kicked out of another school ? they got rich families, or poor families ? Do you want them to be troublemakers or good guys ?  Since they are friends, should they be non-clique, because their's just the two of them ?

Personally, are they pricks ? Is one rotten, the other keeps him outta trouble, or do they both suck and can't get along with anybody ?  One has already shown he is anti-athority, how about the other ?  Do they want to fight everybody, or is there a group or clique they identify with ?

We don't want to make the same mistakes as we did with Kurt early on.  So, let us know what you would like to see your new characters do, within the paramiters of the story.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on May 02, 2010, 06:38:01 AM
I liiike the idea of one that is totally rotten, and the other that  saves him everytime !
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: badman on May 02, 2010, 12:18:49 PM
Can I invent a character for the story? I have a cool idea for one.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on May 02, 2010, 12:30:58 PM
Badman, man, I tell ya, you can't be more welcome ! The only thing you have to do is read the story to be sure you don't interfere or anything... Besides that... Do it !
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on May 02, 2010, 05:13:52 PM
Sure Badman......Sick in a character....Give a little background, and why he is there, and if he is a clique or non-clique.....And do read the story so you know what's going on.  We're at about 80, 000 words now, so it's a bit of a read.

Dudeman, if you'd like, give us some background on your new guys here, and we can develop them from there. Then we can weave them into the story better.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: badman on May 02, 2010, 07:47:42 PM
I've been reading it, once I'm all caught up, I'll join the story.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on May 03, 2010, 04:13:01 PM
That's cool, really !
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on May 03, 2010, 06:11:41 PM
All Right.....Good Deal.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mike_W on May 03, 2010, 09:32:53 PM
 I promise I'll join sometime soon, the semester is almost over.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on May 04, 2010, 11:58:14 AM
Whoa, I just imagine everyone here taking part of it !
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on May 07, 2010, 12:20:51 AM
Hell of a Team.......^-^
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on May 08, 2010, 04:23:53 AM
Whoa, Damon dating a girl... Instead of fighting a gorilla...
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mike_W on May 08, 2010, 09:43:08 AM
 Haha, it was the most unlikely couple.
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on May 09, 2010, 03:31:28 AM
It's a stroke of genius.......
Title: Re: NES Story Comments
Post by: Mercury on June 17, 2010, 06:33:43 AM
There are a lot of things going on, haha ! Your turn, old Chuck !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on June 19, 2010, 09:28:11 PM
Hey post people in the Nick's story too! It's a bit abandoned...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on June 20, 2010, 01:16:57 PM
Sure, Vasilije, I won't forget your story ! I feel like Nick's going to fight every night at the Hole, yeah...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on June 20, 2010, 07:15:46 PM
Well, maybe not every night, but it seemed to me like a good idea to have some sort of fight club in the Hole. I'm also thinking about Nick helping the Greasers skool those Preppy 'scumbags'...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on June 21, 2010, 11:27:33 AM
Like, starting as a little Greaser, and then... Become better and better, to the top !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on June 21, 2010, 10:13:55 PM
Yeah I know it's a wreck, I removed it and will post it again. But different. I'll also try to post in Tony's and Trent & Kirby's story but I don't know if I can read through 19 pages...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on June 21, 2010, 10:42:42 PM
I posted it again. I'm sorry if I offended you deleting your post, Mercury.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on June 22, 2010, 11:50:48 AM
Oh, you just wanna start it all again ? No offense, Vasilije, let's make it good !

And, Chuck, as Frenchie, I was supposed to do the mushy stuff, uh... For Pinky, you know ? Haha !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on June 22, 2010, 01:43:07 PM
Oh, you just wanna start it all again ? No offense, Vasilije, let's make it good !

And, Chuck, as Frenchie, I was supposed to do the mushy stuff, uh... For Pinky, you know ? Haha !

Let's.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 23, 2010, 03:36:53 AM
I originally had intended to just have Tony walk Pinky to a safe place....And the rest just kinda wrote itself.  Too much was just perfect...An empty place, with all the Preps out of action for the night, and Pinky's always wanted to do Tony, from the very first part of the story.

As we all know, whatever Pinky wants, Pinky gets.

About Tony's guilt-trip over this...We should let this fester for awhile (A LONG while), as we are going to have uses for Pinky for the forseeable future....

Because, you know, when Karen finds out (and she will), she will put Pinky in the hospital, even worse than the last time.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on June 23, 2010, 08:32:38 AM
I'll have many more occasions, hehe...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 25, 2010, 05:38:09 AM
Don't worry my man.....Plenty of other romantic hook-ups are in our future story.

Send Tony over to the Greasers like you planned...They just had to make a little detour first....

I'll write up the attack on the Nerds after that....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 25, 2010, 07:24:51 AM
Quick note....I put in a bunch, 5 new sections, so read page 19 as well as 20. (My last section started page 20 on my screen)......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 27, 2010, 05:03:59 AM
Just fixed a couple techincal glitches about the old shower house, now that I went back to the game and gave it a good look.

And, I have spots for both the Nerds and Greaser retribution attacks by Algie.....Just need to get Tony's parlay with the Greasers written by you, Mercury, to move the story along.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on June 28, 2010, 08:28:36 AM
what parlay with the Greasers ? I'm somewhat lost...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 28, 2010, 11:31:30 AM
You had Tony and Constantinos headed over to see the Greasers.....?

At the Autoshop.......?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on June 28, 2010, 06:12:04 PM
...and they were stopped by Pete.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 28, 2010, 09:50:39 PM
.....And now they're done talking with Pete, and can continue on to the AutoShop.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on June 29, 2010, 02:52:45 AM
Clears it up, Merc?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 29, 2010, 11:48:32 PM
Ahhh, that's alright....I'll go ahead and take them over there and get the talk started, Mercury can pick it up from there if he wants.

That way, I can move the next part ahead, while Tony & Constantinos are over at the Autoshop.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on July 06, 2010, 05:41:46 AM
I just wanted to say something considering the newcomer, Nick's story. Although I wanted to make it parallel to Tony's, it's difficult because of different seasons. Instead, it's a completely new story, all cliques are (still) present, but Jimmy is expelled for painting another prank graffiti on Harrington House.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 06, 2010, 10:05:51 AM
That's OK, Repo.....I figured it was a seperate story to start with, although I may introduce some elements of it into the NES at a later date, at least parts of it that I author....Nick seems like an interesting character that could be used later in the big story as well.

The large NES story has over 104,000 words at this point, and we are just getting to the end of Chapter 2......

Mercury must be on vacation or something....I'll carry on till he gets back. Got a few suprises in store for our heros....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on July 06, 2010, 10:56:32 AM
Thanks. You know I posted Nick's story just because it was difficult for me to reply to Tony's (when I came to Bully Board 16 pages were written) and I hope it will grow. :)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 06, 2010, 11:49:41 AM
We started with like 8 different authors on the big story, and it just sorta took off...I didn't come in until about page 4 (?), I think....But it really took off, with a lotta multiple plots, and we had to get it organized into something that had some continuity. A lot of our original authors are gone now, it's just mostly me & Mercury left to carry it on.  So, if you get time, read through the story, and contribute if you would like.  I thought the one you put in so far was just fine.

As for yours, I hope it can grow as well....We really just need some more authors to help move it along.  Quite possibly, since it's summer, people are off doing other things, and maybe it will pick up again once school starts in the fall.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on July 24, 2010, 12:53:22 AM
Have no fear, Mike is here!  I decided to join in just now and I'll try to add some other stuff later.  Today's part of the story was partially inspired by events that happend while playing Bully today.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 24, 2010, 02:23:48 PM
Mike.....be sure to follow the storyline......Most all the clique members have still to be released from the clinics and Infirmaries because of the recent attacks....The school is almost a ghost town, with only the girls, non-cliques, and younger kids attending classes.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on July 24, 2010, 02:26:59 PM
 Yeah, I know.  The clique leaders are still at the infirmaries and not the school.  Tony was talking to the non-cliques. I guess the only hole there is Donald, but I guess you could say he recovered first. ;)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 24, 2010, 02:51:30 PM
I'll fix it up, the part about Donald.....But Lefty should be still bad shape still, as his clique was the last attacked.  A better choice might have been one of the Bullies, they were first attacked, and should be better now.

And no, the only clique leader who was attacked was Melvin....All the rest of the clique leaders (Derby, Trent, Ted, Peanut) escaped being attacked because they weren't with their groups at the time....Derby was beat up seperately, but released the next morning.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on July 24, 2010, 02:59:01 PM
Oh, okay. As much as I read this there are always a few things I forget.  I'll go back and change the part about Lefty to Troy instead.  I completely forgot that the greasers were attacked last.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 24, 2010, 07:21:45 PM
OK....Sounds Good...reads OK.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on July 27, 2010, 11:56:48 PM
 Alright, just had Tony wake up on Christmas morning to start Chapter 3.  The next goal for Tony and the gang is to get Jimmy Hopkins out of jail.  Tony realizes he will need help form someone who knows a little something about making peace at Bullworth.  Tony also realizes that he can't do this alone anymore, Constantinos and Laurent just aren't enough to keep the school from fighting.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 28, 2010, 04:17:05 AM
I plan to have Pete air-lifted out of Bullworth via medivac helicopter, as soon as the blizzard & snow have subsided....His condition is way too serious, and Bullworth towns have no real hospitals or operating rooms (Which Pete needs, he has a pellet in his Brain...And his eye is destroyed).....Pete may not be back ever, his injuries are very serious....

Algie is to be arrested and charged with multiple counts of aggravated assult, just as soon as he is out of the clinic.....May charge him as a juvie, but possible as an adult (the attack on the Preps alone will bring serious pressure to bear on his case).....In any case, he is going away for quite a while.

We have touched on Jimmy before, if you remember....He is brought back to Bullworth Town whenever he has a pending court appearance.....Busting him out will spark a Manhunt, so don't let your characters be seen doing it....Better have a good hiding place for him.

Yes the fighting will resume, but remember, for now, the kids are nearly weapon-less, and it will take time for them to re-arm.....(The Nerds, however, still have a stockpile of Spud Guns hidden in the Observatory).....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on July 28, 2010, 11:04:41 AM
  As soon as Jimmy is free they are going to hide him, I already anticipated on a man-hunt, so Tony is certainly not going to keep him out in the open.
  As for future fights, Tony just knows that there will be violence in the future, he just wants to be prepared early so that defensive plans for different scenarios can be thought out.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 28, 2010, 03:46:40 PM
Bringing Jimmy back into the story will lend a new perspective....It would be cool to have an 'Invisible Enforcer' to use at any time we want......Either concealed (i.e. in the night) or in disguise....Prehaps, a makeover, such as Jake has been doing.....

I've been kicking around the idea of having Tony form another clique out of the 'non-clique' kids....Constantinos, Gordon, Ivan, Lance, Ray, and Trevor....Enough there for a full-fledged clique, and they are very under-utilized in the orginal game.....Bryce is listed as a non-clique or with the Preps, depending on which source you check, and I might add him also.

Jake has to be on the lam, for now, and change his identity once again.  There will be more trouble from him in the future, as soon as he (me) comes up with his next diabolical plan..

I think Algie is gonna wind up in the Asylum....Being 'unfit to stand trial', and be committed...That would be a lotta fun.....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on July 28, 2010, 07:34:52 PM
  I'll try and think of the next thing to happen with the jail break.  I'm gonna have them hide Jimmy somewhere, but remain in contact with Const. and Tony.  There is going to be a price on Jimmy's head, so I'm not going to make him do anything to expose him.  Basically they need Jimmy as sort of a "friend-on-hand" and they will go get him when they need him.
  Oh, and another thing, ever since the whole weapons destruction thing, the school will not have any heat.  The melting of all the steel has clogged the furnace when it hardened, making it inoperable.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 29, 2010, 07:18:17 AM
Ha, Ha, That's a good one....Crabblesnich will freeze his ass off.....

Won't bother the students, everybody's on break till after New Years...No Classes.

Stuck in a small part to help you along....

May I sugguest you hide him out in the newly-reopened "IN AND OUT MOTEL ?"  (That's where Jake is holed up, BTW.....I just haven't posted it yet).....Need to keep that Jimmy nice and warm until he can get his appearence changed and a disguise......

I'll do a re-cap about the others after you bust Jimmy outta jail.....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 29, 2010, 07:36:10 AM
Oh.....Don't forget about the remnants of the Blizzard....Snow piled up everywhere....

No traffic is gonna be moving....roads are full of snow, and aren't plowed...You know how one of those huge snows are....Takes days to clear the roads....

No Cop cars or Motorcycles can chase our Heros.....

Perfect cover for their getaway.....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on July 29, 2010, 08:33:54 AM
So, I see Jimmy's making his comeback? COOOOOOOL! How old is he now anyway?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 29, 2010, 04:34:18 PM
Since he was 15 in the game, and this is the year after, He is 16 now.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on July 30, 2010, 06:25:05 AM
Yeah, right...but in the beginning of the story I read that Jimmy should be in college or something, and that the rest were too stupid for it. What's with that?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 30, 2010, 04:46:19 PM
Apparently, a small glitch by that particular author who wasn't paying attention early on in the story.....

That's why we would like everyone to read the whole thing before they contribute.

If Mercury ever comes back, I''ll have him fix that part....(I would change it, but Mecury is the Mod for this section)......Thanks for pointing that out. Good catch !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Trent on July 30, 2010, 07:13:48 PM
Hey guys, I have a new character for the story, his name is garland greene. Check the "create a new character" on the bully discussion for more info.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 31, 2010, 01:24:30 AM
That's great, Trent....Just ask you wait to introduce him after the holidays are over (after New Years), when school is back in session.  Won't be long...Keep checking back.

In fact, I also have a new character to bring in as well at that time, also.....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 04, 2010, 04:39:13 AM
OK, it's after New Year's, and all the cliques (except the Nerds) are weaponless....Back to some good old fighting moves until they manage to re-arm some how. 

Sneaking suspicion that some of the Nerds will want to take some revenge for past wrongs....Remember Algie is in the nut house now, and the Nerds consider him a traitor.

Any new characters should be introduced now....I've brought Nick into the story.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 05, 2010, 08:06:51 AM
Nick Penty?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 06, 2010, 03:46:37 AM
Why Yes, Repo.....I think he is a cool character and should be included in the main story.  Also, he was the only character who had a side story and hadn't been in the main story. I think he can fit in, and maybe work with Tony (and Jimmy) eventually....We got enough 'Bad Kids', strikes me that Nick could be a great add to the forces of good at Bullworth NES.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 06, 2010, 04:13:26 AM
I changed the inital description of Nick to match yours, Repo, so there won't be any differences.  I had introduced him as too much of a badass, and that won't mesh right in the NES main story.  Your discription is better, so we'll go with that.

You can still write the mini-story about Nick and his adventures, seperate from the main story, as you have been.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 06, 2010, 07:51:23 AM
I'd like to see Nick fight Damon...I've made Nick as a very skilled fighter (why the hell would I make a nerd if I can a fighter?) so I think he would last long against the gorilla man.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 07, 2010, 05:01:40 AM
That sounds like a neat idea !  We will have to set that up.  In fact, I think Nick will have to show off his Karate and Boxing skills quite soon and quite often.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 07, 2010, 12:19:22 PM
Since Nick is the new kid, he has no friends in Bullworth, so how about something that would earn him respect? Like a fighting tournament in The Hole, in which Nick meets Jimmy in the final and defeats him.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 07, 2010, 01:29:21 PM
 I don't know if he should fight Jimmy, afterall, Jimmy is on the good side and Nick will be too eventually.  I like the Damon idea though.  I was planning on Damon to come back from a date after curfew and fight a prefect, maybe I could fit Nick in there somewhere to to fight Damon.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 07, 2010, 03:26:06 PM
But...will Nick kick the fuck out of his ass, or get beaten up a bit himself?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 07, 2010, 11:55:27 PM
Nick should perhaps fight the toughest one in each of the cliques (Nerds excluded...they have no tough membes)....Damon, Derby, and whoever is left toughest in the Greasers....He has already had a go-around with Trent, and possibly have a go-around with Wade and Davis, since they're too stupid to leave him alone.

Jimmy is to be a shadow, only coming out in the open at night.  Only Tony & Constantinos even knows he has escaped (besides the Cops and the Haringtons), and it should stay that way.

Envision Nick as an enforcer for Tony (not that he couldn't take care of himself), as a force for reluctant good against the forces of evil at Bullworth.  And as to a friend, Nick already has his first friend....Tony.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 08, 2010, 03:30:00 PM
I love the way the stories areimplicated into each other ! I'll continue writing soon !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 09, 2010, 12:16:10 AM
Thinking about Sheldon (from another thread).....He is older now, maybe we could use him in the story somewhere....?

In fact, there is a whole untapped potential of non-clique students....I have a hair of an idea that we could unite the non-cliques INTO a clique, with Tony as the leader....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 09, 2010, 08:53:12 AM
That would be a pretty weak clique. Sure Nick can kick some asses here and there, but all non-clique students are as weak as a potato.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 10, 2010, 02:50:55 AM
Exactly the point.  With 2 strong smart, tough leaders (Tony and Nick), add Constantinos, Gordon, Ivan, Lance, Ray and Trevor. They will be tougher than the present Nerd lineup, and will bring into the story characters who have so far been in the background.  

There is strengh in numbers, that's the reason for cliques in the first place. Some of these will bring talents yet to be discovered, since we havent even used them yet.

All I need now is a Clique Name for them......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 10, 2010, 08:48:43 AM
Care Bears!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 10, 2010, 10:52:40 AM
 Haha, if they took that name they would probably get their asses beat every day! :p
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 10, 2010, 12:13:07 PM
You need a clique name ? Consider something they have in common, that helps a lot. The Greasers are called Greasers because they use grease to comb their hair back, that's the point... So they better discover or wear something in common before being able to choose a name.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 10, 2010, 02:18:05 PM
Umm...Teddy and Friends?

Or Bullworth Academy Mafia (BAM)!  >:D
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 10, 2010, 02:20:45 PM
That is for Nick's Story, right ? 'Cause I don't see a gang forming in Tony's.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 10, 2010, 02:26:01 PM
Not yet. We're thinking about Tony, non-clique students and Nick forming a clique of their own. We'll write it in the Tony's NES as soon was we think of a name.

Anyway, about Damon's fight with Nick, I think it would be better if Nick beats him right away (to get the respect of the school by proving he can take down someone as strong as Damon) but after a long and hard fight. At the end it can be like in those shitty American action movies, in which both opponents are all hurt and/or bloody, bad guy attacks the good guy, and the good guy performs an epic move which defeats his opponent.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 10, 2010, 02:28:49 PM
The alternative is, Nick is defeated, and will have to prove himself first under the wing of Tony's, and then by himself... Sound like an american script too, hey ?

And don't search a clique name. Just write about them hanging out, and finding something they have in common, like a piece of cloth or a hobby. THEN you'll get their name naturally.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 10, 2010, 02:31:16 PM
Well that can be good, but on the other hand, we put Nick as a black-belt 4th Dan karate fighter, as well as a good boxer. Kinda too skilled to get beaten by a brainless monkey such as Damon.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 10, 2010, 02:41:19 PM
We can play on the fact that Nick actually hits Damon, but his muscles are so developed by the steroïds (just like Brucie, hey) that he just... Doesn't feel anything.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 10, 2010, 02:42:50 PM
 What I meant to happen was for Damon to defeat Nick in a surprising way.  Nick wouldn't exactly expect the type of moves Damon knows at first, but will get to know how Damon fights and then Nick will ambush Damon, catching him off-guard and then defeating him.

 I'll wait and write my part after we get this figured out so that there is no confusion.  My eventual plan is to have Damon get caught by a prefect while he is returning from a date after curfew.  Damon, being mentally unstable, will attack the prefect (violently), earning himself a visit to the assylum.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 10, 2010, 02:46:06 PM
It's...cheating? Maybe something like a rematch in The Hole?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 10, 2010, 02:47:06 PM
Wow, uh... That'd be a lot of people brought to the Asylum, Mike, don't you think ? Let's do things a little cooler for the New Era of Bullworth... Problems will just fall from the sky one per one for our protagonists ! Should I write the fight ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 10, 2010, 02:49:51 PM
And, yeah, it'd be cheating - a rematch is a solution, but I wouldn't write it. I'm thinking things more like Tony, that would set up the Jock clique against Damon in this case, or another fine plan, you know ? But Nick is Nick, he does it the fist way, and other people are better at writing this than me.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 10, 2010, 02:54:12 PM
Or we can have one fight, it can be like this:

- Nick dodges a few hits from Damon, beats him a few times.
- He turns around to see the crowd (the whole school who came to see the game)
- As he turns back to Damon, the Jock punches him to the ground and starts to own the fight
- Finally, Nick decides "Alright I have no time for this" and then they are equal, and then the final scene....

Damon and Nick look to each other, each at the fence of the Hole, standing far from each other. Damon runs towards Nick, but Nick jumps using one leg, performing a mawashi with the other one, hitting Damon in the head and beating him unconscious. Then he passes out too (or just goes to get his jacket). Anyway, he too is hurt and beaten.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 10, 2010, 02:57:19 PM
 You're right, there should be a rematch in The Hole.  As far as Damon going to the assylum, my plan wasn't to have him there for very long.  He would only be there for a few days to be evaluated due to Damons rampage being a first offense.  I don't know if Chuck plans on letting others out of the assylum, but Damon's visit will be very short....I promise! :)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 10, 2010, 03:01:05 PM
If there is any ! But listen, my friends, we're exactly doing what was not for me to happen when I started the NES. I don't want the story to be previsible by others writers. Now go Vasilije, write YOUR part, like YOU always wanted to write it, and we'll bounce next with our own style ! That's the way we should do a NES, man ! Go for it !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 10, 2010, 03:02:44 PM
Nah, not now. Not in a mood to write a whole story. Go for it. :)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 10, 2010, 03:04:01 PM
Here's the deal : I'm gonna go to lunch. If nothing's been written, I'll do the job !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 10, 2010, 04:00:31 PM
Finally, fight's finished...now somebody write what happens next.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 10, 2010, 04:13:32 PM
Awww, man, looks like we've been posting at the same time...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 10, 2010, 04:24:01 PM
Aww shit...Eci Peci Pec, who deletes?!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 10, 2010, 06:20:51 PM
 I read both of them and I thought both were great!  Maybe you guys won't have to delete, I think that if we were to keep Repo's as the first fight and used Merc's as a story of the rematch.  Just think about it, the stories would fit together perfectly like that!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 10, 2010, 06:53:14 PM
I'm so glad you guys are getting back into this....(it's been lonely here...)
Both versions have merit.....
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Repo, I like your fight description....Very descriptive and plenty of action.

Some observations.....

Mr. Burton is the gym teacher in the Futsal match, and he should send Damon to the Infirmary rather than take him (Damon's a big boy and knows the way)....

There has been no fight between "Nick and Kirby" yet in this verson of the story. The only fight in this verson that Nick has had is with Trent and the two Bullies, Wade and Davis.

"Everyone went to the hole" means they have to sneak in through the outside basement door, or through the inside door by the school store, avoiding both the Prefects AND Mr. Luntz.

The "N" word is considered VERY racist over here....Maybe could be changed to something else (Black Boy ?)
I DO like that break, being saved by Tony, and the drink to re-vitalize Nick....That was good.
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Mercury, I liked the look of the fight from the mental side of it.....The mark of a true in-depth writer.

It's your call as to which verson we should keep.....But if you were to edit yours, as a kind of post-fight description and analysis, I believe both could be left (With the above changes, of course).
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 10, 2010, 09:42:57 PM
Okay, I got a deal for you, my serbian friend. If you delete everything after the "C'MERE !", my text matches yours, as the second round. Then, Bif rings the bell - you decide what it means, the end of the second round, or the end of the match. If it's the end of the second round, it'll be a dilemna for Nick : should he continue fighting with his ankle ? A lot of suspense and action coming up...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 11, 2010, 11:22:28 AM
I'm so glad you guys are getting back into this....(it's been lonely here...)
Both versions have merit.....
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Repo, I like your fight description....Very descriptive and plenty of action.

Some observations.....

Mr. Burton is the gym teacher in the Futsal match, and he should send Damon to the Infirmary rather than take him (Damon's a big boy and knows the way)....

There has been no fight between "Nick and Kirby" yet in this verson of the story. The only fight in this verson that Nick has had is with Trent and the two Bullies, Wade and Davis.

"Everyone went to the hole" means they have to sneak in through the outside basement door, or through the inside door by the school store, avoiding both the Prefects AND Mr. Luntz.

The "N" word is considered VERY racist over here....Maybe could be changed to something else (Black Boy ?)
I DO like that break, being saved by Tony, and the drink to re-vitalize Nick....That was good.
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Mercury, I liked the look of the fight from the mental side of it.....The mark of a true in-depth writer.

It's your call as to which verson we should keep.....But if you were to edit yours, as a kind of post-fight description and analysis, I believe both could be left (With the above changes, of course).

If I'm right, Mr Burton is fired from work during the events of Bully. I don't know if he's brought back in NES, though.

I planned to have Nick fight Kirby, but I dismissed it because Kirby's too small to be able to do something to a person such as Nick.

That isn't hard to achieve...

You mean brother? I'll change it. I'm sorry if it bothers you.



And as for the story, it could be worked out, Mercury! But, why to stop the fight? We can continue it, and Nick can somehow find the way to beat Damon even with his ankle.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 11, 2010, 04:43:37 PM
In the original game, it was Mr. Hattrick who was fired (for cheating), but he was 'brought back' in the first chapter of our NES story by one of the writers (now gone).  We went ahead and kept him, explaining his 're-hire', and that he had lost his house in the process.  Mr. Burton was NOT fired in the original game (even though he's a pervert) and remains in the NES....In fact, all the teachers and staff are still in place.  We just haven't written about them much...(Except Mr. Luntz).

I think we should stay away from all racial slurs, they shouldn't be in the story.  I'm sure there are quite a number of people reading this now, and I don't want to offend anyone or for us to be  having racist overtones in the story.  Mercury, you should use your mod power in this section to make sure all racial slurs are deleted or changed. 

It's not so much that it's offensive to me, Repo (I'm not Black), but it could be to invisible others reading this story.  Our intent here is to entertain, not piss people off. 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 11, 2010, 05:01:45 PM
 Yeah, I'm not personally offended either as I'm not black, but Chuck is right.  We should be mindful of others reading and not come across as a group of racists.  From what I remember there weren't any other words in their that were too bad.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Scratch on September 11, 2010, 10:28:46 PM
What about the thing with the watermelon? that was funny as hell but, honestly, how would that even work anways? i dont think he wanted it THAT BAD
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 12, 2010, 12:30:38 AM
The Watermelon thing is is considered more a Stereotype and is not a racial slur, Per Se.......Sorta like the Fried Chicken thing, or calling a Mex a 'Taco Bender'.

That was just Mike's imagination, anyway.  The bigger question would be how Constantinos brought along a watermelon in the first place (up his ass ?).......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 12, 2010, 05:39:56 AM
Okay, I understand it's the call of a mod to fix it up, it's done ! You people want to officially edit the Watermelon part too ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 12, 2010, 07:44:19 AM
Aww man, not the watermellon part :(
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 12, 2010, 12:20:46 PM
An idea: how about that Nick wins the first fight with Damon, therefore Humiliating him (I've written that when you lose in The Hole, you are Humiliated and to bring back your reputation you have to defeat the one who Humiliated you, in The Hole), but they have a rematch later and Damon beats Nick. However, in the third fight, Nick can either beat Damon, or it can be a draw, so no-one is Humiliated. Also, Damon and Nick can develop a friendship after these fights, sorta like Jimmy and Russell.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 12, 2010, 02:25:54 PM
Leave the watermelon thing in, it's just a Stereotype and not an outright racist slur, as I mentioned in another post. Besides, it's damned funny....

Nick should fight Damon only this once, defeating him....Then, as Repo says, make friends with him after the fight, just like Jimmy and Russell.   Do remember that this was how Jimmy gained respect.  Nick has more 'Boss Fights'  to go with others (like Derby), and we need to move the story along, as there are many other plot threads to continue.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 12, 2010, 03:11:58 PM
Alright. Just we gotta figure the way Nick beats Damon, because Mercury sprained his ankle.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 12, 2010, 03:45:34 PM
They have to be friends. That can lead to great stories, believe me...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 12, 2010, 03:52:55 PM
Yeah, I agree.  It would be much better to see Nick and Damon become friends.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 12, 2010, 04:18:34 PM
Yeah. Maybe Damon will get to help Nick in later fights, who knows... :)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 12, 2010, 06:25:35 PM
But not in Boss fights, Nick has to win those on his own.

I envision Nick fighting Derby in the Prep's boxing ring next.....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 12, 2010, 06:32:37 PM
Your orignal ending will still work fine, Repo....Nick has one good ankle to throw that kick on.

If you ever saw "Karate Kid 1" the movie, the character Daniel LaRusso had a hurt leg and still finished off his opponet with a kick......

(If you deleted your ending and didn't save it, I have it).....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 13, 2010, 11:40:54 PM
I have the next part ready to go, after youse guys finish the fight. (I don't want to interupt).
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 14, 2010, 05:05:29 AM
Your orignal ending will still work fine, Repo....Nick has one good ankle to throw that kick on.

If you ever saw "Karate Kid 1" the movie, the character Daniel LaRusso had a hurt leg and still finished off his opponet with a kick......

(If you deleted your ending and didn't save it, I have it).....

I remember how my story finished and I watched Karate Kid, but I think that a crane kick would be too much...weak against Damon. I don't know, never tried it. But the first kick I used can be done.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 14, 2010, 04:21:51 PM
Nice fight, Vasilije, I liked it... Now I think Chuck had a part to add next right ? Oh, and Chuck, there has to be a mistake in one of your parts. When Tony first meets Nick, he says he's Tony Prince. But he's not. He was named after Tony Prince, that's the point. Useless to say that his name isn't known at all, and doesn't really need to be known.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 14, 2010, 05:13:09 PM
OK....Fixed....But one of the other writers (now gone) also identified Tony this way, back in, maybe Chapter 1 or 2.  I know I saw it somewhere, I'll have to read through the whole thing.

You mabye should give Tony a name....All the other characters have one (even though they aren't used much).....Except, I think, Laurent and those 2 characters Dudeman put in, Geoff and Eddie, and the Rocker Clique, Kurt and his gang.  Since don't like Dudeman is ever gonna be back, I will probably assign them names at some point in the story.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 15, 2010, 07:32:59 PM
Nice work Merc, I like how you sent Nick to get Damon.  I was originally going to have Damon be released in a few days, but I like you're idea better.  This could help build a friendship between Nick and Damon.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 15, 2010, 08:29:50 PM
The secret is....Nobody gets released from the Asylum.....They have to be busted out. The Cops are a bunch of lying bastards, anyway....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 16, 2010, 02:09:55 PM
I thought he was only going to be evaluated first, not put directly in the Asylum. But if he has to be busted out, he will, the awesome way !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 17, 2010, 01:43:20 AM
The Cops don't evaluate anybody, they just lock them up......


**NOTE....We have passed 130,000 words on the NES Story.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 18, 2010, 12:50:41 AM
Alright! I just wrapped up a really long section of story that took me multiple posts.  Basically Jake has started his next phase on causing tension, starting with the Bullies and Nerds.  I think you'll find my classic comedy all there.  Some of it is a little disgusting, but still funny.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 18, 2010, 05:23:47 AM
Actually, it was wonderfully disgusting and funny......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 18, 2010, 07:02:10 AM
And about Tony's clique...we decided the name already?

The Bloody Death Legion of Doom
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 18, 2010, 07:35:49 AM
Well, I didn't really see a clique forming while reading the story... I told you, it will come itself :p
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 18, 2010, 09:22:31 AM
Well, I didn't really see a clique forming while reading the story... I told you, it will come itself :p

Me neither. In fact, nobody saw it, because we didn't even put it in NES, yet. The clique idea still exists just in NES Comments.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 18, 2010, 09:45:48 AM
Oh and what about the Greasers? Are they the good guys or the bad guys?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Junkie Mater on September 18, 2010, 10:39:03 AM
And Nerds ^-^, who named themselves Brave Knights of Bullworth, :p but actually they are weak, fearful cowards. :p
And they make my old head laughed so hard until I had a terrible headache for 2 days. :rolleyes:
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 18, 2010, 11:53:13 AM
Old head? You really expect us to believe you're 65?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 19, 2010, 08:14:13 AM
The Greasers are, in fact, at the side of Tony's, aren't they ? I guess they're neutral until someone asks for their help.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 19, 2010, 09:24:41 AM
Chuck, if you had already copied my 2 last imputs in the NES before right now, please replace it by the actual ones ; I edited it for language mistakes.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 19, 2010, 09:33:49 AM
The Greasers still favor Tony, part of which was based on his friendly associtation with Steve, the Greaser who left to start his own shop. 

The Jocks also favor Tony, in part as the result of his friendship with Laurent.

The new clique will come, when the time is right. It will include all of our non-clique heros, plus other non-clique students and new students who care to join.  There will be a meeting for the ones chosen in due time.  As for a name, I have settled on "The Drifters"......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 20, 2010, 01:09:57 PM
I dunno, The Drifters....naaawwwwww.........

Holy League


Anyway, is it ok if my stories concentrate on Nick? Because I'm not so familiar with the rest since I didn't read it all.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 20, 2010, 01:20:29 PM
OK Mercury....Got it...I did notice your changes..

I pulled a lot of Clique Lists online, Repo, and 'Drifters" fits the best with Tony and crew...So I'm gonna go with that when the time comes..........If it comes.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 20, 2010, 01:57:12 PM

Anyway, is it ok if my stories concentrate on Nick? Because I'm not so familiar with the rest since I didn't read it all.

That sounds just fine, Repo...Just make sure you know what's going on with the characters the Nick interacts with. 

Speaking of which....Next fight for Nick should be Derby the Prep, and take place in the Prep's Gym over at Bullworth vale.

When we get the new Clique started, don't forget your Idea of Nick training them over at the old Hobo's area.....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 20, 2010, 02:45:34 PM
It can be just a boxing match, so it is harder for Nick as he then can't use his legs. We can put that the Drifters "headquarters" is the Hobo's area or it can just serve as a dojo.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 20, 2010, 04:06:55 PM
NO... PLANS ! Damn.

Don't worry about that, Vasilije, write about what you know the best. Just keep in mind that Tony isn't really a violent student. He prefers using his brain, and shakes his fists only in critical situations. He likes using other people's abilities to get success.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on September 20, 2010, 04:13:44 PM
NO... PLANS ! Damn.

Don't worry about that, Vasilije, write about what you know the best. Just keep in mind that Tony isn't really a violent student. He prefers using his brain, and shakes his fists only in critical situations. He likes using other people's abilities to get success.

I know. Nick is a fighter. He will be training other students, not Tony.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 20, 2010, 04:19:13 PM
Exactly, you got it.

But starting a clique is NOT something that comes up one day. Tony won't wake up saying "I get all my friends together today, let's make a clique !".

No.

It has to be a group of friends (Tony, Constantinos, Laurent, Nick) that hang out together. One day, they find a place to hang out and decide that it will be their territory. One day, they find something that makes them different from the others. Another day, some students find that they're right, so they join. But the process itself is VERY long.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 20, 2010, 07:21:00 PM
 I agree with Mercury 100%.  I think it should be a very gradual process, in fact, I think that the group may not even need a name at all.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 20, 2010, 10:02:51 PM
I envisioned having bringing some of the Non-cliquers into Tony's fold...Gordon, Lance, Ivan, Trevor & Ray...They would be perfect for Repo's training sessions.  We haven't even used them to this point.  

Also like to see something done with that little tattle-tale Pedro...

And maybe a small storyline about Melody....She's about Karen's age, right ?

Oh, and what about that female Prefect that was brought in a while back ?  She have a name or a backstory ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 21, 2010, 09:13:39 AM
She was a Security Agent, what is different from Prefects. But someone wrote that the Security Agents weren't working for the time... You can bring them back if you wish... Use the reason of the weapons.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 27, 2010, 01:45:17 AM
Quite a can of worms has been opened here....Our Anti-Hero Kurt has kidnapped Pinky and is holding her hostage in exchange for weapons.....But there is a deeper mystery here as well.

At the heart of it, this goes beyond Kurt's desire to aquire weapons.....His hatred of the Preps goes deeper than he himself really understands the reasons for....Yet.  The information he gained from the file on him that he blackmailed Crabblesnitch out of was only the start.  He must find out the rest.....And from those he hates the most.
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Post by: Repo Man on September 27, 2010, 07:40:18 PM
Looks like Nick's own story got alive? I actually considered deleting it. In my opinion, it shouldn't stay alive for long as Tony's Story has Nick in it.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 27, 2010, 10:24:25 PM
Oh, No, No, No......Keeping Nick's side story alive is needed ! 

Both of these side stories are essential as places to go for anyone to just express themselves.  Since they are short stories, there is no long-term plot devlopment, and anything can happen.  There is no timelines, no need to explain character's backstories, and no long-term planning. 

The short stories are a place where your writing style can be honed and tested, where you can see if what you've written 'reads well' within the context of what is happening at that particular part of the story.  No need to have to worry about detailed explanations, as we do in the large story.

Definetly keep the short stories....
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Post by: Repo Man on September 29, 2010, 08:53:39 PM
I agree with Chuck that something has to be done with Pedro (how old is he?). Nick can teach him to fight before Drifters come into existence. Nick should develop a friendship with Greasers too...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 29, 2010, 09:08:44 PM
 We also have to get the Nerds and Bullies to start taking their "revenge" at each other for the pics that Jake had stuck on the walls.  Maybe I could do that, but maybe anyone else want to?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 30, 2010, 12:11:58 AM
This could also spawn divisions in the cliques that Jake is hoping to get started.  I would have the Nerds and Bullies carry out their revenge attacks, but with this added intrigue......

Some members in the Bullies may not want to support Trent because of his homosexuality, which has always been rumored, but never proven....Till Now.

Ditto for the Jocks, who are stunned by Kirby's involvement.  There are some who will be disgusted and will not support or defend him.  Hell, if they're not comfortable showering with him, they're not going to want to fight by his side.

The case for the Nerds is not as well defined, because for Cornelius to act fruity on stage is probably not out of the realm of possibility for a Nerd.  Something else will be needed to drive a wedge between the Nerds.  A small bit of this has already begun, with Melvin somewhat defending Algie's actions, while the other Nerds have labeled him a traitor.

Jake's present plan is to drive wedges between the members of each clique.  Dive and Conquer sort of thing.  His reasoning, as twisted as it is, figures that since he has failed in causing the school to dissolve into mayhem by having the cliques fighting each other, he should find ways to cause divisions within each clique, turning members against each other.  In this way, he reasons, they will be weaker and more vulnerable to attacks, and even may fight among themselves.

Such a scenario is about to be set up among the Preps, and will cause divisions, when Derby learns the truth of how Tad has been boning Pinky.  Sides are going to be taken on this one, with all the attendant fallout out between the two richest families of Harrington and Spencer.

While there is no doubt that even the Bullies who still want to support Trent can smash the Nerds in battle one-on-one, keep in mind that each Nerd is now secretly carrying a weapon while the Bullies are not.  Should make for an Interesting fight.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on September 30, 2010, 09:33:06 AM
 I like it!  I can't wait to see what you have in store, this is much more in depth than what I originally had in mind.  This is going to be good!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on September 30, 2010, 03:30:05 PM
Preps play with power, we know that. And the way you said Harrington & Spencer "families" gave me an idea.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 01, 2010, 03:22:24 PM
Check out the parts I added, I thought of these parts yesterday and couldn't wait to add them. :)
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Post by: Repo Man on October 01, 2010, 06:37:41 PM
Haha poor Luntz! :)
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Post by: Repo Man on October 01, 2010, 08:53:50 PM
New fighting: Bif vs Norton and soon Nick will face Derby in a boxing match. Nick is a fine boxer, but don't make it easy for him...
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Post by: Repo Man on October 01, 2010, 09:00:41 PM
We should really find Nick a girl. Melody, maybe?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 01, 2010, 10:23:04 PM
Haha, good luck to Nick if he hooks up with Melody.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 02, 2010, 07:09:39 AM
I think Mercury is trying to hook Nick up with Christy.....

Couple of comments....Try to avoid specific dates in your story, except holidays.  We currently are in the latter part of January, around the third week.  Chapter 3 is being targered to come to an end on Valentine's Day.  There is still a whole lot of plot devlopment to center on Jake's plan to get the Cliques squabbling among themselves before then.  Since we have ended every chapter so far with a big event, at Halloween (bombongs) and Christmas (shootings), There will have to be another big event at the only upcoming holiday, Valentine's Day.  And for right now, we only have about half of Chapter 3 done.  All of those mentions of specific dates should be removed.

BTW, the target for Chapter 4 to end will be Easter, and Chapter 5 will end at the end of the school year.

Don't forget that Fatty has a full-lengh cast on his badly-broken leg, and will have for quite some time.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 02, 2010, 10:04:41 AM
 I'll go do something about the dates. Fatty can still walk though, but with crutches.  I assume that's how he gets around since there was no mention of a wheelchair.

-oh yeah, Chuck, you may want to go back to your latest post and change Kirby's name to Derby; about half way down. ;)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 02, 2010, 11:15:57 AM
Shit...Did I do that ?  (bangs head on table).....

OK, fixed.  Glad you caught that Mike !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 02, 2010, 11:19:14 AM
Trent became pretty unpopular, even among his clique. I don't know for how much the rest of the Bullies will allow a fag as their boss.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 02, 2010, 11:38:12 AM
Kirby will be next, or is that Derby.... :p  The only difference is that Kirby is not a leader.  He will be disowned by his friends, I'll have to come up with something.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 02, 2010, 11:53:38 AM
Chrissy is a pretty girl, but she's taller and older than Nick...Karen and Gloria are already "busy", and Melody is the only remaining non-clique girl. As for the clique girls, the only remaining are Mandy and Pinky, but they're both bitches.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 02, 2010, 01:08:42 PM
Yeah, well, why wouldn't Nick go after the best, even if she is a bit older ?

Personally, I was thinking Melody, or maybe even Angie, for Nick (since he was supposed to take her out).....But I don't really care.

You and Mercury work that out....But, my opinion, Nick's your character, you should be the one to pick the girl.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on October 02, 2010, 02:28:10 PM
You gotta know it will be easy for Nick if he wishes to hook up with Christy. Then, for some reason, he can decide to find another girl... We decide.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on October 02, 2010, 02:50:16 PM
Chuck, I LOVED that ! "Make them an offer they can't refuse...". I recognized that quote !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 03, 2010, 04:22:05 AM
From 'The Godfather' movies.....Just keeping up the traditions of Bully's In-Game references to other shit in movies.....

Notes......Jake rented the house in Bullworth Vale where Jimmy used to mow the grass....
Jake has a 'Mobile Base Radio' at the house with which he is listening to the Walkie-Talkies he planted around school....Those Walkie-Talkies have Wattage Boosters attached to them so that Jake is able to recieve the signals from as far away as he is.....Still, though, there might be trouble hearing the transmissions from time to time, depending on the weather or time of day, or electrical interference......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on October 03, 2010, 05:00:55 AM
I'm a great fan on the Godfather... I watched 1 and 2, will watch the 3 soon. I just love the way those movies are made, so different from the others, so perfect !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 03, 2010, 12:14:08 PM
The first part was just yesterday. I watched it over 10 times, though, and I have it on my computer so I didn't see it this time.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 03, 2010, 02:51:59 PM
Mercury, are you saying that Justin and Parker are Related to Tad ?

As in, say, cousins, or something ?

Could make sense, as lots of the Preps are "Inbreeds".....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on October 04, 2010, 12:07:22 PM
Not exactly... The word family is meant Mafia style. Derby has started his own "family", including Bif(f) and Chad. I expect Tad to give orders from his clinic bed, as the master of his own "family". See ?

EDIT : adding a "now" at the end helped making more sense... Copy that to the Works document, yeah ? :)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 04, 2010, 03:22:40 PM
Oh, OK, understand now.....Sorta like the 'Prep Mafia'......Gotcha.

Changes noted......

It might be noteworthy to point out to Repo that nobody over here goes to class on a Sunday.

Also, Mike, don't leave any of the queers in the closet....Believe the Greasers have one as well ?  Maybe some more pictures & posters could be in order....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 04, 2010, 03:45:36 PM
 You got it!  I didn't forget about them, I'm just trying to come up with something clever....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on October 04, 2010, 04:11:22 PM
Okay, Chuck, two things :

First, I noticed I wrote the Prep's name with only one "F" (Bif), and you did with two (Biff). We better find out what's the right one to correct it !

Second, could you sum me up the personality of Melody's ? I'd like to write somethin' about her...
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Post by: Repo Man on October 04, 2010, 06:30:39 PM
In Serbia in some schools we go to school on Sunday so I messed it up.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 05, 2010, 04:07:14 AM
No harm, Repo, I kinda figured it was something like that in your country.  Nick can still fight on a Sunday, though...Probably the best time, LOL.

I can't think right off if Vance was in any queer scenes in the games, or who he might have been seen kissing (except Jimmy)....Found this on the Wiki...

"Vance is bisexual and can be kissed by Jimmy. He is sometimes thought to be fully homosexual as, unlike the others he doesn't display interest in girls. However, he does mention meeting "a couple of chicks" in one of his lines of dialogue.  He also appears, wearing his pirate costume, on the small island in the bay in Old Bullworth Vale. As part of his costume he carries a wooden replica sword that Jimmy can steal. The sword functions like a yardstick, but never breaks. Beating him up on the island also earns Jimmy the pirate hat. Once Jimmy beats him, Vance won't be seen on the island again."

Mercury, about Melody.....This is one tough chick !  Description from the Wiki....

"Melody is a stereotypical goody two shoes. She regularly talks about how much she loves school and claims she wishes she could go to class seven days a week. However, she has a bad side that doesn't come out very often. She admits to being attracted to bad boys, and has an obvious crush on Jimmy (which becomes evident when he greets her, especially more than once). Even more relevant are her quotes when she is angered: she is the only little kid who uses foul language. She uses "bitch" as an insult, and she also tells people to "go to hell."
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 05, 2010, 11:06:36 AM
 I'm still working up something for Vance and Gord.  I have the day off todayso I'm sure I'll come up with something.  These two don't have as much dirt on them as Cornelius, Trent, or Kirby.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on October 05, 2010, 12:26:32 PM
Thanks alot !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 05, 2010, 01:41:47 PM
Hey, Gord's a Bi-sexual !  Remember 'Jealous Johnny' ?  He was kissing Lola, and Jimmy had to take pics....

Vance, from what I read, is a full-on human.....

Ha, Ha....This oughtta be interesting !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 06, 2010, 08:36:51 AM
God cut out with all that gay shit. It's perverted, and gross.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 06, 2010, 10:46:22 AM
 Sorry man, I don't care for it either, but its Vance and Gord we're talking about here.  It will all be over soon.  I tried to keep it as short as possible while still trying to keep key information in the story to make everything fit together and make sense.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 06, 2010, 01:11:21 PM
Well ok, but yo Mike your stories all involve shit, gay stuff and all that...  ;D
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 06, 2010, 01:15:14 PM
 The gay stuff is only there because its what is seperating members of the cliques.  Trust me man, I want to be done with it as much as you do. :)  As for the shit, thats in their becasue its funny all the time! ;)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 07, 2010, 02:00:07 AM
Most of the gay set-up stuff is done, as there are only 5 gay/bisexuals in the Cliques, and I believe Mike has covered them all.

Now, will be the fallout for them being 'Outed'.

Awaiting the big boxing match now, after that, I have next part ready to go...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 07, 2010, 07:17:40 AM
Will they return to their cliques or be abandoned forever?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 07, 2010, 11:14:54 AM
 I don't know yet, we'll see how the story goes and fit them in where it is appropriate.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 07, 2010, 12:39:22 PM
That's just it, Repo....We don't know yet....

When writing, even the characters I write about do surprising things that I didn't figure them doing when I began writing that part....They just sorta pull you into their story....

Example, I had no idea Kurt was gonna kiddnap Pinky until he actually did....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 08, 2010, 07:55:47 AM
OK, I'm gonna put in a 'filler' part while we're waiting on the fight details. 

I still got another part ready for after the fight I wrote yesterday.  But you guys do really good with the individual fight sequences, so I guess I'll wait on that.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 08, 2010, 10:52:32 AM
 Haha, that filler was great! Poor Trent :)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 08, 2010, 11:45:55 AM
Hey what about something like "Endless Summer" when the story is over? Like, no antagonists, just normal life of students in Bullworth Academy.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 08, 2010, 01:36:24 PM
 I was thinking the exact same thing, endless summer could be fun.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 08, 2010, 03:21:39 PM
It doesn't have to be just summer, but just a story with description of normal life of characters. Like everyday life in Bullworth Academy. Without antagonists, without big plots. It may be kinda boring, but there's nothing else to write about once the story is over and Jake is "defeated".
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 08, 2010, 07:04:31 PM
Hmmm, we could even start the school year again with new students!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 09, 2010, 11:20:44 PM
Well, gang....Let's not get ahead of ourselves....I just want to get the story finished to the end of the Bullworth school year at this point....Then, we'll see if we have time to do an 'Endless Summer' afterwords.

Reason I say this....Some of us remember how we lost BB last April, and it got rescued at the midnight hour.  And next April is 6 months away. 

If we continue after that, all well and good.  BUT, if not, I'd at least like to get the core story done.  We are at about 170,000 words now, but just at the halfway point.  And, as someone pointed out, It's been a year since we started the story.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 10, 2010, 11:29:02 AM
Now we have to get the match done. I'm out of ideas, only thing that it's on my mind for the match is just punching between Derby and Nick. Someone contribute to that.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 11, 2010, 04:01:19 PM
Ok, I guess I'll do it....But next fight, Repo, you gotta do it......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 12, 2010, 04:39:20 AM
I will, I will, don't worry...I was thinking to do the whole fight with Damon myself, but I thought it was kinda selfish. Anyway, we have to make a some kind of pause. So the next fight shouldn't happen just a post after the boxing match.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 12, 2010, 05:08:33 AM
Next Nick fight will have to be the Greasers.  Peanut is the leader now, since Johnny's gone.

To fight the Nerds, it would be an unfair match unless Melvin uses weapons against Nick.

Trent is out, the Bullies are in limbo for a leader.  Might bring Russell back.

I still hav a lot of loose plot ends to continue, so it will be awhile before the next fight.  Meantime, come up with a way that Nick and Peanut get pissed at each other to spark the next fight.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 13, 2010, 02:12:10 AM
Nick fought Bullies before, remember? In the beginning, in the dorm. Anyway, I have couple of ideas for the story (or Nick, to be exact):


1) I think Nick should be involved in the story more. Right now he's just a side character who does nothing but boss fights.

2) Nick should really fight Bif. No matter if it's in the boxing ring, The Hole or somewhere else, Bif is the boxing champion, and The Hole champion so I think Nick should take on him.

3) Maybe he can find out Jimmy's secret? Like, he sees Tony going to Jimmy's cave and follows him, finding out who Jimmy really is.

4) The new clique creation can be done in the next chapter (if there is a next chapter), in the intro, which can describe what do the characters do now and what's generally happening in Bullworth. The next season should be spring, right?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 13, 2010, 07:29:15 AM
OK, that wasn't a boss-type fight with the Bullies....That's what I was going after.

On the other points....

1)....Nick has been taking up a great deal of the story right now as it is.  Yeah, mostly fights so far, but I remind you this is where you headed this character, as a fighter with lots of experience.   I see him as soon becoming part of Tony's "Inner Circle" along with Constantinos and Laurent. Let's get these boss-fights done first, and then see where it takes us.

2)....Think that should be saved for another time, later in the school year.  There will be plenty of chances in future chapters, after Nick has more status in Tony's group.

3).....Nick has already met Jimmy, and knows him as "Hoppy".....Even if he were to find out it was Jimmy, he doesn't know who Jimmy is since he knows nothing of the back-history of Bullworth Academy, and most likely doesn't care.  Constantinos and Tony are the only students that know of Jimmy's escape, and only Tony knows of the secret cavern.  I'm planning on letting one other person in on Jimmy's secret, but it's not gonna be Nick.

4).....Since the other writers generally are against the formation of a new Clique, I'm thinking of more like a loose 'Federation' of certain characters.  Since Cliques are built on mutual interests or similar characteristics over time, that is not the case here.  I've just explained the back-story of Kurt and the Rockers, for example.  The 'bonds' for a new Clique just do not exist as yet to merit a brand new Clique at this point in the story.

Valentine's Day night will be the end of chapter 3.  Since we always end each chapter with a full-blown crises of some sort, then it will happen at the conclusion of the Valentine's Party/Dance.  I already have the germ of an idea of what the crises will be.  Chapter 4 will run from then until Easter.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 13, 2010, 02:47:22 PM
Nick could maybe be told what happened in Bullworth one year ago, but not be told about Jimmy's Lair.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 13, 2010, 10:34:36 PM
That will eventually happen as Nick's character gets more involved with Tony's group, Yes.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 15, 2010, 06:08:14 AM
You messed up a bit describing all those strange things in Bullworth. Police actually does have guns, but in Bully we don't see them because our protagonist is a 15-year-old so police doesn't want to attack him with guns. The Traveling Carnival stays in the town forever so you can always access it in the game. Dunno why they called it Traveling, though.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 15, 2010, 10:39:49 AM
That's just the strange thing.  It's "Billy Crane's Traveling Carnival", but doesn't travel.  The reason for that will be revealed much later in our story.  Although one of the Cops makes a allusion to guns ("I have something like that that fires bullets"), guns are never seen in the game, ever.  They have to resort to throwing bricks at Jimmy if they can't bust him (Some of the townspeople throw bricks also).  In our story, the Cops aren't equipped with guns at all because Mr. Harrington, who runs most everything, doesn't want them to have guns.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on October 15, 2010, 03:59:03 PM
Like that idea of "Federation" more than creating a new clique... The notion of Inner Circle too.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 15, 2010, 06:59:38 PM
 Yay! Mercury's back!!!!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Junkie Mater on October 16, 2010, 04:33:40 AM
And also the old Jenkemator.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 16, 2010, 12:39:19 PM
I'll have Nick fight Bif, but it will happen later in the next chapter. I already know why they will fight and where, but I won't reveal it. But, before that fight, a fight with Peanut will have to be done.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on October 16, 2010, 01:41:54 PM
Had connexion problems these last days... You know about the wave of strikes currently happening in France ? People don't want to work until they're 62, but Sarkozy wants them to. Some of my friends participate to make the Mayhem at their college and in the streets, but they don't even know what it's for... Anyway, the people working for Orange (The French Verizon...) had their own strike too. Screw them.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 16, 2010, 04:56:37 PM
Let's hope things get resolved....Over here, the Government wants to push the retirement age to 70 eventually so they won't have to pay out Social Security to those younger.  With the present 10% unemployment rate, in my opinion, that is not going to be a solution.

Glad to see, though, that you weren't on another extended 'Holiday'......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 19, 2010, 11:58:54 AM
We also need to have a football match between Bullworth Bullhorns and some other team from some other school.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 20, 2010, 04:10:23 PM
Ehhhh....Wish you'd come up with that suggestion a few months ago....

Problem is, it's February now in the story, and American HS football is only played from August thru November.

Perhaps, we could do something in the way of practice when Spring comes around in the story.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 21, 2010, 07:39:49 AM
At the end of every chapter, there's a big thing going on, isn't it? So there can be a football match between Bullworth Academy and some rival school, and Jake can sabotage it somehow.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on October 21, 2010, 11:04:25 AM
 That would have been a good idea, but at this point in the story football season is over.  Its basketball time now! :)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 22, 2010, 10:15:40 AM
Hey what about Nick becoming the Hole champion in the future? Since Bif is the current champion, and I will have them fight (but a lot later) that can be a title match.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 22, 2010, 11:19:58 AM
Also I think I know how to light fire between Nick and Peanut, but it will happen in spring.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on October 23, 2010, 10:41:44 AM
Nick and Peanut aren't friends, but aren't enemies though, since Nick helped Peanut to fight against the Preps and to fight back.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 23, 2010, 10:56:04 AM
Have you noticed that all Nick does is fighting? That won't last forever, but he has to complete all boss fights first. First he fought Damon (Jock), then Derby (Prep) and next opponent is Peanut (Greaser). He will also fight Bif, but a lot after Peanut. Both next fights are gonna happen in the next chapter, when it's spring.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on October 23, 2010, 10:57:38 AM
Also, you had Bif say "old chap" to Derby, but remember that Bif doesn't speak in English accent. :)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on October 23, 2010, 11:00:49 AM
Oh, thanks, you're right...

For the fight against Peanut, make it very friendly and fair-play, whoever wins.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 28, 2010, 08:46:18 PM
Alright, we are coming close to the close of Chapter 3....Get your stories in now, for the spliting of the cliques....Greasers, Jocks, Nerds....I'll do some on the Bullies.  The Preps are already split into two at this point. 

Ted, and Peanut, are somewhat coming to the defense of the Gay kids, Vance and Kirby. 

Kirby, in fact, is being hidden under the bleachers for now (By Ted & Laurent), and Vance is hiding out at the tenemments.  Peanut should come to his aid.

The Nerds need to be further divided by the disagreements over the weapons.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 10, 2010, 11:57:13 PM
Excellent, Boys...Just Excellent.

Really liked that part about Pinky....That was cool.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on November 10, 2010, 11:58:40 PM
As soon as I read that part about Pinky I thought to myself "Chuck is going to like this".
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on November 11, 2010, 05:38:34 AM
Oh yeah ? Glad you appreciated my part, guys.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 11, 2010, 06:30:58 AM
Was super...Your best yet.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on November 11, 2010, 06:59:44 AM
Whoa, didn't realize that... I'm gonna try to write as well for my next parts.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 15, 2010, 08:35:34 AM
The school is now full of drug addicts, I guess? And someone made Russell just too retarded.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 15, 2010, 10:36:30 AM
It's not possible to make Russell any more retarded than he already is....

K, guys....Here's the deal....I wanna ask you to hold your storylines till Chapter 4.

I'm close to the finish of Chapter 3....Sorry such a long set-up, but this Chapter ending has been a little complex.  The set-up is finally done, I just need to do the closing scenes, which I hope will be just 2 more posts (or so), and I'll try to finish them up by midnight.

I am sure you will like them.  There is a certain sequence of events that are going to go down to reach the climax.  No one is getting killed, but some are going to get hurt.

I put up 5 posts that I have been working on all week (Start back on the previous page). Stay patient, and we can start a whole new chapter soon.   Wordwise, this has turned into our longest Chapter to date...at about 70,000 words.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on November 15, 2010, 11:18:22 AM
I can be patient, its worth the wait. :)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on November 16, 2010, 02:00:08 PM
I just love those last parts... Just awesome. Jake looks like an expert, I strangely kinda want his plan to get success. Love the descriptions too. Karens Dress. Nick's attitude. Tony's cold blood (No pun). Love it all.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on November 16, 2010, 03:32:11 PM
All the mayhem, its so fantastic!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 16, 2010, 03:51:11 PM
Great! And now it is the Chapter 4? Cool.

As always, I again happen to see something: You made Miss Peters a lot shorter than Burton. I played PC, I don't know if you did, and I can inform she's taller than Burton.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 16, 2010, 04:41:54 PM
^ OK, fixed that.  I just assumed she was shorter.

More to come, Repo.....When you see 'End Of Chapter Three" at the bottom, it will be done.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 17, 2010, 05:34:11 AM
I'm fixing to add the final part.....Some notes...

Nobody is dead, but some are injured....

Derby should be in the Clinic a week.
Tony should be in the Clinic two weeks.
Ray should be in the Clinic a whole month.

Keep these in mind as you write your next parts.....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 17, 2010, 03:08:23 PM
Hey what about some kind of connection between Nick and Jake? Like, they were childhood friends or something, and Nick didn't recognize him in Bullworth.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on November 17, 2010, 03:18:18 PM
If he doesn't recognize him first, OK. But keep in mind Nick used to be in L.A....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 17, 2010, 04:28:23 PM
And Jake?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 17, 2010, 04:30:21 PM
And someone start up the next chapter...Nick's fight with Peanut will happen here and that should be it with his boss fights. Let me do the fight. I can just tell you it won't be just ordinary fist-fighting. Anyway, what's with the queers? Are they back in their respective cliques or what? And now the season is spring, right? When does the American football season start?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 17, 2010, 05:55:10 PM
Norton took over the Greaser Clique, so the boss fight should be with him.  At any rate, there will have to be set up a reason for the fight in the first place.

As to the queers, I'm going to work on a soulition to get them accepted again by their respctive Cliques.  All I can predict is that some will be more forgiving than others. 

The Prep split will stay in place, for now....There is real bad blood between Derby and Tad over Pinky.  I'm foreseeing that once Derby gets out of the clinic, he will want to go to war with the Rockers, but he is severely outnumbered at this point.  That, and the secret protection that is being provided to the Rockers from Harrington & Crabblesnitch will make it difficult.  The truth of that will gradually be revealed as the story goes on.

Not quite spring yet....Still mid-February....Spring is late March, early April.

American Football starts up usually in late August.......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 18, 2010, 07:38:12 AM
I think Norton's even better for a boss fight. Nick would kick Peanut's ass, I think.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 18, 2010, 07:41:28 AM
I don't like that Tom raids a store with just a slingshot. WTF? He couldn't rob a newstand with that.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 18, 2010, 09:19:32 AM
What can we say ?  Strange things happen in Bullworth....A slingshot hold-up is not only likely, but a very real prospect, given that over here, people rob stores just by saying they have a weapon when they never really do.

Earlier question about Jake....It hasn't yet been revealed where he is from. His backstory will gradually be revealed, I'm planning on that through Chapter 4.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on November 18, 2010, 11:52:21 AM
^^Hehe, you don't have to like it, but what's done is done.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on November 18, 2010, 02:21:28 PM
Maybe Derby will have to choose between being outnumbered by the Rockers or propose to Tad to make the clique complete again... And doing so making the trades AND the relationships together. Hey ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 19, 2010, 09:43:31 AM
What do you guys think, should the fight with Norton take place in Hole or somewhere else? I know one location for it, but I think it suits a Peanut fight more. Plus, I think all students would demand to watch a fight like this in the Hole. What do you think?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 19, 2010, 02:33:53 PM
What can we say ?  Strange things happen in Bullworth....A slingshot hold-up is not only likely, but a very real prospect, given that over here, people rob stores just by saying they have a weapon when they never really do.

Earlier question about Jake....It hasn't yet been revealed where he is from. His backstory will gradually be revealed, I'm planning on that through Chapter 4.

I think it would be cool if he and Nick knew each other. Jake was the new kid at some point, and he maybe came from LA.

Anyway, I gotta one question. When and why did Jake leave Bullworth Academy?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 20, 2010, 12:35:40 AM
More than one question, looks like....

Jake went over the edge and stole the classic car the greasers had over at the autoshop at the time and tried to run down Tony, crashing the car in the stone wall near the steps by the fountain in Chapter 1.  Jake fled the scene rather than be busted and hid in various places around the school, including in the Hobo's lot and under the Dorm.  In doing so, he stopped taking his psyche meds and became delusional, and began dreaming up ways to take over the school.

I vote for a Hole fight. (for Norton).

We'll have to see how it goes with the Preps....First Derby, once he gets out of the Clinic, should try to attack Kurt and the Rockers, as he is pissed about Pinky.  When this fails, and when Derby realizes how outnumbered he is, he will have to resolve his issues with Tad (also over Pinky) and make the move to re-unite the clique....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on November 20, 2010, 03:34:10 PM
We'll have to see how it goes with the Preps....First Derby, once he gets out of the Clinic, should try to attack Kurt and the Rockers, as he is pissed about Pinky.  When this fails, and when Derby realizes how outnumbered he is, he will have to resolve his issues with Tad (also over Pinky) and make the move to re-unite the clique....
I vote for that.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 21, 2010, 07:41:06 AM
Okay, it's gonna happen in The Hole. Another question: I'm not sure either to have them fight deep in the fourth chapter or get that over with quickly.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 21, 2010, 10:03:28 AM
I would say....Sooner, before the middle of the Chapter....The reason for the fight will have to be set up.  And, if Mike's plan doesn't work out for Peanut to be accepted back into the Clique, maybe as a condition of the fight, If Nick beats Norton, Peanut would have to be re-instated as Clique Leader.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on November 21, 2010, 10:14:43 AM
Hmmm....that actually sounds really good.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 21, 2010, 10:27:28 AM
Sure it does.  Even if Peanut's plan works, and the others accept Peanut back, Norton will never give up being the Clique Leader unless he is forced to do so somehow.  And since he can beat the shit out of every other Greaser, they won't be able to make him give it up on their own.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on November 21, 2010, 10:34:15 AM
And that's where Nick comes in!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 21, 2010, 10:55:03 AM
Exactly....It will work out perfect.

I would keep having Peanut do what he is doing....This could be interesting.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 21, 2010, 01:05:40 PM
What if Peanut hires Nick to take down Norton? Nick could initially refuse, but then something can happen which makes Nick change his mind.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on November 21, 2010, 01:20:29 PM
Yeah, like Peanut doing a service for Nick... Talking to Christy for example. ;)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 21, 2010, 02:16:10 PM
Nah, Nick's now with Melody I think. Chuck had them together at the dance.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on November 21, 2010, 03:43:46 PM
Yeah, and Christy was with Ted, but I think it was only temporary....?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 22, 2010, 04:33:34 AM
Nick is zeroing in on Melody.  Will be some storylines about them soon.

Ted took Christy to the dance to make Mandy jealous...See my last segments.

We still have to hook Christy + Angie up with someone. (Maybe Peanut ? or Norton ? Constantinos ? Laurent ?)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on November 22, 2010, 11:29:33 AM
Yes, but...

"Nice !" Nick exclaimed while putting on his Letterman Jacket.
"That suits you, bro. Hey Kirby, I told you we had to take the big size for that tough guy !"
"Turn around, Nicky !" Christy said playfully.

Nick turned on his feet to wink at the girl, arms apart for her to admire his new jacket. He had immediately fell in love for her, whatever she was wearing. She was just the perfect girl for him, what surely wasn't the opinion of Pinky.

"Wait... Do you really like that guy ?" She asked.
"Calm down, Pinky, he looks hot after all, doesn't he ?"
"Not as hot as Tony." Pinky whispered proudly.
"What do you mean ?"
"Nothing. Just what I just said."
"Huhuh." Christy nodded, not convinced.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 22, 2010, 01:17:22 PM
I know, I know....But 'Love' is fickle, is it not ?

Perhaps Nick found her to be too much of an Airhead.....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on November 22, 2010, 04:16:01 PM
Well, OK. I thought they could have a sexy time, but well.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on November 22, 2010, 04:36:42 PM
Shall I post the fight?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 22, 2010, 11:43:29 PM
Not yet.....The reason for the fight has to be set-up yet.  Besides, Mike needs to have Peanut interfere with the Bullies drug trade much more to impress the other Greasers, and gain back their respect.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 10, 2010, 03:56:04 PM
The fight's over, Nick's again the winner. I made this a bit different: instead of Nick knocking Norton out like he did to all previous opponents, Norton forfeits so his reputation is ruined and Peanut can take over again.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 10, 2010, 04:48:34 PM
I had the same thoughts.....That was fine thinking, Repo !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 22, 2010, 04:13:54 AM
Not meaning to tread on your part of the story, Mike....But on a recon mission to Harrington House, I noticed TWO Shields.  I had written this part eariler tonight, before I saw your last entry.....I altered it to fit in, so you can still have the Bullies mount a mission for the other one.  

I won't tell you where it is, I'll let you find it.........
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on December 22, 2010, 10:58:53 AM
lol, you'll have to tell me, I can't get in there remember?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 22, 2010, 03:38:53 PM
OH SHIT !!  Well, I'll PM you with the details.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 22, 2010, 03:56:15 PM
I'm sorry, Chuck.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 22, 2010, 04:13:41 PM
About What ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 22, 2010, 04:23:00 PM
I dunno.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 22, 2010, 04:44:08 PM
I'm working on setting up a Hole Fight with Russell for Nick.  When Nick wins, the result will be that the Bullies will have to give up something.
Title: Re: Repo The King
Post by: Repo Man on December 22, 2010, 05:58:09 PM
Cool. But I'm not going to write it.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 22, 2010, 07:21:24 PM
No ?  Why not, you are good at it.
Title: Re: Repo The King
Post by: Repo Man on December 22, 2010, 07:49:37 PM
I will try to think of something good for that. PM me your reason for setting up the fight if you thought of it.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 22, 2010, 07:55:07 PM
OK.  It will be awhile for me to set it up though.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 24, 2010, 08:44:10 PM
OK, Repo....It's all set.  Up to you now.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 25, 2010, 06:38:41 AM
*Heart beating* Ooookay...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 26, 2010, 11:54:08 AM
Finally, the fight is done! Some parts of Nick's life are discovered here, too. Enjoy and say whatever's bad.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 26, 2010, 04:33:58 PM
So Nick's life is a lie ?  So he doesn't have his 4th degree Black Belt ? 

Born in Jersey, moved to Los Angles ?  A gangster Father, Mother escapes the mob to the west coast.......Or is that all a dream ?

Liked the fight....Good twists and turns, but Nick came through as we knew he would. 

Good Job, Repo !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on December 26, 2010, 04:44:32 PM
That was really good, I like it. The only thing is, the rest of the Bullies are not as loyal as Russell is. To keep their end of the deal they are going to keep the drugs off campus, but still offer them in the alleys in town. They have a business alliance with the Townies for the drugs and they don't want to give up the business completely.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 26, 2010, 05:02:20 PM
So Nick's life is a lie ?  So he doesn't have his 4th degree Black Belt ? 

Born in Jersey, moved to Los Angles ?  A gangster Father, Mother escapes the mob to the west coast.......Or is that all a dream ?

Liked the fight....Good twists and turns, but Nick came through as we knew he would. 

Good Job, Repo !

I can edit it if you don't like it. I think it was stated that Nick's mother resides in New Coventry, at least in Nick's Story I think it was, so why would they leave Los Angeles to move into shitty Bullworth and shitty New Coventry if they were wealthy enough to pay Nick's karate lessons? Then, I think that 5th dan (or 4th dan it was?) is too much for a 15-year-old kid so I think it would be good if he made all that up only to not end up as an outcast or something.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 26, 2010, 05:03:13 PM
@ Repo....Has already been established that Nick & Mother moved to Bullworth from Los Angles, and that Nick stated he has 4th Dan Black Belt, and went to a Dojo there.  No other back story exists so far as to his origins before that. 

Introducing the element that he was born in Jersey, son of a gangster father is still a good back story, we will just need a element to explain the move to Los Angeles (Nick's Mother wanting to remove him from that sort of Mob influnce, maybe ?), and no explaination as yet as to why he was brought to Bullworth. Living in a slum Los Angeles area doesn't mean that they couldn't afford lessons or whatever....There are plenty of Dojos in the inner-city areas of L.A.

Then again, Nicky's family's past mob connections could be the reason he was brought to Bullworth somehow.....



@ Mike....No, I fully expected that that part would continue....As I'm sure the Greasers and others would continue to buy from other (Townie) sources in the Bullworth Town-New Coventry-Blue Skies area just as they did before.  Tony's interest was that the Bullies not sell on campus, further upsetting the balance of the Clique structure.

Are you still planning for the Bullies to mount an Attack on Harrington Hall to locate and steal the other shield ?  Best to strike soon before the Preps re-unite.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on December 26, 2010, 05:07:28 PM
Yeah, I still have to write the part about the Bullies taking the shield. Remind me again, which Preps are residing in the HH now that they are split?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 26, 2010, 05:16:52 PM
Derby, Bif, Chad, and Bryce are still at Harrington Hall.

Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 26, 2010, 05:19:03 PM
@ Repo....Has already been established that Nick & Mother moved to Bullworth from Los Angles, and that Nick stated he has 4th Dan Black Belt, and went to a Dojo there.  No other back story exists so far as to his origins before that. 

Introducing the element that he was born in Jersey, son of a gangster father is still a good back story, we will just need a element to explain the move to Los Angeles (Nick's Mother wanting to remove him from that sort of Mob influnce, maybe ?), and no explaination as yet as to why he was brought to Bullworth. Living in a slum Los Angeles area doesn't mean that they couldn't afford lessons or whatever....There are plenty of Dojos in the inner-city areas of L.A.

Then again, Nicky's family's past mob connections could be the reason he was brought to Bullworth somehow.....



@ Mike....No, I fully expected that that part would continue....As I'm sure the Greasers and others would continue to buy from other (Townie) sources in the Bullworth Town-New Coventry-Blue Skies area just as they did before.  Tony's interest was that the Bullies not sell on campus, further upsetting the balance of the Clique structure.

Are you still planning for the Bullies to mount an Attack on Harrington Hall to locate and steal the other shield ?  Best to strike soon before the Preps re-unite.

He told Tony (or whoever) that he got his black belt in Kobra Kai dojo. How I remember Karate Kid, Kobra Kai isn't some low class karate school.

Plus, if they were living in a slum neighborhood, I doubt they would spend money on karate lessons rather than save it for living.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 27, 2010, 03:50:44 PM
Your character...Your backstory....I'll go back and purge those parts I wrote referring to L.A.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on December 29, 2010, 12:17:38 AM
 Okay, the Bullies now have the other shield. The prefects and local police will now be notified of the thefts and be on alert. No one knows who did the last robbery due to the stealth of the Bullies as well as their masks. However, the Nerds will look awefully suspicious after being seen in the Harrington House.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on December 29, 2010, 05:43:24 PM
After talking about potential bike races, here are my thoughts. Due to the friction between the cliques, Tony will try to flex his mediator powers and try to spend some quality time with groups or individuals from the cliques. Most of his attempts will end in a SNAFU. Tony (preferably) will shortly after try and make up for these failed attempts by holding a bike race. The bike race can wait until spring, but keep in mind that we are already past the midway point in February and it is already starting to warm outside a little each day. Also, for the sake of lengthening our room for stories and events, we should set up Easter so that it happens to fall in early April, rather than March.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 29, 2010, 10:13:14 PM
I was already planning for a first weekend Easter date (aka 7 April), as this gives about 7 weeks for Chapter 4.....From early April to early June will involve Chapter 5. 

Who sponsered the game's bike races ?  We can't fit 14 of them in, like the game,but could maybe reference the ones we don't....?  We have the New Coventry, Bullworth Town, and Bullworth Vale locations.....We could use them all, for the Greasers, Bullies/Nerds, Preps, in that order....Maybe the lone school race for the Jocks....

As to Snafu's, PM me with your ideas on how these fuck-ups might happen. This sounds interesting.

Timewise, we are at present about 2 + a half weeks after the Valentines Bloodbath, or very early March at this point.  I plan on getting Tony out of the sling soon, as well as re-uniting the Prep Clique and the Prep's attack on the Rockers at their residence.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 30, 2010, 07:33:43 AM
Will Pinky rejoin Preppies?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on December 30, 2010, 10:46:34 AM
Oh, I was thinking that the Preps would sponser the bike races. In addition, the students could pay a small fee when they sign-up for the race.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 30, 2010, 11:07:08 AM
It's all money with Preps.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on December 30, 2010, 11:14:55 AM
When you got it, flaunt it.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 30, 2010, 11:18:57 AM
I think Russell could be a Prep. He's rich, and hates Greasers. Perfect.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 30, 2010, 12:07:15 PM
Russell is obviously not Prep material, and is not rich....Just more well off than the other Bullies in the fact that his (absent) parents own a house over in the Vale.  Besides, Russell is loyal to his Bully boys and would never betray them.

Pinky is not going back to the Preps anytime soon, if ever.  She and Kurt have gotten pretty solid, and she is getting the adventure she craves by being the band's singer.  And Kurt is taking care of her material needs via the 'allowances' bring paid out to the Rockers by Crabblesnitch (a mystery to be resolved late in chapter 5 as to Kurt's origins)......Pinky's presence with the Rockers will continue to be a bone of contention to Derby no matter how things turn out.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 30, 2010, 12:22:57 PM
Is Kurt Crabblesnitch's son?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on December 30, 2010, 12:58:36 PM
I was just thinking....how awesome would it be if this ever became an actual game? It would be awesome to actually play through a second Bully game that followed the NES. Of course we would know exactly what would happen, but cool none the less.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 30, 2010, 12:59:55 PM
I haven't decided that yet.  That was my first direction, but the more I thought on it, it seemed too easy.  It's quite possible he could be the illegitimate son of one of the Prep families or even a gangster.  However it turns out, I want it to impact the downfall of the corrupt apparatus that runs the Bullworth Towns and the school.  I have a feeling that Kurt will help bring that about, playing a sort of 'Anti-Hero', in that by finding out his past will set in motion the destruction of the rich families power base in the story. 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 30, 2010, 01:16:36 PM
Hey, right now I see that it was Mercury who created the NES. I started to think it was Chuck.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on December 30, 2010, 01:17:27 PM
Yeah, we talked about it for a long time and finally Mercury got the ball rolling.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 30, 2010, 01:21:36 PM
But don't forget who made the three stories all have "The NES" in their name! ME! Only Mercury did it.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 30, 2010, 01:48:42 PM
I was following and finally entered the story partway into Chapter 1.  As the story progressed, Mercury and I started trading Emails about the directions the story would take.  At first, the climatic ending to Chapter 1 (the Bombings) was our focus.

But, how do we top that ?  A lot of story was left, so we decided to have a big event to end each chapter, something different each time.  Jake was the pure villain (and still is), because that is how Mercury set up the story.  One of the others did the car crash scene that caused Jake to flee the school, so that's why he is doing havoc from a distance.  It's not possible to bring Jake back to school after what he has done, and the others know it.  I've been trying to figure a way to bring Algie back, but it's unlikely his Clique would accept him after what he did, not to mention what the others would do to him.

When the board was going to close, we were planning to continue the story anyway, like maybe on a blog or something.  That didn't have to happen, and we're still here.  I wish Mercury was back to contribute, but in his absence, I still have to keep the story moving forward.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 30, 2010, 03:28:21 PM
Speaking of Algie, no-one wrote something about him for a while.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 30, 2010, 04:08:26 PM
I know, I'm gonna get back to him when I can figure out what to do with him.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on December 30, 2010, 04:22:26 PM
If someone writes about him, they will have to get back a lot of time.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 01, 2011, 07:36:55 PM
That's easy enough to cover.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 10, 2011, 08:30:19 AM
I will maybe write something like a poker game tournament in the future. It won't end nicely, though. What do you guys think about it?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 10, 2011, 01:18:24 PM
Sounds good to me.  Who's gonna run it ?  Will it be on-campus or off-campus ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 10, 2011, 02:14:43 PM
I meant in the dorm, on that poker table. I already wrote that part on paper, if you wish I can PM the details to you.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 10, 2011, 02:33:43 PM
Sure, if you'd like.  Poker games would be cool.  We have only had a couple of references to any so far....You and Mike, I think.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 10, 2011, 02:36:27 PM
I just want to give a use to that lonely poker table in the corner.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 10, 2011, 02:39:07 PM
One in the Beach House & Harrington House as well.  In fact, the Damn Preps should be card-playing sharks by now.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on January 10, 2011, 06:38:42 PM
Sounds like a good idea to me. we already have a drug ring, why not poker?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 11, 2011, 04:17:17 AM
Could be the Preps next enterprise, since they're shit out of luck on the drug dealing.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 11, 2011, 01:12:38 PM
I was thinking maybe Tony's crew of friends can start a business to make money. They can also have a name, so we can after all name them Drifters. Aforementioned poker, or maybe something else.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on January 11, 2011, 04:09:25 PM
Poker. That's it. In the Godfather, the Corleone family get their money from gambling, because the politicians are friendly towards it.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 12, 2011, 09:18:24 AM
Queen Christy...why does that sound familiar to me...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 12, 2011, 09:33:09 AM
Actually, Mercury's Idea.......About 3 pages back.....
____________________________________________________________

"You know I can buy you anything. Anything. You'd be a real princess."
"That would be interesting, Bif..." Christy said, crossing her legs.
"Sure that would. You'd be the Queen. Queen of Bullworth."
____________________________________________________________

Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 12, 2011, 09:48:32 AM
Christy can't be Queen, Bif ain't the King... ;)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 12, 2011, 09:54:35 AM
It's a relative term.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 12, 2011, 10:22:06 AM
It is...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 16, 2011, 11:47:44 PM
Aww, shit, I fucked up with Lance. Gonna change that post. And those Punks are awesome, maybe Nick will fight them.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 17, 2011, 03:22:03 AM
Which post was that ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 17, 2011, 04:03:08 AM
Fixed it. Now it's Pedro.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 17, 2011, 04:07:35 AM
Which reply # was it, so I can go copy the correction for my files ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 17, 2011, 04:09:45 AM
That's #478.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 17, 2011, 04:11:38 AM
OK, Thanks........
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 17, 2011, 09:43:51 PM
No, Jimmy won't stay in hiding forever....Only until those trying to set him up are exposed.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 26, 2011, 03:19:42 PM
Nick has to do one or more crew-on-one fights. It could be Rockers, ending with beating up Kurt (that wouldn't be a real boss fight, because I think Nick would kick Kurt's ass any day). The fight should be one-sided, which means Nick should beat them all pretty bad (maybe in front of students too).
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 26, 2011, 06:49:20 PM
Let me understand this.....You want Nick to take on an entire Clique ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 27, 2011, 07:02:18 AM
I had this idea...somehow, in Chapter 5, Derby finds out that Hattrick's House is Rocker hideout and that Pinky's with them. He pays Nick to go there and get Pinky, and he will be involved in a fight, in which he kicks everyone's ass, plus Kurt's ass too. He kidnaps Pinky and brings her back to Harrington House. Jake then approaches Kurt with a request to help him take over the school and take Pinky back.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 27, 2011, 09:52:16 AM
Well....No.   Derby already knows about the Rockers and Hattrick House, and that Pinky is there.  In fact, he has made a reconciliation with Tad and the other Preps for the sole purpose of attacking the Rockers at Hattrick House and trying to steal Pinky back. 

Bif has made Christy his girl with the aim of getting some 'Inside Intel' on the Rockers and Hattrick House, since she is Pinky's friend.  And the Rockers are keeping track of Derby's plans via the hidden Walkie-Talkie planted by Jake, since Benny now has a receiver capable of picking up the signals.

So, the attack will happen soon. I won't reveal the outcome here, yet.  Don't want to spoil the surprise.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 27, 2011, 12:38:54 PM
Alright, fine. Only, I think it doesn't sound realistic as a bunch of arrogant rich kids usually would hire someone to do the dirty work for them, rather than spill their blue blood and filth their clothes. But, the story goes as it goes so ok.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 28, 2011, 06:07:20 AM
A suggestion: change the name from "The Bullworth Never Ending Story" to just "The Never Ending Story" and it will get back to its original name! ;)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 29, 2011, 01:35:03 AM
Mercury and I had a talk about this awhile back....The name "The Never Ending Story" is the title of a book and 3 movies that have nothing to do with Bully.  It is also a copyrighted title.  If one were to Google 'Never Ending Story', all the references come up in relation to the book and movie, and none come up regarding Bully or Bullworth. 

Our original intent was to provide a portal for readership via a Google search.  It does no good to have the best and longest Bully FanFic if there is no way for anyone interested to read it.  Mercury wanted to change the title awhile back, but feared he might somehow affect the thread.  When I re-organized the section this past week, I was able to go ahead and change the titles.  We still want to have the 'Never Ending Story' as a part of that, but it can not be the sole title.

We're going to try this title for awhile and see how it works in relation to easier access from the web's search engines.  The name may be changed again at a future time, as this is still a story in progress.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 29, 2011, 06:23:09 AM
A completely made-up name would be best imo.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on January 30, 2011, 01:11:52 PM
Sorry to fuck everything up, bro, but anyone could do a very quick summary of what happened since Debry couldn't find flowers at the Yum Yum Market ? I found out I couldn't read all of this. And I need to write.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 30, 2011, 01:17:02 PM
Whew...You should check in more often, my friend !

Hang on a bit....I'll check back and summerize.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 30, 2011, 01:22:11 PM
Nick beat Russell!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on January 30, 2011, 02:30:04 PM
Oh yeah, Chuck....I'll add my bit about the Prep/Greaser thing once you finish Tony's conversation with Karen. Its just that you left him at the end of the post asking Karen a question, so I didn't feel right about suddenly transporting him to the Auto Shop.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 30, 2011, 02:44:02 PM
No, that's Ok Mike....That's a 'Planned Fade Out'.....I will probably refer to Karen's discription in the past tense in Tony's future thoughts, so go ahead and put in your part.

Mercury, you have posted a couple of times since the start of Chapter 4....So, I’ll start there.

Tom & Troy rob ‘Rocket In My Pocket’ store and get away with it.
Rockers recover, Tony wakes up in clinic after falling off roof. Is in Clinic for 2 weeks.
Ray is seriously injured, will be in clinic until Chapter 5.
Melvin and Fatty talk about weapons. (Your Post).
Bullies hide newly aquirred weapons on path between Library and Harrington House.
Peanut wins a slingshot duel with Wade in the School Foyer.
Laurent & Constantinos take over Tony’s office until he returns.
Mandy and Ted get back together.
Zoe comes to Clinic, agrees to help Tony and Karen.
Vance went to live in a hidden cave on Pirate Island.
Bif starts wooing Christy. (Your Post).
Peanut fights with Davis and Tom, Norton gets knocked out by errant Spud.
Norton cons Damon into bringing Jocks to fight against Bullies without Ted’s knowedge.
Mr. Luntz returns from New York, the Mafia wars have begun.
Jake talks to Jerry and Duncan to set up meeting with the Townies.
Christie and Pinky start having weekly meetings at Shinjo’s.
Greasers / Jocks fight the Bullies in Parking Lot. Melody is hit in guts by errant Spud.
Nick leaps onto Russell, uses him as springboard to smash Norton to the ground.
Prefects break up fight, Norton challenges Nick to fight in the Hole.
Nick and Norton fight in the Hole, Nick wins.
Peanut takes back over the Greasers, demotes Norton.
Ted threatens Jocks with loss of scholarships because of the fight, demotes Damon.
Russell demands Trent be brought back into Clique.
Trent talks to Tony in Clinic, tell all he knows about Jake.
Derby finds out All flowers and candy stocks are gone, bought up by Tad’s faction.
Bif reveals his real plan for making Christy his Girlfriend.
Omar, leader of the Townies, agrees to meet with Jake aka Leo Cash.
Trent re-joins Bullies, they attack Nerds at Library.
Trent makes Bullies move hidden weapons to a spot behind Dorm where Jake once hid.
Nerds find book in Library authored by Edward the Prefect about weapons at Bullworth.
Picture in book shows defensive Shield, Nerds decide to steal it from Preps.
Bullies attack Corneluis, beat him and steal book.
Melvin, Fatty, and Cornelius enter Harrington House armed, Knock out Derby, steal shield.
Tony is released from Clinic wearing a sling because of healing injury where Jake shot him.
Tony gets Nick to challenge Russell to hole fight to stop the Bullies drug trade.
Nick and Russell fight in the Hole, Nick wins. Russell agrees to stop selling drugs on Campus.
Bullies attack Preps at Harrington House in sneak attack, steal second Shield.
Bullies stash second Shield under Dorm. Both Bullies and Nerds are unaware there are 2 Shields.
Perfects find out about missing Shields, search Dorm but can’t find them.
Benny fixes old wideband radio, finds he can pick up transmissions from Jake’s hidden Walkie Talkies.
Bullies sell drugs at In & Out Motel to Jimmy, without recognizing him.
Tony tries to play catch with Fatty with bad results.
Algie spots Jake (Ace Adams) off carnival grounds and follows him.
Jake has meeting with Omar & the Townies, they agree to help him attack Bullworth for $3 Grand.
Jake discovers Algie following him and knocks him off bike.
Algie pleads for weapons, Jake aka Leo Cash agrees to sell him some.
Derby seems to give in, convinces the Preps to re-unite.
Nick beats up Trent for bullying Pedro.
Christy had big date with Bif, at the end they have sex.
Lance Jackson, still recovering from injuries from getting beaten by the Punks, returns to Bullworth.
Pinky invites Christy to the Hattrick House, there she meets Winkie.
Nick begins training Pedro to defend himself at the Hobo Yard.
Jake sells weapons to Algie, recruits him to join attack on school with him & the Townies.
Zoe and Jimmy plot to break into Harrington House.
Karen helps Tony to make some important connections.
Jake gets the Townies trained to perpare for the attack.
Chad pretties up Lefty's Bike.
Nick beats up Ricky and makes him drink piss.
The Greasers hold a Pow-Wow.
Tony and Nick have a conservation.
Derby plans raid on Rockers.
The Prey becomes the Predator.
Zoe and Jimmy do a break-in.
The Preps are bushwacked, Kurt beats up Derby.
Zoe and Jimmy make a discovery.
The Preps are dumped on the lawn.

That’s it so far.....Kind of a summary of Chapter 4. Damn, that's a hell of a lot !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 30, 2011, 04:01:43 PM
I was planning to have Nick beat up Ricky for pissing on Pedro's bed, but I don't know now. What do you think, should I write it or there's a problem?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 30, 2011, 04:06:31 PM
No problem there....Ricky needs his ass beat anyway.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 30, 2011, 04:12:44 PM
Okay, will do. I already developed the story.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on January 31, 2011, 11:50:46 AM
Thanks alot, Chuck... Now I'm on the way again !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 31, 2011, 01:30:12 PM
Yo new avatar!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on January 31, 2011, 01:37:26 PM
Yeah, Merc is lookin' all stealthy. We should start calling him "007".
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 31, 2011, 01:42:35 PM
His own movie and catchphrase !

"Merc....France Merc"  (Bond music playing in background).......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 31, 2011, 01:45:10 PM
Je suis {{surname}}...Dylan {{surname}}.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on January 31, 2011, 03:48:50 PM
You know, I like to wear suits now. I love the way it can turn a man into someone elegant and classy.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Repo Man on January 31, 2011, 03:50:36 PM
What's your surname?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 31, 2011, 06:47:46 PM
Doing the summary for Mercury has given me an idea....Making a summary for the entire story and posting it in it's own locked thread.  I will take some time to do this, so bear with me....I'll try to get this up and running by the time we finish Chapter 4.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on January 31, 2011, 11:10:26 PM
You know, I like to wear suits now. I love the way it can turn a man into someone elegant and classy.

Every girl's crazy for a sharp-dressed-man!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mrbully on February 01, 2011, 12:15:59 PM
I see Nick has taught Ricky a valuable lesson...umm nice...and now the Greasers are pissed...

Something tells me there will be a clique-on-1 fight we need to make cool (after they mess up his bed) by Nick kicking ALL of their asses...leave it to me.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 03, 2011, 03:09:28 PM
You people calling me Bond gave me an idea... Now I got the avatar !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Hrollo on February 03, 2011, 03:37:44 PM
Careful, you could slip XD
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on February 03, 2011, 04:16:16 PM
You people calling me Bond gave me an idea... Now I got the avatar !

Hey! Quit playing with your banana! Don't you know too much of that will make you blind?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Hrollo on February 04, 2011, 02:54:19 AM
I read the story and I would like to write the fight between Greasers and Nick if you guys don't mind.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 04, 2011, 02:46:06 PM
Haha, Mike !

"Don't play too much with that ! I heard it could make you deaf."
"WHAT ?"
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on February 04, 2011, 03:00:33 PM
lol, there's some old rumor that parents tell there kids. They say if you play with yourself too much, you will eventually go blind.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 04, 2011, 03:06:25 PM
 
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Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 04, 2011, 03:11:43 PM
Hahahaaa, awesome !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 04, 2011, 03:12:57 PM
Stick that with your picture, and you've got a hit !!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Chrissy on February 04, 2011, 05:31:05 PM
lol, there's some old rumor that parents tell there kids. They say if you play with yourself too much, you will eventually go blind.
I don't have very many vision problems. I MEAN -
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 04, 2011, 07:57:57 PM
EH ?  WHATCHA SAY ?  JUST A SEC, LEMME GRAB MY MAGINFYING GLASS......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Chrissy on February 04, 2011, 09:00:48 PM
I SAID, "I DON'T HAVE MANY VISION PROBLEMS." I, UH, AH, HAVE CONTACTS, THOUGH.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 04, 2011, 10:01:17 PM
Sheezh....If I wasn't blind before, I am now.....(Ow, my Eyes !).....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Chrissy on February 05, 2011, 01:16:29 AM
Aren't I just the cutest?!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 05, 2011, 01:41:55 AM
Why, Yes...You Are....Soon as I get my vision back, I can tell you how much.... :cool:
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on February 05, 2011, 10:44:11 AM
^Ya see that? He is blind! Look how he's wearing those black sunglasses!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mercury on February 05, 2011, 02:45:47 PM
Poor Chuck... Now, kids, you'll know : get your handjobs by a qualified woman.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 05, 2011, 02:52:07 PM
Always Highly Recommended.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on February 05, 2011, 06:29:35 PM
Poor Chuck... Now, kids, you'll know : get your handjobs by a qualified woman.

Maybe there should be a test to qualify these women? ;)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 05, 2011, 08:57:48 PM
^ Yes, a GROPE TEST !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on February 05, 2011, 10:19:28 PM
"Oh sorry, we seem to have misplaced the results. You'll have to be tested again!"

-I feel evil, 6,666 posts!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Chrissy on February 06, 2011, 03:09:34 AM
-coughs-

Hi.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on February 06, 2011, 10:26:09 AM
*Looks around nervously*

Who said that!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Chrissy on February 06, 2011, 10:34:09 AM
I think it was Repo.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on February 06, 2011, 10:35:22 AM
*Gasp!*

I hope not, now I'm paranoid 0___0
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 15, 2011, 06:07:03 AM
Back to our subject at hand......

The Preps have gotten their collective asses kicked, once again....Only this time it's going to be very hard for them to recover even the little respect and fear from their fellow students around campus.  In fact, the other Cliques will be rejoicing at the news this very evening.

What is ahead for them in Chapter 5 ?   Redemption, or Oblivion ?

Stay Tuned......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on February 15, 2011, 10:03:10 AM
^haha, good cliff-hanger right there!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on March 06, 2011, 12:08:51 PM
We are down to the final day of Chapter 4.....An all out assualt on Bullworth Academy is comming.  Who will save the day ?  Or rather night ?  Can it even be saved ?

Stay tuned for the hair rasing conclusion......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on March 17, 2011, 11:54:25 AM
The attack is underway.  The Cliques are going down.  And Jake has a surprise for Dr. Crabblesnitch.

Can anybody save Bullworth Academy ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on March 21, 2011, 09:46:19 PM
Man, what a surprise !  Didn't see that coming......Now we know why Jake is so crazy to take over the school !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mike_W on March 24, 2011, 10:47:39 PM
Having a nice little conversation with yourself there, Chucky?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on March 24, 2011, 11:18:17 PM
Hell, yeah !  Nobody else was posting.  Alone in the wilderness......
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 04, 2011, 03:00:50 AM
At long last, I’ve completed Chapter 4.....Thanks for waiting.

At this point in the story, I would ask all contributors to consider the storylines in place, and write accordingly.  I know this is a long read, but this is essential that any mistakes are kept to a minimum.  To help out, I’ll reveal the following.....

The Townies are all injured to some degree, except Nate (who was guarding the Boy’s Dorm). He was merely busted by Max.  All of the Townies are under arrest, and will be chained to beds in the Clinics until the recover enough to be transferred to the Jails.  They will all be charged with the attempted takeover of Bullworth Academy, Aggravated Assault and Battery, Confinement, Inflicting Bodily Injury, Weapons Charges, Trespassing, and any other charges that can be thought up.  Since they have no rich of mob protectors, they are finished as a group for the remainder of the story.  Their place will be taken by the Punks, whom I will introduce in Chapter 5.

Algie is to be treated at clinic and will go to jail for his participation in the attempted takeover and is to be charged the same as the others, but as a Juvenile.

There are others injured in the game as well.  The ones who will be in Clinics are...

Russell, shot in kneecap with Pellet from Air Rifle.  Serious.
Bif, burned with a brand in the shape of a ‘T’ on his chest.  Serious.
Norton, shot by Pellet from Air Rifle in shoulder.  Bad, not Serious.
Ms. Danvers, broken foot, will need a cast.
Constantinos, shot in guts twice with Pellets from Air Rifle.  Serious.
Benny, taken very ill.....Bad, not Serious.
Laurent, kicked in the head.  Bad, not Serious.
Kirby, shot in head by Spud.  Not Serious.
Ted, shot by pellet from Air Rifle. Broken Rib, Collapsed Lung. Serious.
Corneluis, hit by Firecracker.  Not Serious.
Mandy, thrown around by Tornado winds. Not Serious.

Most of the Jocks are injured slightly from being thrown around by the Tornado, as are some of the Nerds.  Others have been injured from being shot with Spud Guns, etc, to a lesser degree.

Those being released from the Clinics to start Chapter 5 are.....

Ray, who suffered injuries saving Tony at the end of Chapter 3.
Tad, whose injuries were aggravated on the raid against the Rockers.
Derby, who was beaten severely by Kurt at the end of that raid.

Keep all this in mind when writing story parts involving these characters.

Some areas have been damaged by the Tornado, particularly the Football Field, Pirate Island, and the Carnival.  The false facade hiding the exit road has been destroyed (at the ‘parking lot’ at the  right as you come to the Carnival).  Some of the rides are damaged.  Though a number of trees are down on Pirate Island and Vance is trapped, he is not injured and has plenty of provisions. The Arc Sodium Light at the Football Field are all torn down and damaged.  There is a tree down on the Jock's Clubhouse roof.  The Observatory doors are caved in.  The Greaser’s classic car is damaged, but not as bad as last time.  The roof of Spencer Warehouse is partly ripped off, and other areas of Blue Skies may be damaged as well from the wind.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 14, 2011, 03:31:28 AM
Well, we are into Chapter 5, finally ! 

Where all mysteries will be resolved, and the final battle for the school will take place...

But first, there's the bike races, a fight club, and much more....Even a new character will come on the scene.

Keep reading !
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 18, 2011, 12:27:45 AM
I'm locking the NES until I can restore the story posts of June 1 through July 17.
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Post by: T-Bone on July 18, 2011, 12:34:30 AM
Can you do that?
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 18, 2011, 12:41:16 AM
I sure can....

I have the whole story saved off-line in files on my big computer. 
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Post by: Dave on July 18, 2011, 12:41:25 AM
He saves it for a reason.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 18, 2011, 12:47:44 AM
LOL, this being one of them.

And, the fact that I have authored about 75% of the story.
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Post by: T-Bone on July 18, 2011, 12:49:23 AM
this being one of them.

How many are there?? Lol
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 18, 2011, 01:04:09 AM
I have snippets of other stuff saved....Some of the quotes, for example.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 02, 2011, 05:49:35 AM
For those of you wondering what song Mr. Luntz is humming.....

The Pusher Steppenwolf (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l2JrnF-7PNw#)
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 24, 2011, 10:31:08 AM
The old song that Pete remembered a part of........

Eve of Destruction - Barry McGuire (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5RfolQzInEE&feature=fvst#)
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 03, 2011, 04:07:15 AM
OK, Mike....Time for the big bike race !

Check your PM.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 08, 2011, 02:26:13 PM
Whatta great start to the race !!!!

Great detail.  I can't wait to see them guys wig out !!
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Post by: Mike_W on September 08, 2011, 03:20:46 PM
I'll work on it piece by piece. The way my schedule is I can't just sit down and do the whole thing at once, I'd like to as it feels better that way, but oh well.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 08, 2011, 05:41:39 PM
I rarely write a section all at once.  I always compose them on my AbiWord program, and do them in stops and starts.  It works out well that way, for at times in between I think of new elements to add to the story in progress.  When I finish that section, I copy & paste it all at once.  Actual posting takes only a minute or so, and I do a final re-check for errors.
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Post by: Mike_W on September 08, 2011, 05:46:36 PM
I've posted a few more sections, I'll do more later, I have a class at 7.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 08, 2011, 05:57:30 PM
Take your time.  I'm enjoying the bit of a break.
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Post by: Mike_W on September 08, 2011, 05:59:50 PM
I'd like to get back on BB after I get from class....so long as somebody in my family doesn't high jack the computer while I'm gone....
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 08, 2011, 09:40:52 PM
I'm waitin' for those tainted drugs to hit them....That'll be Hillarious !!!!
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Post by: Mike_W on September 08, 2011, 11:46:05 PM
It already hit Troy, in the form of addiction, that's why he crashed.

It looks like I'll have to take care of this tomorrow. My class got out late and of course, the computer was fucking jacked by my family.....assholes.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 16, 2011, 02:38:47 PM
I'm going to insert a small part here, this works into another part of the plot.  I had to take out Davis here (no big loss), as a part of it.

I've moved the racers as far as the footbridge, with Ricky still in the lead.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 06, 2011, 05:30:52 AM
A brief intermission here, while we wait for the race to be finished.  More parts are coming, if fact have already been written.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 12, 2011, 08:20:51 AM
Mike, I had to alter the story a bit to where Hal has the small Rubberband Balls.  I thought he had them because he looked at them, and wrote in into the escape part. 

Also had him pick up Angie's panties.  He'll have a use for them later.

I don't care if Norton gets busted or not, but Hal needs to escape back to the Autoshop.  Your bit here has given me an Idea.
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Post by: Mike_W on November 12, 2011, 10:40:26 AM
Looks good, I'll add some more later, hopefully today.
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Post by: Red Blaster on January 22, 2012, 04:48:45 PM
Chuck: In case you might've noticed my edit on your last entry, I just corrected a typo is all.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 22, 2012, 05:02:51 PM
Typo ?   I had a typo ?  Horrors.  What was it ?
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Post by: Red Blaster on January 22, 2012, 05:26:27 PM
"that the first race"
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 22, 2012, 08:33:12 PM
Heh...Cool.  I totally missed it.  Thanks !
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Post by: -мα∂нαттяι¢к- on May 20, 2012, 07:59:52 PM
Chuck just wanted to say, this story is awesome! I read it from time to time, and the writing is always great. Keep it up!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on May 20, 2012, 10:26:50 PM
Hey, thanks man, nice to know I got Fanz !
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 10, 2012, 03:30:46 PM
I really didn't get as deep into Mandy's character as I would have liked.  I think that might have stemmed from my dislike of her from the original game.  However, I did get her back together with Ted, and showed some of her human side.  I would like to expand more on her, but probably won't until the sequel to the NES.
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Post by: Red Blaster on June 17, 2012, 04:19:11 AM
Alfred Owens? His name is Zack Owens...
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 17, 2012, 10:43:48 AM
I know, I know.....That wasn't my doing.  He was introduced that way by another author back in Chapter 1 somewhere and it was just never corrected.  To fix it now, I'd have to go through and find everywhere he's mentioned and change the name.  I might do that if I get the time to wade through this again.  But for now, I've left it.  This is his last appearance in the story anyway.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 05, 2012, 03:22:37 PM
Trent will certainly alter the course of events on this day.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 06, 2012, 07:05:23 PM
An Update regarding some changes to the presentation to our story.....

Since 'Chapter 5' was topping 160,000 words, I have split it into 2 Chapters.  Chapter 5 now ends where Pete walks into the Justice Department Building in Washington DC.  The newly created Chapter 6 begins back at Bullworth, where Tony is suffering through Math Class.  Only one small establishing paragraph of text was added, the rest of the story is unaltered.

Since I will be sending these Chapters out as files, this will facilitate having a smaller file size for Chapter 5.  It still remains the longest Chapter, however, at 105,000 words.
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Post by: NaisBully on July 09, 2012, 12:38:48 PM
I'm sorry but I have to say
1; Excited about Trent being a hero possibly maybe (or the bullies)
2; Loved the What'chu talkin' 'bout Lance? reference
I shall shush now
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 10, 2012, 06:08:49 AM
Bullworth Town and the Vale Valley have been saved....But what of the School ?

Stand by for our exiting conclusion !!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on July 19, 2012, 10:59:56 PM
How many more posts until the story is finished?
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 20, 2012, 09:01:26 AM
Four more, and then an Epilogue.

After that, will go on to the 'Never Ending Summer' part of the story.
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Post by: Evolution on July 21, 2012, 09:47:20 AM
I'm interested to see what will happen in that. :)
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 24, 2012, 10:20:28 AM
The Main Body of the story is completed.  After this, I will set up a few starter posts to set the direction, then open it up for anyone who wants to help continue the story.

Keep in mind to follow the already established storylines of each of the characters, and the overall storyline in general.  Those deviating from the established parameters of the story will have their posts edited or deleted.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 04, 2012, 08:01:38 PM
The Bullworth Never Ending Story, as of now, is a complete story on it's own.  I worked on this story for 2 & a half years, and posted over 80% of it's content.  I wish to thank those who read it, and the more than 22,000 hits it has gotten.  Writing something is never fun unless there are readers, and I am grateful to those who did.  I hope you enjoyed the story as much as I had in the writing of it.

For those who wish copies of the story via Email, contact me through PM and I will send you the edited text copies that have additional content.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Chrissy on August 06, 2012, 03:35:43 AM
All you had to do was make mention of it. It is your thread.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 06, 2012, 05:19:36 AM
Actually, the NES was Mercury's thread to start with.  But Thanks.
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Post by: Mohamed The Kowalski on August 06, 2012, 09:03:12 AM
OK, so you run this little thing now Chuck, congratulations, and I'm in Chapter 2 right now, the story is interesting.
Edit: Hey, shouldn't you tell Mercury of this, so that he wouldn't get angry if he knew the moderatgion of this was taken from him?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Chrissy on August 06, 2012, 10:25:34 AM
You've put the most into it, so fair is fair.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 14, 2012, 03:17:55 AM
I'm going to be setting a few establishing character posts here over this month, bringing back a few characters and adding some new ones.  If any of you have any ideas on characters you would like to see, post them here.  I'm looking for mainly more girl characters than boys, to balance a little more the inequity of the male / female population.  No new boy Cliques, please, I just got rid of the Rockers, and am not looking to add any more of those Cliques.  But I will entertain some all-girl Cliques, as I feel strongly this is what has been missing here all along.
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Post by: Mohamed The Kowalski on August 14, 2012, 09:59:02 AM
I would like to see Pete Kowalski again. I won't be sad if he doesn't return but I just want to see him in the action again.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 14, 2012, 10:04:11 AM
If you read the story, you will see that Pete, Jimmy, and Zoe are gone for the summer, and probably beyond. 

Pete was a prominent player in Chapter 2 and Chapter 5, and got a lot of exposure as probably the real hero of the story.  There's no way to improve on that.
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Post by: Mohamed The Kowalski on August 14, 2012, 10:12:32 AM
OH, sorry. It's just that I'm still in Chapter 2, and you said in the NES paramiters thread that Pete was shot in the eye by Jake.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 14, 2012, 10:15:53 AM
Why yes, he was.  But he comes back in Chapter 5 (minus an eye). 

His heroic actions will tip the balance against the evil that dominates Bullworth Academy and the whole Vale Valley.
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Post by: Mohamed The Kowalski on August 14, 2012, 10:17:36 AM
Good, good. btw, It'll take some time to read this story, that's a really long one. You're a great writer, Chuck.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 14, 2012, 10:21:28 AM
There's an old saying in America......

"He Went Out On Top".

And you'll see, Pete went out on top, doing the right thing.  He will become a legend at Bullworth.
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Post by: Mohamed The Kowalski on August 14, 2012, 10:27:15 AM
I LOVE the end of Chapter 1, how the four cliques moved at the sam time to the fountain, and Jake's halloween plan.I like that.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 14, 2012, 10:31:30 AM
Heh Heh....If you liked that, wait'll you read the end part of Chapter 2, 'The Great Clique War'.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Mohamed The Kowalski on August 14, 2012, 10:39:50 AM
Written and directed by: Jake aka Ace Adams.
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Post by: Binky on September 20, 2012, 04:42:17 PM
CHUCK CHUCK CHUCK CHUCK

I'm in your frikkin' story and you described me to a T

I wear leather things

I hardly live without bubble gum

and Binky was the name of a dummy that I had when I was little.

Double U Tee Eff

and this is shit I've never mentioned on BB
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 20, 2012, 04:45:01 PM
Heh...I just took a stab in the dark.  Knew about the leather stuff, but the rest was a guess.

BTW.....Would you like your character to be a sweetheart, or conniving and evil ?
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Post by: Binky on September 20, 2012, 04:47:18 PM
Um a short fused good guy I'd like to be? Maybe? Idk I can be too quick to resort to fists irl :unsure:. But I'm good enough I think
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 20, 2012, 05:00:00 PM
K, a good-fisted sweetie it is !!
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Post by: Binky on September 20, 2012, 05:30:20 PM
YAY!

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Post by: Jimmette on September 20, 2012, 05:30:42 PM
Oh my good god I'm in the story too, if I was a nerd in Bully I would so be like that since I love them all, Jimmette Jumpers; Has a ring to it. :DD
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 20, 2012, 05:50:12 PM
You girls are about to have love interests, also.  Don't freak out, I'll only put you all with leaders and not the whimpy dregs.
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Post by: Binky on September 20, 2012, 05:51:53 PM
I'm good with my real life boyfriend so can I possibly be single or have a mysterious unknown boyfriend in the story if that's OK?
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 20, 2012, 05:53:23 PM
Um.....Sure, all right.  (but wouldn't you like to be with Peanut ?)
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Post by: Binky on September 20, 2012, 06:22:42 PM
Hellz no. I don't fancy anyone on Bully :rolleyes:
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 21, 2012, 02:27:09 PM
K, you can just be a Greaser Teaser then.
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Post by: Jimmette on September 21, 2012, 03:02:27 PM
What about little Miss. Jimmette Jumpers? 8)
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Post by: Binky on September 21, 2012, 03:38:21 PM
I'm not particularly flirty :rolleyes:
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 21, 2012, 10:36:05 PM
What about little Miss. Jimmette Jumpers? 8)

Ah, I got plans for you, missy !
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Post by: Mohamed The Kowalski on September 22, 2012, 08:55:27 AM
Do those plans include my ideas I told you in that PM? :rolleyes:
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on October 08, 2012, 10:26:24 AM
Well, in a way, about the romances part.

Just went back & re-read that PM.  I'll have some other things in the works along some of those lines.
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Post by: Mohamed The Kowalski on October 08, 2012, 10:39:53 AM
OK.
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Post by: Binky on November 18, 2012, 09:29:05 AM
Chuck, I love my attitude in the story. I know I said otherwise before because I was taken but... Mind hooking me up with Peanut :p
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 18, 2012, 12:10:48 PM
Ha....Peanut and Binky ?  Sounds like a perfect match !  You got it !!
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Post by: Binky on November 19, 2012, 03:45:22 PM
Oh yes ^.~

I'm a sucker for his voice, his accent and his affliation with shortness. Because I'm short. Go me
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Binky on November 28, 2012, 10:58:59 AM
Omg Chuck I'm loving the story oops
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 24, 2013, 01:00:52 PM
And I enjoy writing Binky. (and Jimmette too).....

Fans, sneak peek....Something monumental is going to happen on the 4th of July holiday.

Stay Tuned.
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Post by: Le Ghost on February 26, 2013, 11:29:34 AM
Hope that can be in the autopsy room at the Asylum.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 28, 2013, 07:42:14 AM
No, this will take place in the Vale.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Le Ghost on February 28, 2013, 07:44:10 AM
I got some ideas about that.  Can I PM you?
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 28, 2013, 07:45:30 AM
Sure.  Always open for suggestions.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on March 05, 2013, 09:40:47 PM
I'm really enjoying the NES, always a great thing to read here :'D

Love yo azz, Chuck

KEEP IT UP !!!!!
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on March 05, 2013, 10:35:29 PM
Hey, Thanks Alex.   ;D

Soon, evil will be afoot.....A holiday for celebration will become a time of their worst nightmare for our Heros.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on March 05, 2013, 10:44:42 PM
Perhaps Kurt & Jake will come back from the dead, team up and be the rulers of evil!!! >:D

Maybe not.... I'll be sure to try 'n' keep up with the NES.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on March 15, 2013, 07:33:50 PM
Woah  :blink:

Sexual Binky much? Heh
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on March 16, 2013, 06:01:03 AM
There will also be others to come.  Time is growing short for our heros.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on March 31, 2013, 04:48:20 AM
Reading the bit where Jake and the Punks take over the Town and Bullworth, I'm enjoying it so far.

Quote
ASK NOT WHAT YOUR SCHOOL CAN DO FOR YOU, ASK WHAT YOU CAN DO FOR YOUR SCHOOL !

I immediately got the reference, Jake's taking some quotes outta' JFK'S book, eh? Heh
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on March 31, 2013, 03:08:14 PM
I steal where I can.  Some stuff is just too good to pass up, heh.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 01, 2013, 06:27:04 AM
I finally got up to Page 56 a few hours back. Awesome, now I can keep up.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 01, 2013, 09:30:14 AM
That's good, 'cuz I'm about to go to page 57 after this post.
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Post by: Hayley on April 01, 2013, 11:47:19 AM
I love the Nintendo Entertainment System!

... oh wait, this thread is about the Never Ending Story? Sorry.
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Post by: Mohamed The Kowalski on April 04, 2013, 08:50:08 AM
I read the last posts. They're great, Chuck. This sentence about Gloria made my day:

Now for the first time, she could have sex like a proper lady, with a bed and bedsheets, instead of having a dumpster for a pillow.

I just can't believe or imagine Melvin having sex.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 04, 2013, 12:22:52 PM
Heh, yeah, even real fat people have sex, gross as it may sound.  There's gonna be a few more hookups, as tomorrow (in the story) will mark a turning point and Tony's descent into darkness.
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Post by: Evolution on April 04, 2013, 10:41:35 PM
Damn... Melvin nailing Jimmette?... Wowzo.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 05, 2013, 01:34:08 AM
The rest of the Nerds only wish they could be so lucky.
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Post by: Evolution on April 05, 2013, 01:47:46 AM
Eh... Not so lucky for Jimmette, though :P
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 05, 2013, 02:00:21 AM
The Character Jimmette is fine with it.  The real Jimmette, you'd have to ask.
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Post by: Evolution on April 05, 2013, 02:19:30 AM
Heh, heh, heh. I'll just leave it at that... Melvin must be holding some magic wand, he was lucky to get with such a fine girl as Jimmette, lucky bastard  :ajajaxh5:

Anyways, I'm just anxiously waiting here for the 'Bad Guy' to appear out of the shadows and rain down on all the innocent victims of Bullworth :P
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 05, 2013, 04:35:58 AM
A few more 'sensual' posts to come....Gotta make sure everyone's (most everyone) gettin' some.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 05, 2013, 04:40:49 AM
Yay for unnecessary sex scenes!  :cheernutz:
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 14, 2013, 07:16:45 AM
I gotta' strong feeling that either Derby, or perhaps even Jake is behind this.  :ninja:
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 14, 2013, 10:00:45 AM
Just wait till you see what gonna be next. 

After a few more transition scenes, that is.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 17, 2013, 05:34:23 AM
The dirty deed is done now.....What's our hero to do ?

But this will get much darker before it's through.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on April 18, 2013, 09:10:01 AM
So I just read the last couple of pages, and all I can say is: Sex in the city.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 18, 2013, 09:10:59 AM
Well... There is quite a lot of sex.  :euro:

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Post by: c00ld0c26 on April 18, 2013, 12:42:03 PM
SEXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX!
LOL , I want a character to chuck (It sounds fun that chuck is writing characters about B-B members I want to!) and lol there is a TON of sex stuff in there.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 19, 2013, 06:06:35 AM
Enjoyin' the NES so far.

Keep on rockin dat' story brotha!  :euro:
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 19, 2013, 06:23:38 AM
I'm mostly done adding new characters, c00ld0c26.....Even so, I don't know your first name.  I may add some incoming students at the end of the summer, however, but they will have no real part in the story (about like a lot of extra characters in Bully).

I'm in another 'slog' area, an interlude before I reveal the Kidnappers.  When I start that, the bulk of the story will be focused on that, and Tony's efforts to locate them.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 19, 2013, 06:38:49 AM
Look what you've done D0c, now he feels obligated to do so.  :neen: How rude.

Anyways.... That reminds me, I may also add some members, (Not only from the NES) but perhaps some from BB as well.... Hell, maybe even you Chuck. Just a question though, when you talk 'In real life' do you kinda speak like a hillbilly or what? Cuz I may find a spot for you in my Fanfic, if I even decide to bring any people from BB into my Fanfic at all.

And... Two small timers in the NES, 'Eddie and Geoff' will also get a role in the Fanfic... That will be VERY later on, though.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 19, 2013, 07:11:51 AM
No, I don't talk like a Goddam Hillbilly, although many from this state seem to these days.  Luckily, I'm not a native of this state, although I've lived here for awhile.  I do try to sound like an educated person and not a dumbass.

Eddie and Geoff.....Yeah, I gotta find something to do with them.  Maybe I'll get them expelled or something.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 19, 2013, 07:15:50 AM
Ahhh, not a hick then, eh?... Surprising, most of them Indianapolis peoples are kinda' hillbilly-ish.

Heh, when Dudeman introduced Eddie and Geoff it was real shabby.... Hell, maybe just make them annoying pricks who get in the way of Tony when he's in his 'Depressive'/ 'angry' state and he goes off on them, signalling his start into his spiral of darkness... It was already implied that one of em were 'Anti-Authority' so they could try and get in the way of Tony, not really a big thing, but yeah... Just an idea.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 19, 2013, 07:26:55 AM
One of them (Geoff ?) I had beat up by the Greasers over at the Skate Park building.  Otherwise, I've generally treated them like some of the rest of the Non-Cliques (Gordon, Ivan, & Trevor) and really given them no storylines at all.

But Dudeman was a real douche.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 19, 2013, 07:35:14 AM
Wait... You did?... I don't remember reading that at all. Perhaps I'll go back and check later.

Dudeman seemed alright, I guess... Why was he a douche? Sure, but he didn't seem to be THAT  bad. (I could be totally wrong here, I was stalking him awhile back)
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 19, 2013, 07:48:02 AM
Reply #238 on page 16.

Dudeman was a douche, take my word for it.
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Post by: Evolution on April 19, 2013, 07:59:13 AM
Shit, completely missed it. Just gave it a good read, poor, poor Geoff.  :neen:

And aight, I will. :P

So, waddya' plan on doing after you 'Finish' the NES, anyways?
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 19, 2013, 08:06:48 AM
Taking a break.   :laugh:

Maybe doing some short ones, or the Sponge Bob one....Not sure.

Would like to continue Mike's "To Live and Die in Liberty".....It had a good start, but he never kept up with it.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 19, 2013, 08:12:27 AM
Taking a break.   :laugh:

A well deserved one, ferr sure. ;)

The Spongebob Fanfic was a real laugh, but it'd be cool to see some other short stories you'd have in mind. Perhaps even a short story that's just comedic, I may do that in the future when I feel in the mood, just a short one for shits and giggles. As for the 'Mystery Man' Mike, his story was pretty good but I never read it properly, which I shall do now as I have nothing better to do. (Besides sleeping)
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 19, 2013, 08:42:28 AM
Actually, I thought it was really good.  My problem is that I'm not anywhere near as familiar with Liberty City as I am with Bullworth Town, et cetra.  I might just say screw it and follow up on Jimmy and Zoe, or Pete, now that they were written out of the NES. 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 21, 2013, 01:08:17 AM
Don't worry about not being Familiar with Liberty City, I've played GTA 4 multiple times and I wouldn't say I'm completely 'Familiar' with it.

A way to get more knowledge would be to go to grandtheftwiki.com (http://grandtheftwiki.com) and look at the article on Lib City, it'll give you the basics, tell you the names of the places, etc...

I kind of don't like being up to date on the NES, because I have to wait.  :-\

Still enjoying it, though.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 21, 2013, 01:39:29 AM
Yeah, waiting bites.  Actual Fact -- I held off on reading any of the Harry Potter books until 2006.  I thought they were just some kid fad that would go away.  After quite awhile, when I saw people I knew reading them (not just kids) and recommending them highly, I finally gave in and read the first 6 books back-to-back.  (I hadn't even seen any of the movies then).  I was thoroughly pulled in to the story.  So then....I had to wait a friggin' year (almost) for book 7 to come out.  I actually went to a 'midnight release' thingy on 22 July 2007 to get my hands on the book, which by 24 hours later I had read through.

So, yeah, know wha'cha mean there.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 21, 2013, 01:48:50 AM
Yep, that's why I wait a lot until 'More' of it has came out... It's kind of like when you get your hands on a DVD Boxset or something, and you watch like, half of the seasons in three or four days. I did that once. All I could say to justify myself was...

(http://funnypicturesplus.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/02/funny-django-waltz-gif.gif)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 21, 2013, 02:09:34 AM
Yes, Exactly.  It's like an addiction.  Or worse, an Obsession.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 21, 2013, 02:23:35 AM
Say, when it's in the real   'Endless Summer' (When all the main storylines are over) what do you plan to keep righting about?... Or will it actually 'End' ?...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 21, 2013, 02:30:30 AM
Uhh....It is in the 'real' Endless Summer, and all the main storylines were over, so.....

This is what I came up to write about. 

And, yeah, it will end and also not end.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 21, 2013, 02:31:50 AM
Uhh....It is in the 'real' Endless Summer, and all the main storylines were over, so.....

So why did Karen and Melody get kidnapped?  :laugh:

EDIT: Ahh, shit. See you put 'Were' there... Missed that. But, basically what I meant was when Tony defeats all villains and none of that kind of stuff will happen again. But, I got my answer.



Quote
And, yeah, it will end and also not end.
Got'cha.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 21, 2013, 02:43:14 AM
As in life, new villains will always appear. 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 21, 2013, 02:47:20 AM
^ True fuckin' dat.

I shall continue reading the NES when you post.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: c00ld0c26 on April 22, 2013, 05:49:59 AM
My real life name is Shay , you dont have to add me in the story if you dont want to.
I seem to make people stop posting stories and such , I dont get what I do wrong , I shall sit in the corner  :'(
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 22, 2013, 06:01:20 AM
Shaycarl perhaps?


http://www.youtube.com/user/shaycarl (http://www.youtube.com/user/shaycarl)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: c00ld0c26 on April 22, 2013, 06:36:29 AM
Shaycarl perhaps?


http://www.youtube.com/user/shaycarl (http://www.youtube.com/user/shaycarl)


Maybe.............. :P
But for real , I dont get it why I make people stop posting stories , Do I insult you guys by some way I dont know or something?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 22, 2013, 06:42:21 AM
Insult?... No.

It's not just you, it's just the entire story overall being confusing and disorganised. I think that RP has run its course, (at least for me) I'm also taking time off from writing as a whole (Including those little mini stories I was working on- 'Bryce's Downfall' + 'Rise Of The Dead').... So, it's nothing personal if I don't post in the RP.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Binky on May 23, 2013, 04:40:45 PM
This is going to sound incredibly fluffy and fangirlish of me but I'm gutted that Duncan is working with the bad guys. I always had a soft spot for him, he was my favourite toy :') <3
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on May 23, 2013, 09:21:48 PM
Ah, poor Duncan.....Hanging around with the wrong crowd.  Pity, that. 

But look on the bright side.....He won't be going to prison as long as the other Townies who actually assaulted the hostage girls.   
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Post by: Binky on May 24, 2013, 10:55:03 AM
Yay I guess? Brb having a mental fangirl date with Duncan :')
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on June 04, 2013, 07:26:07 AM
Hey, I just remembered that old 'Const' story I was doing and I may start working on it again. I won't dump the whole 'Tony' thing as I'll keep that, but I just wanted to know, who ran the Townies after the school finally settled things down? (After the failed Jake attempt to take over) ?... (Can't exactly remember)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 04, 2013, 02:03:49 PM
Omar Romero runs the Townies since taking over in Chapter 2 after Big Darrell had his nuts & pecker blown off by Zoe.  Big Darrell, as you recall, killed Gary Smith and Edgar Munsen the summer before the NES began.  The Townies were locked up for all of Chapter 5 and into Chapter 6, where they escaped during the the attacks on the Bullworth Towns by Jake Brown and Sid & The Punks.  They are all free now, except Clint Henry, who was previously sent to the Asylum.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on June 24, 2013, 07:03:10 AM
The NES sure has gotten dark....
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 24, 2013, 07:35:43 AM
Yeah, well, I had to pepper up the story somehow after Jake's defeat.  Plus, threw some sex in, that always makes for interesting reading.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on June 24, 2013, 07:55:18 AM
Heh, I plan on doing the same thing with the whole 'Const' thing. Adding in dark layers always makes an interesting read. Although I will keep sex to a minimum unlike you do, good sir :P
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 24, 2013, 04:13:21 PM
Just like eating & drinking, peeing and pooping, sex is an essential part of life and should not be ignored. 

That, and I got a few requests for some sexual liaisons....Could write a whole chapter on that alone.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on June 24, 2013, 08:00:38 PM
Well, besides the 'sex' thing, I often notice that all TV shows ignore that people in reality DO have to take shits, piss, and all that fancy stuff that involves a toilet. Perhaps this is because viewers don't exactly want to watch someone taking a shit on their big screen at home.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 24, 2013, 09:20:54 PM
Why not ?  There's plenty of eating scenes, which is just as disgusting in itself.

I mean really.....Does anyone like to watch people eat ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on July 02, 2013, 03:12:02 AM
I honestly love how you make the Greasers speak like inbred hillbillies  :laugh:
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 02, 2013, 03:18:49 AM
Heh, I might have to go back and change their speech patterns....

Since the latest 'Walkers' vid, I got further plans for Sweet Lola.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on July 03, 2013, 04:04:01 AM
I immediately thought that a head was in the black trash bag.  :laugh:
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 03, 2013, 05:18:42 AM
Naw, it was just the bag I had her take along to collect and hide any bottles.  Looks like she found some more.

I can't hardly wait for Monday.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on July 03, 2013, 05:21:09 AM
Why is that so ?.... A 'Special' NES Post Coming Up?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 03, 2013, 05:32:00 AM
Monday in the game, that is.  (I so LOVE woman to woman confrontations).

Still a few posts away, though (Wah).
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on August 01, 2013, 10:34:19 AM
Mmm...Bethany Jones is more assertive than that. I don't think you really captured her character. Now if it was Ms. Kopke, this scene would work very well.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 01, 2013, 08:08:24 PM
I know she is.  But she was caught red-handed and she knew it.  The element of total surprise at being unexpectedly caught in her lie so suddenly threw her off guard.  She did get in a few verbal shots, like....

“He Liked It !”, Bethany screamed.  “He Blew His Load Just Fine !!”

....But Ms. Phillips shot to her guts effectively disabled her, taking any of the fight out of her.  A bit of departure from Ms. Phillips character also, though I know from her voice files she can get rather angry.  I did consider having a knock-down, drag-out fight between the two, but decided against it....For now.   
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on August 02, 2013, 12:21:46 AM
Yeah, maybe you should've had a fight drag out is what I meant.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on August 18, 2013, 07:24:34 AM
It's Theo who says "Aaarrgh! My boys!", not Gregory. Gregory says "Ah, but...but...I want to reproduce!"
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 18, 2013, 02:45:19 PM
Fine.  I'll change him to Theo.

Although, I must say, I've been over to the Asylum scads of times, and shot them suckers in the nuts every time I go, all of them.
And never ever have heard "Ah, but...but...I want to reproduce".

Not saying you are not right, for it's probably in the voice files, but just saying that all I ever hear out of those bozos is the "Ohh, My Boys" comment.  Fact, always thought it was a bit funny it was always the same thing.

IDK, glitch in my game, maybe ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on August 18, 2013, 03:48:44 PM
No, it's just that Gregory (black orderly) only spawns in missions.

In normal free roam, only Theo spawns.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 19, 2013, 01:10:41 AM
Oh...Really ? 

Didn't know that.

No wonder it's always the same quote over there.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on August 19, 2013, 12:23:55 PM
Well, in any case, please continue the story! I really want to know what was in that tunnel that Tony saw.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Le Ghost on August 26, 2013, 05:59:20 AM
I too am keeping up with the story still.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on August 26, 2013, 06:07:14 AM
I actually only stopped reading the NES so I wouldn't have to wait for the next post. It was torture  :euro: (Which means that you're doing well, Chuck. lol) I'll be reading from where I left off. Keeps getting better and better every time.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 26, 2013, 10:39:08 AM
And here I thought you were keeping up.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on August 26, 2013, 05:00:25 PM
I've done so, in a  half assed manner, I just saw what was happening with Const and then took off. But yeah, gonna read properly. It's especially great when you're in a 'reading mood' and you're free to do so.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on August 31, 2013, 10:20:04 PM
I kind of understand Kurt's anger towards Tony. Tony was a real dick to him. What, stuffing him into a trashcan with two hits to the face wouldn't incite a vendetta?
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Post by: DaBOSS54320 on August 31, 2013, 10:25:09 PM
lol I clicked on this thinking it was Nintendo Entertainment System XD
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on August 31, 2013, 10:27:45 PM
Funny, Hayley made a reference to that.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 31, 2013, 10:34:08 PM
The Title was the idea of originator of the story, Mercury.  He called it 'The Never Ending Story' to start off with (like that movie and it's sequels)....   We played around with different titles over time, but ultimately returned to the original, with 'Bullworth' added....NES for short.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on September 09, 2013, 04:19:15 AM
Nice rape scenes, Chucky.  :hmm:

All I know.... I sure as hell ain't doing that in S.O.B., lol.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 09, 2013, 12:14:33 PM
It's a hard ole world out there, even in the Vale Valley.  Rape & Sexual Assault is a very under-reported problem in today's societies.  It's something that hardly anyone likes to think about, let alone talk about or write about. 
84,767 teens were reported raped in 2010 in the US.  An average of 207,754 rapes occur in the US every year.....A rate of about one every 2 minutes. 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: c00ld0c26 on September 09, 2013, 12:17:15 PM
I feel bad for them now ):
But I dont think the SOB will have rapes either, maybe attempts and then someones saves the day or smth but I dont think an actual rape, were not ready for that shit and I dont think we will even be ready.
But the post was well done I must say.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 09, 2013, 12:50:38 PM
Although we all know there is a TON of glaring discrepancies in Bully and and Bullworth Academy, I've tried, as the story progressed, to introduce more Reality into the story, and to give reasons about the seemingly unrealistic things that take place there in the Vale Valley, both before and during the story.

Sex, Rape, Murder, & Death are very realistic events which happen quite often.  I've touched on all these issues in the course of the story, relating the various sexual encounters, rapes of Zoe, Karen & Melody, the seduction of Christy by Bif (on orders from Derby), the murders of Gary & Edger, and the deaths of Sid, & Mr. Smith.

While there seems to be no problem by many of describing physical assaults of all other types on students and adults, when it comes to sexual assaults many become squeamish.  The toll of rape makes a much greater impact and emotional damage than physical assaults does, but is largely ignored.  Like the 'Elephant In The Room', nobody wants to think of such things.

The Townies are a despicable lot, taken in total.  They are shiftless and worthless, robbers, thieves, and rapists.  Their day of reckoning is coming soon.   
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on September 10, 2013, 04:43:47 AM
Way To Go, Const !!!!! He's been doing enough back work for those assholes anyways !
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on September 21, 2013, 01:21:03 AM
Can you list what each acronym stands for (the ones you've revealed anyways)?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 21, 2013, 01:45:11 AM
You mean the notations for such on the map ?

‘swh’, ‘ssw’, ‘bss’, ‘wmp’, ‘isw’, ‘sif’, ‘gor’, ‘dwh’, ‘rsi’, ‘cop’, ‘bcw’, ‘iwp’ 

Save Ware House, Spencer Shipping Warehouse, Blue Skies Shipping, Wonder Meats Packing.
Industrial Sewage Waste, Spazz Industry Factory, Gloop Oil Refinery, Docks Warehouse*
Red Star Industries, Chem-O Plant, Beam Cola Warehouse, Intercom Wire Products*

*these 2 were not identified in the story as such.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on September 21, 2013, 04:43:10 AM
Yep, those. Thanks.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on November 14, 2013, 12:19:17 AM
The Final Battle is Underway, if you (the reader) have been following the story will already know. This is sort of complex, given that it will take place in two spots, and will almost entirely be fought with weapons.  Armed to the teeth as both sides are, it would be foolish for this battle to be fought with Melee Weapons or hand to hand. 

Many factors will be at play in this battle, and who participates in it.  This will be a little different than the 'Tony vs Jake' battles of the main body of the story.  Since Jake was defeated in their boss battle, the story's main antagonist is gone, and this boss battle will be carried out in a somewhat standoff sort of manner, where Tony must use his wits as well as his weapon to become victorious.

I do hope people are still reading....I see the view numbers going up each time I check the page, so I guess at least somebodies are reading.  Many, I suspect are those silent visitors to the board which are the unsigned and mysterious 'Guests'.  Those people I will never know, but for the few here on the board who have followed along, I applaud you, and hope the Bullworth Never Ending Story will remain in your memory for years to come and be regarded as a 'good read'.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on December 18, 2013, 03:23:22 AM
I don't know if you love to visualize situations in books or stories, and imagine what kind of music would be playing during the scene, but this song was emanating throughout my head as I read the parts where Tony and Nick are exploring the underground lab:

 Resident Evil 2 - The Underground Laboratory (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uTckVgMjbKA#)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 18, 2013, 05:16:23 AM
Well, doesn't that bring back memories.....RE 2 was actually the first RE that I played. I think the most striking music I loved from that game was in the ground floor of the Police Station.....

Let's Listen: Resident Evil 2 Music - Police Station, Main Hall (Extended) (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=orHrAEU-W84#)

Kinda creepy with the dead animals & such down there....Even had a thought to animate them vis-a-vis RE....But really, that would be a whole other story, wouldn't it ? 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on December 18, 2013, 01:09:31 PM
That music is pretty iconic. It actually used to relax me, all while keeping that air of mystery as I explore the police station. If that music were to be used in the NES, I imagine it's ideal for when Tony and Nick are discussing things after a big revelation or something like that.

As for the animal resurrecting...you could try writing that as a non-canon NES side story.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on December 18, 2013, 08:06:12 PM
IDK, that's edging into the whole zombie thing....Something like that would have to be a whole independent story on it's own, I think.....I already brought in enough other weird stuff (like the Monks) that's never gonna be fully explained.  Besides, if I were to re=animate those poor lumpy creatures, wouldn't they have to turn into something like the RE Dogs ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on January 05, 2014, 09:37:02 PM
I'm very interested in how you will handle the aftermath.... Will Tony reject Karen due to the fact that someone else fucked her, or will they just move on? I'm very interested to see what will happen with Omar.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 05, 2014, 10:09:19 PM
Omar will be taken care of shortly.  All the surviving Townies are going to Prison, anyway, and will be written out of the story (which hasn't much longer to run)........

Still undecided as to what is to become of Tiffany.  Didn't really plan on her getting shot, just sorta happened.

And the other stuff.....Well, do you know how many months I've been waiting to put up that last post ? 

All will be resolved (most all) in time though.  But first, Tony has something important to take care of.....
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 09, 2014, 03:30:16 AM
There are just too many things to tie up, and the length of Chapter 8 is just to horribly long already.

So...I am going to add a Chapter 9.  There is going to be much more in the way of personal stories here, along with Tony's attempts to lock all the Cliques into a Binding Agreement about their fates and their future at Bullworth Academy.

Fully half of Summer is left, and I feel it would be remiss of me at this point to leave so many storylines without resolution.  So, one more Chapter it is...(hopefully a short one}, since I really do wanna get finished with this someday....Real Soon.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on January 09, 2014, 04:27:43 AM
^ Don't forget about Const's mental illness and his turn to the dark side, eh? It would definitely spice things up without Const turning into a terrorist.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 09, 2014, 10:50:26 AM
Constantinos' issues will be addressed, and they will be highly dependent on the outcome of Tiffany.   He is one of many 'loose ends' whose fates are to be decided by the summer's end.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on January 12, 2014, 06:00:19 PM
I love how Bryce split from the group and joined another branch of the same faction..... A possible civil war uprising?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 12, 2014, 06:45:41 PM
This ain't the first time the Preps have split....Earlier in the story there was a "Derby Faction" and a "Tad Faction", if you remember that part. 

This was mostly over Pinky going to Bryce to ask for help for Tony....(part of her Redemption for using Tony as she has).  Turns out Bryce was the only Prep she felt she could trust to help.  Bryce went to the Preps to propose joining in with the other Cliques and taking the Shields along.  Pinky wouldn't go to the Preps herself, since she broke up with Tad over Vanessa.  Tad, Bif and Chad refused to go along on the mission, but Tad didn't stop the others from going or them taking the Shields. 

So, all this is sort of murky, since Tad has turned into kinda a prick since taking over power..  Justin and Parker, who were allied with Tad in the previous split, are now turning against him.  Chad, who was firmly allied with Derby before, is in Tad's corner now, as is Bif, who used to be Derby's bitch but is now Tad's bitch.

All this I plan to explore later in greater depth, particularly Tad's moving from a 'Good Prep' to a 'Bad Prep' and his inner motivations and conflicts, as since finally taking over the Clique after Derby's erratic leadership he has become just a clone of Derby.

Anyway, Bryce has another secret motivation for doing what he did, one he has nursed for a long time.  I'll get to that sooner than later. 

Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on January 12, 2014, 07:08:19 PM
(http://m.quickmeme.com/img/f7/f768767f113a286eefc8ba8c32276771f9a18ca60a1dd62291c87a6cf4af33fc.jpg)

This is bound to be quite interesting.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 16, 2014, 09:14:39 PM
Ok, it looks like Tiffany will live....(or will she ?).  Meanwhile, Constantinos has been sent packing for awhile.
Where ?  I don't know right now.  I'll have to set some 'Story Hound Dogs' after him to find out.  Or, I could just wait until he comes back, that's the only thing I know for sure at this point. 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on April 05, 2014, 12:08:29 AM
Sounds like Beatrice needs to be ganged up on after word of this gets out. Maybe have Mandy beat her up good.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 05, 2014, 11:15:18 AM
But will the word get out ?  At present, only Nick, Melody and Beatrice know....Tony and Mandy do too, secondhand.  None of them will want to be broadcasting this about school.

But, I don't think this is over, oh no.  Entirely possible that Melody may seek out Mandy in private, once she learns the whole story about Beatrice's deception.   
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 08, 2014, 10:13:45 AM
Pinky and Lola can't keep quiet about Tony forever, can they? It would really suck for Tony if Lola let it slip and Johnny goes apeshit, sending every greaser after Tony while Nick is still in the clinic, or Pinky trying to seduce Tony one last time and gets caught red handed and later on they bushwack Tony.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 08, 2014, 01:23:29 PM
Yes, that would suck for him, alright.....But I don't yet know how that is going to play out, if at all.  I wasn't really planing for Nick's encounter with Beatrice to come out, it just sorta happened. 

As I recall, Tony had two encounters with Lola....Once before Christmas, right before Lola left to go Join Johnny in Detroit, and once during the Kidnapping, when she 'traded' sex for information.  Johnny was out of the story for the first 6 chapters, and Lola was out from chapters 3 to 6.  They only returned at the start of the summer, and neither has been a student since the start of the story. 

At this point, neither Tony or Lola has any desire to reveal their encounters.  This may change, but not anytime soon, most likely if it ever does, it will be post-story, in which case I will include that in the epilogue, as this is the final chapter in the story.

Of any others who know about Lola, Nick knows, but will not say anything,  Jimmy Hopkins also knows, but he and Zoe have been written out of the story and will not return.

As for Pinky, she has had multiple encounters with Tony, going back to the late Fall.  Right after the first one, she broke up with Derby for good, wound up being Kidnapped herself by Kurt and the Rocker Clique and held captive for 6 days.  Pinky fell for Kurt and eventually moved in with him and her former captors. (Kurt and the Rockers were written out of the story by the end of chapter 6).  Pinky was with Tad for awhile, and has just hooked up with Bryce, who has led yet another split in the Prep ranks.  Derby had eventually found out about Tony having sex with Pinky and fought with Tony, after breaking Pinky's jaw, but it was on the day of the bombings in chapter 6, and Derby and his mother was sent off to England by Mr. Harrington shortly before his arrest not long after.

Karen has always been suspicious of Pinky and her designs on Tony, but has never learned of Tony's cheating.  For his part, Tony has been guilt-ridden about his encounters with Pinky (and Lola also), but has been unable to control his urges around Pinky when alone with her, to his shame.  Advised by Jimmy never to tell, Tony has done just that and kept his mouth shut, but always fearful that Karen might learn the truth. 

Of the two, there seems to be more danger that Tony's encounters with Pinky will be eventually revealed.  However, Pinky is afraid of Karen, who has really grown up because of her association with the Jock Clique and has already beat Pinky's ass twice in the story.  For the present, Pinky is entering a new relationship, and is not about to reveal anything.  Like with Lola, this might come out post-story, if it does, I will include it in the epilogue.   
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 08, 2014, 01:41:58 PM
Knowing this Pinky, I doubt she'll stay loyal to Bryce for very long. Lola will probably let it slip out somehow. Sucks Jimmy and Zoe are gone for good, I was hoping to see them in the end. Oh well, I'd like to see what's gonna happen with Thad when he finally walks around in public.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 08, 2014, 02:02:43 PM
I know it's a long read, but how much of the NES have you read so far ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 08, 2014, 08:05:21 PM
I'm up to your most recent post. I laughed like a retard a lot reading it.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 08, 2014, 11:58:07 PM
Maybe you have been one of our 'secret readers' all this time ?  The NES was begun 4 & 1/2 years ago.  The first Chapter was pretty sloppy, as was parts of Chapter, 2, but I have done re-edits (which haven't been posted yet) and also added 9,000 words to those chapters, also not posted yet....I figure when I get done, I'll have time to post them then. 

In the Epilogue, I want to try to touch on the major characters and their futures, both in and after Bullworth, so undoubtedly I will have an Update for Jimmy & Zoe along with that. 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 09, 2014, 10:01:28 AM
I got bored and wanted to find out more about Bully Beta, so I looked around and found this site, I read around and found the NES. It was interesting at the start but got kinda boring with the whole clothes stealing part with that fat shit Algie, but I kept reading and it got better and better. If I could cum from my eyes, I would have had enough to impregnate the world 100 times over.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 09, 2014, 01:54:55 PM
Well, it was begun by others, and kind of wandered around for awhile with no real direction.  I came in on page 3, and eventually just took over the whole thing.  I just planned 5 chapters to start with, and when I finished them, I was gonna be done.  But then I hadda go add an 'Endless Summer' to it, and then the girls got kidnapped, and it became another long haul.  But I figure another 30,000 words and I can finally finish it. 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 10, 2014, 07:56:35 AM
I'll keep on reading, I wonder what you have in mind for the epilouge.
hmmmmm
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 10, 2014, 12:17:01 PM
It'll be kinda a wrapup of any loose ends and short relator of events to come in the future.  I did a small epilogue at the end of chapter 6, about 4 posts, cause I was going to be done then.  I'm planning a longer one at the end this time, to cover up past Tony and Karen's graduation.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 10, 2014, 12:27:56 PM
Sweet, it should turn it awesome.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 15, 2014, 11:22:47 AM
I wonder what's going to happen with Russell when he can't go to school anymore. He can't get any money shaking down kids, he could sell his parents stuff but then he would have nothing at all. I doubt he can hold any real job unless it was being a bodyguard.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 15, 2014, 01:33:00 PM
Seeing as how Russell was one of the few identified as actually having a house (Tad was another one, both were in the Vale), it would seem Russell's parents were middle-class.  Not rich, but well-off enough to provide for their retarded son.

Which makes it even stranger that Russell is a Bully, since he's not poor like the other Bullies seem to be.

I doubt Russell could get a job guarding a bucket of fish, he's so stupid.  He'd only wander off after a while and forget.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 15, 2014, 01:44:19 PM
But his parents are rarely home and he's probably too stupid to sell their stuff. He'd probably try to eat a grenade if he had one.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 15, 2014, 02:08:48 PM
He was alone for quite a while in the earlier part of the story (Trent was in charge then), so he will make out fine. I'm not gonna worry about him.  Let Social Services take care of him.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 15, 2014, 02:12:35 PM
Poor little idiot, I almost feel bad for him. I'm pretty sure no family will ever adopt him.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 15, 2014, 02:49:09 PM
I'll take care of him in the Epilogue.  Get him a nice group home or something.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 18, 2014, 04:38:09 PM
I keep forgetting to mention this, but I seriously feel bad for Kurt. Did he really deserve to be stuck in the looney bin for life? He was one of my favorite characters because I can kinda relate to him.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 18, 2014, 07:21:16 PM
Oh, so you're a seriously disturbed Psychopath ?

Kurt might still be walking this side of the sanity line if not for Derby's torture sessions and whatever the Monks did to him.  Still, life hasn't generally been easy for sons of imprisoned ex-mob bosses.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 18, 2014, 11:58:25 PM
^ Perhaps you did the common thing that authors in these situations tend to make. Making the reader feel sympathetic to someone that in the author's eyes is a "seriously disturbed Psychopath".... I know there's terminology for it but I can't remember right now.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 19, 2014, 04:46:16 AM
Ah, the kid was an asshole.  Tried to steal Tony's new girlfriend (Karen) and had serious anger-management issues.  But with the background I later provided, who wouldn't ?

The only decent thing he ever did in the story was to have his boys try to stop the rape of Zoe.  No idea why he did that, since he wound up kidnapping Pinky later.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 19, 2014, 05:16:55 AM
Though to be fair, he only started out as a nosey snot. IMO his anger towards Tony was totally justified the way he stuffed him in a trashcan and knocked him out without little to no provocation. That being said, he did go a little bit overboard during his story.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 19, 2014, 05:40:11 AM
Yes, and Kurt provided me with my very first entry into the story.  I HATE being interrupted.

I suppose I thank him....But the snot who had control of Kurt then was a real ass himself (he was later banned), sending Kurt after Tony and Tony's girlfriend, fucking up their relationship, detracting from the storyline that Mercury was trying to establish.  He also brought this Rocker Clique into the story, something neither of us had planned, and so on.

Anyway, the kid couldn't write for shit, and after he was gone, We...I had to deal with Kurt somehow, and his 'Rocker' Clique.  It all worked out in the end, but....I hate being interrupted.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on April 19, 2014, 10:00:04 AM
You mean dudemann, right?

And I noticed you wrote "Marshall Law" instead of "martial law" (been playing too much Tekken, I take it?). I corrected it.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Evolution on April 19, 2014, 10:03:20 AM
^ That he does.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 19, 2014, 11:16:02 AM
Oop, one of my other worlds bled over into the story, something else I do involving the Marshall Name.
There are other worlds than these, as King wrote.

Yeah, that was the kid.  Several of his posts had to be removed from the story, as they were really bizarre.

On a brighter note, Kurt is getting the best Electro-Shock Treatment that Mob money can buy.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 20, 2014, 12:30:08 PM
Ok, I got a few things I wanna say.

Chuck, I hope you're not doing what I think you're doing with Kirby and Sanders. I'm gonna guess you are gonna do what I think you're doing since you wrote all of those sex scenes. I have newly  found respect for Kirby after he came out of nowhere and saved my ass from Townies in Blue Skies.

Binky seems like a cruel bitch to me, Lucky is like my favorite greaser aside from Johnny and him getting kicked in the nads with great force by a giant boot made me shudder. Also those stereotypical Italian accents like fucking hilarious typed up. Also thigh high heels? I heard of those but are they actually REAL? WOMEN ACTUALLY WEAR THOSE, GOD DAMN.

I'm really curious to find out how Tony is gonna do this binding agreement, and what the punishments are. You also make Mandy seem like a huge cum slut, I love it. I hate the bitch. But you put the image of Mandy violently sawing off the manhood of each Townie which made her seem much less of a cum slut.

One last thing, you made me look at all Bully Characters differently, I felt bad for Constantinos when I first read it but when I got to the whole Tiffany part I lost all respect for him again. He stole an entire section of library books just for sex like 3 times. Bullshit, he only got to be on top once too.

Sometimes I actually talk to Melody and Karen. Melody just says, "I'd love to hang out Jimmy" and "I have some free time Jimmy, lets hang" and "I'd totally hang out with you Jimmy". Karen has no lines for some reason, she just compliments my clothes. One funny thing was when I was on a new run she insulted me by saying "Your feet stink!". I laughed at that for some reason.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 20, 2014, 08:27:12 PM
Sure....Yours is one of the longer observation post I've gotten in a while., Let's see..Reverse order....

Karen and Melody don't have much in the way of personality in the game, so I gave them some.  It was Mercury's idea to hook up Karen with Tony (the main character), so I went along with that.  Both girls, along with Gloria, were considered 'Little kids' in the game, but Mercury sure had them grow up fast, and he also was the one who aligned Karen with the Jock clique.  Nothing was really explained much in the early parts of the story, so as I've gone along I've tried to fill in some backstories on a number of the characters (regrettably, I can't do that for all the characters in the school), but only the ones that have been more heavily written about.

Karen's personality had already been set as 'smart and perky', so I went with that and made he more of a major character (since she was, after all, the lead character's girlfriend). I also made her tougher and resourceful.  Melody, I sort of had to develop a personality for, based on her quotes and what I imagined she should be.  Turns out, she is feisty when free to express herself, but tends to withdraw in a bad situation (as during her kidnapping).  Gloria is established as a booksmart kid, so I set her up with Damon as sort of a gag (smart girl and dumb Jock).  They are still together, though, so somehow it works out.

Constantinos is a dark study, and I was influenced by Mike, and later Alex, about the way his personality was to develop.  At the first, he becomes Tony's lapdog, his "Ears" around Bullworth.  His well know addiction to sneaking into the Girl's Dorm had a lot to do with that, and his rep in the story of being able to find out stuff.  Seems every school has somebody like that.  But, Constantinos has a darker side, troubling demons that bother him greatly, at times so bad that he hears 'The Voice of Reason' and sees himself in the mirror as as his inner jeering self.  Credit Alex for those ideas, I really liked his short story on Constantinos, and incorporated some of those traits in him....But Constantinos really went off the rails in the summer, when psycho Tiffany set her hooks into him.  It was here that we get to see how he is when another assumes total power over him for the most basic of human reasons, the one of sex.  Never having had a relationship with a girl (as many characters in the game don't have either), we see the unraveling of his already unsteady mind.  First loves can be a real bitch.  Constantinos will be back soon, so we'll see how he's handling things shortly.

I'm developing the Binding Agreement slowly, as it is new territory for me.  It's always much more fun writing about brutal beatings and sex.  But with the end of the Bullworth Vale Valley's isolation, "something must be done" (a phrase I hear often when shooting down the Girl's Dorm Matrons in the game).  No longer are the Students and Cliques at the school going to be able continue their mindless violence without outside scrutiny.  The Binding Agreement will hopefully give them a way to practice 'Civilized Violence' on a less-visible level, so Bullworth will move closer to a 'normal' High School, but still retain some of the violent traits we've come to know and love.

Mandy really is a 'cum slut' and her vapid personality usually leaves not much room to be considered a sympathetic character.  But I've also tried to give her another side, one that has been hurt badly by Earnest's actions in the game of having her naked posters hung up about school and Bullworth Town (from photos taken by Jimmy, no less).  In the story, it leads to the loss of her 'Queen of Bullworth' status and her eventual breakup with Ted.  I began to feel that she should be written more about when the Valentine Day's Dance was about to occur, and to explore her character a bit more closely.  Her closeness with Karen is because of Karen's joining the Jocks Clique, which I've said before, was Mercury's idea.  Don't get me wrong, I hated the bitch in the game also.  But I felt I should show her character, just as the other Clique Leader's girlfriends in the game (Pinky and Lola),  It only makes sense, right ?  To have her say she would have liked to slash off the Townie's cocks still shows the bitch side of her, as will what she's about to do to that nut-job Beatrice.

Binky is modeled sorta after a real-life 'Binky' who used to be on the site.  She alluded to herself as 'Binky the short' (at about 5 feet tall) and was a huge Greasers fan.  So I introduced her as a character specifically for Peanut (as Johnny was already taken), since Peanut has major issues about being short, in more ways than one.  Binky is not a cruel bitch, but rather a cunning character, very smart, and usually holds her thoughts to herself as she observes those around her.  That kick to Lucky showed she wasn't going to be messed with unless it was on her own terms.  Now, some of my favorite Greasers are Hal, Lucky, and Lefty.  Poor Lefty just happened to be in the wrong place at the wrong time. 

As to the high heels...Most of the girls wore them when I went to High School, and I always found them to enhance a girl's sexiness.  And the Sex ?  Many of the girls when I was in High School were fucking...15, 16, 17 year-olds (some of the 14 year-olds were too).  Kids have sex in High School, it's a fact of life in America.  If a guy ain't gettin' some in High School, there's something wrong with him, since it's all around. Don't know if it is still that way, but I'd bet it is.

Yes, poor Kirby IS being groomed by that nasty pervert, Coach Sanders.  And what the Coach is aiming for might happen.  In that event, I hope he gets caught, cuz I hate child molesters at any age.  But I'm thinking that some unlikely allies will come to Kirby's aid.  That is all I can say for right now.  Child Predators are also a fact at many High Schools (it was at mine, also), so I feel the issue should be addressed.  Coach Jerry Sanders, like his namesake Coach Jerry Sanduskey, just might find his trail ends here forever. 

Stay Tuned.

   

 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 21, 2014, 11:49:35 PM
I like it when girls wear normal heels, but THIGH HIGH heels. That's not so sexy.

I lost all respect for Kirby again. He's a cowardly asshole but he doesn't deserve to get groomed by a grown man. at least not yet. As for Mandy, I hope she chokes to death on Ted's cum. In my opinion, she deserved to have her diseased pussy plastered up on the walls of Town. Gloria is still one of my most hated characters. She's such a smartass and it annoys the shit out of me

I'd personally liketo see Constantinos snap and actually be a man for once. For some reason Karen has no speaking lines for me when I talk to her other than saying "Hi" and saying "Oh cool, where'd you get that shirt".

I kinda feel bad for Gurney, getting his head bashed in like that. He was a rapist asshole but he was cool.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 24, 2014, 03:37:06 AM
Yeah, well somebody has to be the bad guy, and since Omar's gone....
Speaking of which, I might write a couple more posts about the Townies before they get shipped off to Prison.

Mandy's a cum-suckin' bitch all right, but right now I need her, to deal with another troublesome bitch.

Don't worry about Poundcake Kirby.  Afterwards, he will come out better than ever.

I'm not quite sure what Constantinos is going to do yet.  I won't know until he comes back.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on April 24, 2014, 12:20:18 PM
Beatrice's boobs cannot be sore, she has none. I think Beatrice would at least put up a fight, or at least do something that would help. Like rip off Mandy's clothes or pull some hair out. Ruin her makeup or something. I still can't get over those greaser Italian voices. I can imagine them all saying it which makes me laugh even more.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on April 24, 2014, 03:31:52 PM
Too bad Beatrice isn't much of a fighter. 

We'll see what happens....I was gonna write the fight sequence (it'll be brief, LOL), but I wrote too much on the lead-up to it, so just left a mini-cliffhanger.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on June 10, 2014, 09:51:45 AM
Klopke? Shouldn't it be Kopke?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 10, 2014, 04:12:45 PM
You are correct Sir.

I must have inadvertently added an 'L'.

Edit: Corrected.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Le Ghost on June 14, 2014, 11:18:45 AM
I'd like to read a Prequel, about the summer before, between the 'endless summer' and the start of the NES.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 14, 2014, 01:30:40 PM
I've been tossing around the idea of a Prequel....It would probably make the transition to the story easier (from the game story).   There are things I'll have to hide or be vague about, since a lot of them aren't revealed until later in the main story.  Probably do the prequel after I finish the Main Story and Epilogue, though. 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 25, 2014, 02:36:45 AM
Well, I went and done it now.  I know how I said that Chapter 9 would be the end.....But it's not.
There's just too much left to resolve, so I have to do a Chapter 10.  I'm NOT going to introduce any more puzzles or mysteries that have to be resolved.
Instead, I'm gonna clear up all the stuff that needs cleared up, and that will be it. 
I got the whole month of August and part of September to go.
I'll try to end on a weird note.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: The 510 Series on August 25, 2014, 05:58:31 AM
It will be missed. Although, having said that, it's been on for a bloody age and I can clearly see why you'd want to stop.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on August 26, 2014, 06:38:07 PM
YOU MUST NEVER END, YOU WILL TYPE YOUR FINGERS DOWN TO THE BONE!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 26, 2014, 10:09:48 PM
They already look like that now.  What more do you want ?

(http://image.shutterstock.com/display_pic_with_logo/802699/111212909/stock-photo-working-fingers-to-the-bone-111212909.jpg)
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Sphinx on August 27, 2014, 06:09:24 PM
Type with your toes until they are worn down to bone.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on January 16, 2015, 09:12:56 PM
Things are moving along quite a bit since our last posts.  The binding Agreement faces it's first real test.  Due to Tad's treachery at getting Bif out of the way and throwing the blame on the Greasers, he has managed to pull the remnants of the Preps  back together.  But his plans aren't done yet, he has more scheming to do in the wake of Hal and the Greasers being exonerated from the attack.  Having beaten Hal in the Ring, he intends to take all the Greasers down and solidify his dominance, thereby thumbing his nose at Tony, the Agreement,  and the rest of the Cliques who hold the Preps in suck low respect.  Will his plans succeed ?  Stay tuned, for the conclusion to the Bullworth Saga is only weeks away, in Bullworth Time.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 09, 2015, 02:49:26 PM
well, it seems like that turned out badly for the Preps after all.  Bet they didn't see that coming.
Now, Hog-tied on their own turf, what is to become of them now ?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Red Blaster on February 09, 2015, 04:05:48 PM
Is this just general commentary, or are you asking us to give suggestions on what's to happen to them?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on February 10, 2015, 02:05:18 AM
Just sort of general.  I know already what is to come, since this has been building everr since Tad engineered Bif's attack. 
Hog-tied as they are, they can't get free....What's unknown as yet is who will discover them and release them from their bonds.
Still working on that aspect.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 01, 2015, 07:25:49 PM
Welp, it's all over....The NES is Done.  Finished, after 5+ years. 
Will I be lonely, without the made-up characters to keep me company ?

Naw, not really.  It's sorta like leaving HS all over again.....Forget about most of the kids right after Graduation.
Still, will always treasure my time on "The Streets of Bullworth"......
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: DahCobra33 on June 01, 2015, 08:03:31 PM
No way!
I'll be stealing your characters for my stories
jk
Congrats for finishing the NES!
Just, don't leave this Board
After all,your profile says you're our God...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Owais Qadri on June 02, 2015, 01:13:19 PM
Nice nes
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 02, 2015, 01:35:44 PM
Why would I leave ?   
Just because I defeated the monster story that consumed me ?

Hell, I'm free now, FREE !!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Owais Qadri on June 02, 2015, 04:24:30 PM
Will there be another nes?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 02, 2015, 09:37:46 PM
Not unless someone else writes it.
And finishes it.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: DahCobra33 on June 05, 2015, 09:32:38 AM
Why would I leave ?   
Just because I defeated the monster story that consumed me ?

Hell, I'm free now, FREE !!
FREEEDOOOM!!!
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: DahCobra33 on June 05, 2015, 09:33:06 AM
Making a Never Ending Story ain't that easy...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 05, 2015, 04:18:59 PM
Got that right.  Sure didn't think at the beginning it would take 5+ years to write.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: DahCobra33 on June 05, 2015, 05:02:02 PM
Well,you've reached the end now...Rest,and don't leave the Board!!!
Otherwise...I'll steal your characters...Well,that ain't even an original threat anymore...I need another threat for you to not leave this place...Any suggestions Chuck?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 06, 2015, 12:26:06 AM
I'll only leave when everyone stops posting, or the board loses it's host, or if something happens to me or my internet connections.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: DahCobra33 on June 06, 2015, 01:25:12 AM
Well good to hear so.
Hope to see you writing again,some shorter stories of course.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 12, 2015, 08:42:58 PM
It's very great to see that there have now been 70,000 reads of the NES, the second-most of any thread reads on Bully-Board.

Thanks to all the (mostly invisible) readers on-line who have been, and continue to read the NES. 

(http://www.denavbooks.com/images/thanks4reading.gif) 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: DahCobra33 on June 12, 2015, 11:40:58 PM
Actually,I have to continue reading yet.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Owais Qadri on June 13, 2015, 02:22:52 PM
Did you do it for 6 years?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 13, 2015, 04:26:40 PM
Actually,I have to continue reading yet.

Once you get into Chapters 2 and 3, the tone becomes darker and eventually the scope of the true Evil in the Vale Valley is slowly revealed.

Did you do it for 6 years?

No, only 5 and a half.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Owais Qadri on June 13, 2015, 04:39:28 PM
Kl r u gonna stop nes now?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 13, 2015, 04:43:26 PM
Duh....I already finished it. 
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Owais Qadri on June 13, 2015, 04:44:32 PM
R u gonna do a new one?
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: MadmaN on June 13, 2015, 10:40:28 PM
I still gotta get around to actually reading it...rofl.

I managed to read I think the first couple posts worth and that was pretty good. Due to being involved heavily in writing my own fanfic, doing the art for it, dealing with projects outside of this, plus trying to release every bully lua script....this will have to go on my very...umm....long todo list. :)

Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 13, 2015, 11:41:48 PM
When I read book 7 of Harry Potter (about 200k words), it took me about 12 hours non-stop.  To read the whole series (1,084,000 words) would have taken me, I'd estimate, over 100 hours non-stop.  The NES, by word count (in the program) runs about 840,000 words.  So, yeah, it will take awhile to read.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Owais Qadri on June 14, 2015, 09:35:28 AM
It's worth it tho.
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: DahCobra33 on June 14, 2015, 06:38:37 PM
Last time I read I was around page 60 more or less...
To not spoil,I'm gonna say a greaseball is wearing a strengh jacket to get his girlfriend back...
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: Owais Qadri on June 14, 2015, 07:03:42 PM
We will all miss nes
Title: Re: NES Comments
Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 15, 2015, 02:43:25 AM
It isn't going anywhere.....The Story stays (for all dem slow readers).....

Last time I read I was around page 60 more or less...

Page 60 ?  It starts to get real interesting around that page......
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Post by: DahCobra33 on June 16, 2015, 08:08:32 PM
Good to hear so.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on June 16, 2015, 10:13:09 PM
The long torturous road to rescue the girls begins there.....Takes up the whole chapter.
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Post by: DahCobra33 on June 18, 2015, 05:39:28 PM
I think I've read 75% of it...
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Post by: F3ARTHEL33T on July 03, 2015, 11:37:48 PM
i liked everything you did with the story i just wish you didn't make the punks look like bitchs in the end having them killed and all
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 04, 2015, 11:50:16 AM
To be fair, only Sid got killed....But that was sorta necessary to the story.  Kenny, he was shot by Trent with a bent-coin bullet, and brother Denny was shot by a Guardsman, but both lived.
 
Of the Townies, Edgar had already been killed by Big Darrell the summer before, as told in a flashback, setting up Jimmy for the murder and arrest.  Omar drowned in the end, after being shot off the boat, but that was also necessary to the story.  None of the other Townies died, though a few got really messed up.

And somebody had to be bitches, didn't they ? 
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Post by: F3ARTHEL33T on July 04, 2015, 12:18:00 PM
another question i got is why didn't you just flat out kill of kurt as he was created from that dick wad dude man (from what i heard) and he just created unnecessary things for you to write the rockers clique didn't even have a personality their like the bullies in game i wish you killed off kurt and his squad way earlier   
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 04, 2015, 12:52:57 PM
Yeah, that was a pain....That was when it was an open story and I got stuck with new characters to deal with that I sure didn't plan on.  I then had to create that Clique, give names to the characters, and try to put some personality to the group somehow....I really only focused on Tibo and Benny mostly....Plus have to create a troubled personality for Kurt.  It all worked out, as I was able to make Kurt the mystery son of a mobster, and towards the end there made Kurt really psycho because of what Derby done to him plus handing him over to the Monks....I thought about just wiping him out altogether, but sometimes the best revenge is to let someone live permanently screwed up. 
If you notice, I never accorded the Rockers the same status as the regular Cliques, most of the time they were off-campus, and I sent the whole bunch packing after Chapter 6.  But you are right, it took extra story time away from the other regulars that I could have developed their characters better.     
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Post by: F3ARTHEL33T on July 05, 2015, 04:15:21 PM
you know at first i was pissed that you wrote jimmy out of the story but then i realized that if jimmy was still in the story their would be no story jimmy could fuck anyone up and stop all conflict
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 05, 2015, 04:29:41 PM
Actually, the story was started by Mercury with Jimmy already gone, so I had no control over that. 
Later, after Christmas, he was broken out of jail by Tony and Constantinos, but had to remain in hiding in the caves for most of it.
After those charges were dropped (end of Chapter 6), Jimmy and Zoe go with the Feds to testify, and are placed in Witness Protection.

In Reflection, it was the right move to have a new central character and a new villain (who turns out to be the cousin of Gary).....With Jimmy gone, the School falls back into it's own evil ways, allowing Jake to spread his evil influence. 
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Post by: F3ARTHEL33T on July 06, 2015, 06:43:08 AM
i was salty that jimmy was written out of the story for witness protection but i realized something nick has better fighting skills then jimmy but jimmy has a better pain threshold so it begs the question who is stronger
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 06, 2015, 08:09:06 AM
Nick was brought into the story with a set of fighting skills already in place, unlike Tony, who had to learn some.  Since the Hobo (Mr. Grant) had been 'beamed up' by Aliens in the original game, we couldn't use him to teach fighting skills.  Although near the end of the school year, he could hold his own with the likes of Jake, he was more of a negotiator than a fighter (skills encouraged by Mr. Galloway), and had learned Parkour from Laurent.

But as the story progressed, I tried to work some realism into it, especially where injuries were concerned   For anyone to take a severe beating and just show up fine the next day is extremely unrealistic, so those more badly injured from fighting and from weapons were usually sent to one of the Clinics for a stay for awhile.  Nick being shot in the neck got him a long stay in the Clinic, as did Tony's fall off the School building onto Ray.

In Jimmy's case, his role in the story was minimal, so there wasn't a real chance to highlight his fighting or recovery skills.  In the flashback scene, where Big Darrell uses Gary like a sledgehammer and swings him into Edgar and Jimmy, both Gary and Edgar are killed, only Jimmy survives, but was seriously wounded.  He is found an arrested for the Murders (unfairly), but as is revealed, is charged and incarcerated mostly because of his theft of 'The File', which the rich and powerful want back.  Jimmy never cracks or reveals that he gave 'The File' to Pete, who buried it on Pirate Island, which Tony later finds.     
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Post by: F3ARTHEL33T on July 06, 2015, 08:20:53 AM
when big darrell killed gary and edgar i couldn't help the image in my mind of gary t posing while being used as a human bat
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 06, 2015, 07:58:57 PM
Yeah, kind of funny, that.  I thought that was a fitting end for him. 
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Post by: DahCobra33 on July 06, 2015, 08:03:38 PM
Hmm,you seem to have a slightly dislike for Gary,don't ya'?

Well...I kinda laughed of what Zoe and Trent did to Big Darrell...He had it coming.
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 07, 2015, 10:05:14 PM
Yeah, I thought that was hilarious.......Only Zoe, out of all the girls, would go for revenge like that.  Fits her character.
I was only too glad to help her out.     
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Post by: DahCobra33 on July 07, 2015, 10:11:21 PM
Do you hate Algie and Darrell? Or you just like blowing nuts?
Either way,I like your style :)
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 07, 2015, 11:17:08 PM
Big Darrell was just an out-and-out nasty turd.  He deserved what he got, and then some.  I shoulda killed killed him, but didn't want to make Zoe a murderer.
Algie, I always had mixed feelings for that weenie.  Perfect kid to kick in the balls, shoot with the Spud Gun.  Disgusting he can't hold his bladder,  There had to be a way he could stand up for himself, show his revenge on his tormentors.  But it took getting his nut blown off to make him man-up for revenge.  To show just how crafty he could be, how precise he could carry out his one-boy attack against every Clique, even his own.  And to still be nerdy and dumb enough not to realize who had really been responsible for having maimed him.
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Post by: DahCobra33 on July 07, 2015, 11:26:54 PM
Algie is now too cool to be a nerd,and too nerdy to be anything else...

Aaahh,poor Algernon,he just wanted friends
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 07, 2015, 11:30:42 PM
He has Paris and the Freakshow Gang to be his friends now.

Ahhh, the Carny Life.
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Post by: F3ARTHEL33T on July 09, 2015, 01:05:43 AM
speaking of big darrell was he inspired by beta russell who was the leader of both the townies and a member of the punks
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Post by: DahCobra33 on July 09, 2015, 03:25:33 PM
Actually,by the time I was reading Darrell's part,I always imagined him as Beta Russell..
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 09, 2015, 03:49:37 PM
Big Darrell was made up specifically at first for the rape scene on Zoe, and was not a model of anybody, really.
I just needed a character that Zoe was unable to physically beat, who was able to overpower her and do what he wanted.
Since Zoe herself was a Townie, she was portrayed as being equal to the other Townies, well able to fend off any advances by them.  Also, she was never portrayed as being the GF of Edgar or any other Townie (similar to Beatrice not being the GF of Ernest). 
Big Darrell's presence comes at turbulent times for the Townies, since he murdered Edgar with no witnesses left alive but Jimmy, and takes charge of the Townies due to just brute strength alone.  Then it is assumed he starts hitting on Zoe, culminating with the rape scene.
Over the Summer and Fall, Darrell leads to Townies to deeper law-breaking behavior, and sets the stage for them to later commit more serious crimes, such as the School Invasion with Jake, and the Kidnapping and subsequent rapes of Karen and Melody even later on.  Big Darrell is later revealed to have been one of the Punks, who was cut loose by Sid for being too erratic and psychotic.   
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Post by: F3ARTHEL33T on July 09, 2015, 10:47:34 PM
i still have a few pages to read but i feel bad for clint i know he would have raped karen and melody but the thing is he didn't and as a reader it makes you think he doesn't deserve to be fucked over but what do i know i still haven't read the rest of the story
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on July 10, 2015, 01:52:27 AM
Clint Henry has one more small role to play on the final page. 
The most psychotic of all the Townies, Clint is getting off easy, being in Happy Volts while the rest are going to Prison. 
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on August 15, 2015, 02:11:51 AM
ANNOUNCEMENT --- The long-promised Re-Writes, Edits, & Additions have been added to Chapter 1 of the NES. 

These will greatly smooth out the continuity of this early part of Tony's early days at Bullworth, and provide for easier reading.
An additional 9000 words were added in the process.  Work on Chapter 2 will commence soon.
Re-Read, and Enjoy.  8)
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Post by: DahCobra33 on August 16, 2015, 05:40:12 AM
You can't escape the NES,looks like,heheh,good to hear,I'll re-read it as soon as I can
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 03, 2015, 04:50:41 AM
Ok. forgot to post this -- The Re-Writes, Edits, & Additions have been added to Chapter 2 of the NES.
About 4000 words were added in the process.  I finished them last weekend. 
Currently working on Chapter 3, which I hope will go faster.

Funny thing is I'm actually reading the story as I go along now.  Some things I even forgot about.   
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Post by: BloodChuckZ on September 28, 2015, 10:44:18 AM
The Re-Writes, Edits, & Additions have been added to Chapter 3 of the NES.
Not a whole lot of extra content here, a couple thousand words.  Most of this Chapter was trying to get it in better order,
Read and Enjoy !
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Post by: KBF on July 23, 2016, 08:24:32 AM
Hey just droppin by to give a big thanks for writing the story. By the time I was reading this I was quite mad about what you've done with Kurt, but forgot about this, when read the ending :P Till the last pages I had an almost ready post in my head where I wanted to argue about his character. Since Im a screenwriter I found his story much too dramatic comparing to every single one in the NES. But this is to be told for much longer post.
Besides his story what can I say more - its really good made, in Rockstar style - you really made place Bullworth the hell on earth :P You also made me reading something new for the first time in few years. Respect !

I'll also start reading much shorter Live and Die in Liberty, but for what I see its quite in the beginning. Since Im new to the site I didnt wanted to interrupt you guys, but if nobody cares for the story now ... can I join in :P ?

Cheers