Lawl, Chuck, you make Kurt seem weak. Anyway, just posted another Kurt happening...might as well check it out so Tony can kick his ass again. Lawl.
On the contrary, dudeman….Kurt is a dangerous character, and is in no way weak.
He has just been surprised by Tony a couple of times…And now, it seems that the mostly solitary rockers are beginning to loosely band together into a new clique because of the rough treatment that has landed one of their own in the Infirmary.
I foresee that he will become a very real threat to Tony, and Karen as well…..
Laurent began to drink at this night... But I decided to save him. I don't want him to get caught, no.. Just to take a secondary direction : alcohol in Bullworth ? But Tony has others things to do.
BTW, I modified a bit the greaser territory, by adding this shelter. Can you see where I placed it ?
At the Autoshop with the Greasers...
They'll have a baby with a daddy in each clique?! :o
I have so many useless facts I could start my own "Brain Wiki"....
All right, you people have been busy for a little while... Don't worry I'm BACK ! I was just on a karate competition yesterday... Felt too tired to even start my computer.
Brilliant, Mercury....Just Awesome....I've just made a little lien... It had to be a place that Laurent knew weel in the town, and I remembered that he had been talking about this french restaurant... Piece of cake ! With a little description, of course ! ;)
Didn’t know where to take Tony and Karen when they left the school....
That totally rocks.......
Yeah.....That's heroic too........Sort of......
I'll save you Karen, with my COCK! :cool:
Wish me Luck guys...I'm goin on a 3 day camping trip..Its freezing cold....Wont be able to write again till monday...BYE!
Oh, you just wanna start it all again ? No offense, Vasilije, let's make it good !
And, Chuck, as Frenchie, I was supposed to do the mushy stuff, uh... For Pinky, you know ? Haha !
I'm so glad you guys are getting back into this....(it's been lonely here...)
Both versions have merit.....
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Repo, I like your fight description....Very descriptive and plenty of action.
Some observations.....
Mr. Burton is the gym teacher in the Futsal match, and he should send Damon to the Infirmary rather than take him (Damon's a big boy and knows the way)....
There has been no fight between "Nick and Kirby" yet in this verson of the story. The only fight in this verson that Nick has had is with Trent and the two Bullies, Wade and Davis.
"Everyone went to the hole" means they have to sneak in through the outside basement door, or through the inside door by the school store, avoiding both the Prefects AND Mr. Luntz.
The "N" word is considered VERY racist over here....Maybe could be changed to something else (Black Boy ?)
I DO like that break, being saved by Tony, and the drink to re-vitalize Nick....That was good.
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Mercury, I liked the look of the fight from the mental side of it.....The mark of a true in-depth writer.
It's your call as to which verson we should keep.....But if you were to edit yours, as a kind of post-fight description and analysis, I believe both could be left (With the above changes, of course).
Your orignal ending will still work fine, Repo....Nick has one good ankle to throw that kick on.
If you ever saw "Karate Kid 1" the movie, the character Daniel LaRusso had a hurt leg and still finished off his opponet with a kick......
(If you deleted your ending and didn't save it, I have it).....
Well, I didn't really see a clique forming while reading the story... I told you, it will come itself :p
Anyway, is it ok if my stories concentrate on Nick? Because I'm not so familiar with the rest since I didn't read it all.
NO... PLANS ! Damn.
Don't worry about that, Vasilije, write about what you know the best. Just keep in mind that Tony isn't really a violent student. He prefers using his brain, and shakes his fists only in critical situations. He likes using other people's abilities to get success.
What can we say ? Strange things happen in Bullworth....A slingshot hold-up is not only likely, but a very real prospect, given that over here, people rob stores just by saying they have a weapon when they never really do.
Earlier question about Jake....It hasn't yet been revealed where he is from. His backstory will gradually be revealed, I'm planning on that through Chapter 4.
We'll have to see how it goes with the Preps....First Derby, once he gets out of the Clinic, should try to attack Kurt and the Rockers, as he is pissed about Pinky. When this fails, and when Derby realizes how outnumbered he is, he will have to resolve his issues with Tad (also over Pinky) and make the move to re-unite the clique....I vote for that.
"Nice !" Nick exclaimed while putting on his Letterman Jacket.
"That suits you, bro. Hey Kirby, I told you we had to take the big size for that tough guy !"
"Turn around, Nicky !" Christy said playfully.
Nick turned on his feet to wink at the girl, arms apart for her to admire his new jacket. He had immediately fell in love for her, whatever she was wearing. She was just the perfect girl for him, what surely wasn't the opinion of Pinky.
"Wait... Do you really like that guy ?" She asked.
"Calm down, Pinky, he looks hot after all, doesn't he ?"
"Not as hot as Tony." Pinky whispered proudly.
"What do you mean ?"
"Nothing. Just what I just said."
"Huhuh." Christy nodded, not convinced.
So Nick's life is a lie ? So he doesn't have his 4th degree Black Belt ?
Born in Jersey, moved to Los Angles ? A gangster Father, Mother escapes the mob to the west coast.......Or is that all a dream ?
Liked the fight....Good twists and turns, but Nick came through as we knew he would.
Good Job, Repo !
@ Repo....Has already been established that Nick & Mother moved to Bullworth from Los Angles, and that Nick stated he has 4th Dan Black Belt, and went to a Dojo there. No other back story exists so far as to his origins before that.
Introducing the element that he was born in Jersey, son of a gangster father is still a good back story, we will just need a element to explain the move to Los Angeles (Nick's Mother wanting to remove him from that sort of Mob influnce, maybe ?), and no explaination as yet as to why he was brought to Bullworth. Living in a slum Los Angeles area doesn't mean that they couldn't afford lessons or whatever....There are plenty of Dojos in the inner-city areas of L.A.
Then again, Nicky's family's past mob connections could be the reason he was brought to Bullworth somehow.....
@ Mike....No, I fully expected that that part would continue....As I'm sure the Greasers and others would continue to buy from other (Townie) sources in the Bullworth Town-New Coventry-Blue Skies area just as they did before. Tony's interest was that the Bullies not sell on campus, further upsetting the balance of the Clique structure.
Are you still planning for the Bullies to mount an Attack on Harrington Hall to locate and steal the other shield ? Best to strike soon before the Preps re-unite.
You know, I like to wear suits now. I love the way it can turn a man into someone elegant and classy.
You people calling me Bond gave me an idea... Now I got the avatar !
lol, there's some old rumor that parents tell there kids. They say if you play with yourself too much, you will eventually go blind.I don't have very many vision problems. I MEAN -
Poor Chuck... Now, kids, you'll know : get your handjobs by a qualified woman.
this being one of them.
What about little Miss. Jimmette Jumpers? 8)
ASK NOT WHAT YOUR SCHOOL CAN DO FOR YOU, ASK WHAT YOU CAN DO FOR YOUR SCHOOL !
Taking a break. :laugh:
Uhh....It is in the 'real' Endless Summer, and all the main storylines were over, so.....
And, yeah, it will end and also not end.Got'cha.
Shaycarl perhaps?http://www.youtube.com/user/shaycarl (http://www.youtube.com/user/shaycarl)
Why would I leave ?FREEEDOOOM!!!
Just because I defeated the monster story that consumed me ?
Hell, I'm free now, FREE !!
Actually,I have to continue reading yet.
Did you do it for 6 years?
Last time I read I was around page 60 more or less...